Failure

Say Something

Without words

No breath can move a

life source to the brain

Its like falling into a grain 

bin:

a quick sand death 

choked with chaff and seed dust

I can't breath

I am at a loss                  lost

without words but

stay with me and

please don't go               please

Don't Go! 

E.

12/27/20

Author's Note

Reviews

[Re-Pete]

without risking failure there would be no success. better to fail than never try. bridging a divide is not an easy thing. your structure, layout and words attempt to do just that. so close, so close. we feel lost until that last step is completed. 'please don't go' - indeed ... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

dang you touch my heart sir .. what a wonderful review to receive on this poem .. i don't know what to say sir .. but thank you ... for reading with sensitivity and taking time to review .. you made me day Pete!
E.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

One can get up after they fall , but how unfortunate it is to not know the feeling of running. PLease don't go hit's differently in your piece, and the way you have penned this .. splendid .. what more can someone like me say ! but it is really a pleasure to visit you after sooo long ! thank you :)
With love , Ankita

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! you are right about that line .. i debated on whether to include it or not .. it doesn't quite fit does it? .. but i wanted to make the poem just a bit more personal and a good friend and mentor told me to leave it in by all means. ;) we do influence one another don't we?! thank you so much Ankita! great that you are around .. right here at the Cafe'
E.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

Glad you decided to keep it ! i was a bit busy in writing my 1t poetry book , and now i am more nervous when it's written , lol. i am around yea , happy to hear from u .
keep safe and smiling

[Nix is typing...]

It's always a pleasure to read you, Mr. Noodle. :) I must say I have to agree with every other comment on this poem...what is success without failure? No dopamine would pump through your mind if you always succeeded and never ever failed, repetition can tend to get boring, I think. I believe that you need to fail at least once to feel the pleasure of success...si? Those last few lines tore at my heart...I honestly couldn't tell you why, but I really felt them... Like I had fallen in love with a movie character and watching his girlfriend leave him in the pouring rain (okay, I'm being a bit dramatic, lol) but I enjoyed the read!!! As always, It was so good!!!

Kindly, Nix ❤️️

[Einstein Noodle]

no ... not being dramatic at all Nix .. i am really happy you felt that in the closing ... you are always kind in your reviews and i take you words to heart .. i agree .. its those failures and pain that teaches us .. far more than joy and "peachy keen" ;) ........... it tickles me to see your avatar on me pages ... so nice to be getting to know you .. right here at the Cafe' :)
E.

[Nix is typing...]

.................... :D
I always try to make my reviews kind and compassionate...I like seeing your avatar pop up on my page tooooooo :3 And I love reviewing you cuz I love seeing the comments you've left on my reviews, they're also so sweet!!! I think it's nice getting to know you too...right here on the cafe xD :)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ....................

[sedulous_mind]

Really nice writing! Very deep...love it!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for taking time sedulous ..i don't recall that we have met ... i will certainly return your visit ... glad you enjoyed this one
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Isn’t funny how powerful failure is because we only learn from our mistakes and maybe that is why we place a lot of emphasis on failures and have the scars as reminders so we try not to travel down this road again.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep ... i agree .. failures teach .. success encourages .. thanks for stopping one more time .. on me pages ... right here at the Cafe'
E.

[Cassie]

Silence can be a very loud conversation and it also can hurt alot, enjoyed this

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Cassie ... yep .. sometimes it can feel like someone has freshly cut our the tongue of us eh!? i always appreciate your reviews .. thank you!
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

It kinda makes me
think of my past toxic
relationship I was in it
was like silent dead air
a dead passion.

Failure to understand
each others hurt or our words
in silence but I became the mature one and walked away
and healed ☺

In this poem I see two lovers being lost for words as if the air has taken their breath away and they tried but it was time to go their separate ways.


Thank you for stopping by my page
I hope you and your family is staying warm and is safe. friend take care☺💛

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Benita .. we are well and safe as can be .. i appreciate your take on this and the time you spent to read and review .. really happy it speaks to that part of your life!
E.

[Poetic Beauty]

There is usually a whole conversation going on in the mind when words are lost verbally. Please don’t go...
This says so much in a few short words

[Einstein Noodle]

i appreciate you taking time Ms. Beauty! i am happy it spoke to you! love and joy
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

If only those we cherish the most understood what their very presence adds but alas these are the one that often don't believe they are enough.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! i suppose that is true .. love your take on this Pryde ... you are a sensitive and insightful woman says i! ... be well ... love, peace and assurance to you my friend.
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

Sweet talker:)

[Einstein Noodle]

;) ........................... kisses baby!

[Intothemilkyway]

When you fail you feel your worst. But just remember that failure keeps you going to a better happy place.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it sure can my friend ... when there is only up left to go .. might as well grab hold and ride it right?! Thanks for stopping Ms. Milky Way bar. ;)
E.

[Corset]

what would we do without our Muses? When the words come with every breath what good is a poet without words, the suffocation is actually painful. Love this one. (what we have here is a failure to communicate!)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes indeed .. love that movie! "...a failure to com - muni-kate." .. love your review ma'am! thanks so much for taking time to share it with me. love and peace!
E.

[Corset]

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