Failure

Say Something

Without words

No breath can move a

life source to the brain

Its like falling into a grain 

bin:

a quick sand death 

choked with chaff and seed dust

I can't breath

I am at a loss                  lost

without words but

stay with me and

please don't go               please

Don't Go! 

E.

12/27/20

Author's Note

Reviews

[Re-Pete]

without risking failure there would be no success. better to fail than never try. bridging a divide is not an easy thing. your structure, layout and words attempt to do just that. so close, so close. we feel lost until that last step is completed. 'please don't go' - indeed ... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

dang you touch my heart sir .. what a wonderful review to receive on this poem .. i don't know what to say sir .. but thank you ... for reading with sensitivity and taking time to review .. you made me day Pete!
E.

[NormaZ]

Thank you for your wonderful poem, and I loved the image, where did you find it? Did you write the poem 1st, and found the picture to go with it, or did you find the picture and then write the poem? It made me think that sometimes when you (or someone you know), is hurting, all you need is someone’s presence. It doesn’t matter what they say, as long as they stay beside you.

[Einstein Noodle]

i write then look for pics and a song ;) thank you for reading and taking time to let me know your thoughts .. yes! when there is grief and loss one of the best things we can do is just be there and be present .. i agree 100% ... most of the things we say in such a time are inadequate .. love and peace
E.

[Aura]

First of all, interesting presentation! It seems like the words are falling into a deep well, never to be found again. Without speaking what's on your mind, your bound to fall. Take the risk, say something, you'll be glad you did... even though it might scare you! Thanks for sharing!!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for choosing to read this one Aura! i'm grateful for the time you spend on my streets always .. yes! without words we are kind of lost aren't we?! tho gestures and actions do have an important play in the scheme of things too ;) peace and joy and safety my friend!
E.

[Aura]

Ah yes actions and gestures speak louder than words sometimes!

[LJW]

How many times have I stood silently at the end of a crumbling bridge.
There are a couple I should've backed way up on, run, and jumped. Grabbed that person and never let go.

[Einstein Noodle]

YES! ... i hear that loud and strong, LJW .. many times words fail us .. in most important moments .. we become mute .. and in a twinkling the moment passes ... thanks very much for taking time and finding this one to read. I appreciate your impressions very much!
E.

[LJW]

Same...........

[Betty Hermelee]

Words are the essence of a full mind… a full breath, without words, we fall into darkness, we call for help to get us out of a sand pit ( where we can’t breath) so please get me out of this mess.
Good point noodle!
Best
B.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! we can be crippled for the lack of them .. in love... in desperation ... in joy .. seems in those times turning to the ehteral may allow us the only door to releasing them .. wordless .. boy .. your review inspires me Betty! thanks so much for reviewing .. always .. much appreciated!
E.

[Betty Hermelee]

you're very welcome!

[Caroline B A Maguire]

The desperation is palpable..I can feel it..it begs the question..did they leave ?I hope not..profound..

[Einstein Noodle]

good morning my new found friend! thank you for stopping by .. it does beg the question doesn't it ;))))
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. "desperation" hits the mark exactly. things happen in life don't they .. and we have no control over them nor the waves created in their wake. ;)

[Barbara Walker]

Geez, E, I've been gone so long and one of the first poems that I read hits me in the gut bringing up feelings from my past and the lump in my throat almost chokes me. //well done, my friend, well done.

[Einstein Noodle]

I am so happy to see you back Barbara!! Welcome Back!!!! :) thank you for reading and leaving your thoughts my dear friend! this review encourages me for sure ... best of the day to ya! see you around ... right here at the Cafe'
E.

[Chris Shaw]

A second visit as there are no new poems from your distinguished pen Mr E. Always on returning to your work, there is something new to be gleaned. Here I thought long and hard on communication, or rather lack of it and how utterly devastating the results can be. Warm wishes from across the pond.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! when we want to say it and just can't get it out .. or know we should but won't ... and i so agree .. the results can be devastating ... i feel pretty honored you read a second time ... i am completely non-motivated to write .. i don't know what the deal is ... lots of changes with Norma's passing ... i have been doing things we were "getting around to" that i know would please her .. maybe that's it .. i don't know ... have you tried reading on my last page or one in between ..must be something in them you haven't read yet ;)) luv on ya .. you are a blessing ... right here at the Cafe'

[Chris Shaw]

I will take a peep at some of your earliest writes. You will write again, when the muse thinks it is time. For now find contentment in those things you had planned together. Yes, that would please Norma. Take care Mr E.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Chris! I have been working on another hymn poem and it is almost ready to post ... love and joy!

[KWP]

Isn't it funny how at times we lack the courage to speak our truths, we lack the courage to face head on an issue that may be so easily solved with a few mere words.

I remember having a conversation with a friend years ago. He never had a good relationship with his brother and he had not spoken to him in years and it was he who actually said 'it only takes one person to pick up the phone and make the call and then all previous issues have a chance at evaporating' it's so true. This is a strange fear.

Something I have always told my boys is - there has to be one person who is always prepared to be the better person.

Even though the above may not be in context with th poem - I can truly relate to the stranglehold lack of words can have. This is why I will always speak to force a solution when there are people I truly love involved.

[Einstein Noodle]

Oh! it is absolutely the context of the poem Elizabeth .. and i love how you put it .. we have all had and will probably continue to have those moments that could be made into something of substance by just being straight forward about feelings and thinking ... I mean .. if i want to talk to a beautiful woman but feel so terribly nervous about it .. I might say .. "Hi ... I feel very nervous right now; but I think you are very attractive and I would like to talk to you for a while." ... but hey ... i was a wall flower .. it takes time to learn :)))) speaking of time ....thanks for taking time dear one .. hugs galore to you .. and your friend flying in.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I really like this one, the relatability of it, due to fear of failure... it all works together very well. It's true though, as others have said, what is success without failure? It wouldn't be nearly as satisfying, but the message you write here is great.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ... for sure Colacat! The natural world always seeks a balance ;) I believe you are right .. we a formed more assuredly by getting up after a failure of one kind or another ... the taste of victory just a temporary emotion. :) peace and love
E.

[Rick Puetter]

Yeah, interpersonal relation failures are the worst. They are much worse than career failure, and they scare more deeply. A very interesting and powerful write.

Rick

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! scary indeed .. i think more especially for men .. makes things so messy ... unnecessarily ;)
E.