Exhale

an old poem ..Exhale is used many times over the years for many titles of all kinds of things .. i think it retains its allure and power, however ... just my opinion

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Exhale

My craving wailed;     

(banshee on the wind)

     gripping 

             petals,

     misting

             reason.

Whispers trace kisses,

                         fragmenting my thoughts.

Untamed--

          love lured me

     crimson,

          and purple.

                                        exhale.....................

                                                              ........................

                                                                              ................................................................................

E.

© 2013 Einstein Noodle

Author's Note

I read Seriana's poem "Exhale" https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/drushin703/2767099/#comment-4469383
and thought it would be fun to re-post mine .. they are so different in theme .. hope you like it .. let me know what you think Seriana! :)

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"Whispers trace kisses,
fragmenting my thoughts.
Untamed--
love lured me"...

And then..Wait for it....aaah, "exhale..................
Just so breathtaking (literally!) and sensual E. My heart added extra beats while reading. This is love as it should always be - teetering, suspended in the passion and heat of the moment before...just like your supremely expessive lines and perfect pauses...
Loved this hugely and thank you for pointing me to Seriana's poem as well my friend!

[Einstein Noodle]

you have made my day Annette! gave me a good feeling inside with your review .. yes .. we can get knocked for a loop and loose .. or we just may win ... all it takes is that "One" eh!? thank you so much!
E.

[adornoscousin]

While I love the words...I really like the use of the ellipses/dots. IT does feel like an exhalation. Sometimes we have to do that when we are in love...just breathe. I also like the interesting juxtaposition between love and reason- sometimes these forces are opposed.

[Einstein Noodle]

they certainly are my friend ... love flames and the mind goes out the window ;))))))))))) thank you for taking time ... joy and peace!
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing and beautiful words shared my friend. The words danced to meaningful and understandable thoughts. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

your a good friend here John .. thank you for all your kindnesses ... glad you enjoyed :)
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy my friend and you are welcome. I hope you are doing well and staying safe.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep! for the last week and a half we have a steady 4 active cases in my County (which is sparsely populated .. i suspect those 4 should be out of the woods this week ... wishing you the same John .. peace, comfort and safety in your ways

[lightsong]

WOW I am jealous Mr. E, it's like filling your heart with feelings to almost burst then.... E X H A L E... and send it all through air, this free wild love... yes, it should be received through this powerful EXHALE of yours.

[Einstein Noodle]

i know we are on the same path as concerns breath and breathing .. in and out ;) and yes .. a wild passionate love ... we should never get "too old" for it eh!? ... hugs and joy to you Light!
E.

[lightsong]

YOU TOO OLD!? never dear E ;) and WE are all at that same path aren't we? we ALL breathe don't we? I feel I am inspired for a new thing now :)

[Einstein Noodle]

[Pryde Foltz]

Gorgeous minimalist piece. Few words but each chose to perfection.

[Einstein Noodle]

ohh thank you so much .. means a lot to me ma'am .. i like minimalism .. this is an old one and tho now i don't necessarily think consciously about it .. i still try to strip away the un-needed .. really happy you enjoyed reading Pryde .. luv and peace
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

To me the way a poem looks on the page is almost as important as the words ... minimalism is key to that:)

[Einstein Noodle]

I think so too ...

[Riss Ryker]

This poem brought me back to a place in time where need and first love ruled over me. This poem makes you FEEL and remember. Just amazing how you took so few words and created magic. Well done!!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much Riss! yes .. first love .. fire and ice eh!? :))))))))) i appreciate you taking time and will return the favor for sure .. blessings on ya!
E.

[emmajoy]

This brazen huzzy read your words four times and only now have exhaled for fear of losing my life! What a beautifully created piece of ... loving lust. Isn't wild disheviled stuff, tis reality with every ingredient in the book. Magnificent magic!

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness Em .. brazen hussy indeed! how you make me smile .. and thank you for reading all my intent in this one .. your the best Em!
E.

[Dave Brown]

Certainly an eventual necessity, however I am just as inclined to hold my breath while I try to think and exhale after finding a solution

[Einstein Noodle]

you must be a Zen master my friend :) like the ancient crocs that slow everything down ..heart beats at 2-3 per minute .. WOW! .. makes me want to take a nap :))))))))))))))))) thanks for stopping Dave! always a pleasure to have your reviews and unique take on things
E.

[Patricia Wedel]

An Irish saying... “it is a long road that has no turning”. Your poetry turns the journey into the phases of the Moon where feelings can change and play a new song. gently, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

oh the Irish .. we get drunk and say things eh!? :))))))))))))))))))))) thanks so much for taking time Pat ..always!
E.

[Patricia Wedel]

May ye be in Heaven before the Devil knows ye passed the Pearly Gate... see ye there by the River... where Rose of Sharon grows...
“Petal”...

[Einstein Noodle]

Gun toir an Tighearna Math còrdadh riut, ... ach chan eil ro thràth! ....or May the Good Lord take a liking to you,... but not too soon! :)

[Robert Trakofler]

I know I have used exhale and respire many times in my lines there is something congruous to those words in the absorption and sharing of self in a movement, moment, or realization that is poetry

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! there are a tremendous number of creative writings that use Exhale in title and/or theme .. i think respire might be one of your own Robert ... but i am not studied and can only rely on my limited exposure .. i recall the poem you recently used respire in and it has stuck with me .. be well .. thanks so much for reviewing ...
E.

[Robert Trakofler]

I have used respire a few times I love that word too:)

[sharonlee]

Einstein, a breathless hello!
I truly felt myself exhale at the last word... you built just the perfect amount of expectation within these lines...
I'm inspired now to play the word myself....

I hope you are well.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes!! i think you should .. and please let me know when you post it Sharon ... its a great word and title used many many times from all angles .. thanks for letting yourself into this one .. you bless me day darlin' :)))))))
E.

[sharonlee]

A pleasure to linger with your poetic thoughts... I wrote something last night, will post it now xx

[sharonlee]

I did post a few days ago... it's floating around here somewhere xx

[Einstein Noodle]

my computer has been gone the last several days. just getting things back to normal .. stopping by your streets now. ;)