Hello Mr E. Your title grabbed me big time. Took me right back to when I would pluck the petals off daisy heads) replacing the she with a he though) On reflection how cruel that was. I really do like the haiku/senryu structure. There is so much that can be said in 17 syllables and far more between the lines too. These take skill to do well and yours are exceptionally colourful, flowery and scented. I have to say I do love the heady, intoxicating perfume of garden flowers. Imagery from dawn to sunset, complete with mountains and moonlight. A different kind of love poem, so very creative and very much enjoyed. I lingered here quite a while. Hope you are well my friend across the pond while Miss Covid is calling on us.
thank you so much as always Christine ... you have a knack for seeing and feeling the whole of poems.. read morethank you so much as always Christine ... you have a knack for seeing and feeling the whole of poems .. couldn't be more gratified for your review .. you are a dumplin' :) and very talented .. thanks so much for taking time to read and let me know your thoughts ... yeah .. Covid ... we need to remain updated on true substantiated facts about it but honestly .. i am pretty sick of so much coverage .. it sadly reminds me far to much of the body counts during the Viet Nam War ...we can't stay huddled in the cave any longer ... we risk life and limb every day .. all day ... before, during and after Covid .. we are well ..thank you .. and praying the same for you, yours and us all .. another day in the jungle right?! ;)))))))))))
Can you remember those lyrics Mr E. You have put a wide smile on my face.
On a more serious note, I am so sorry that present circumstances are a reminder of Vietnam :(( That is a perpetual ache I would imagine.
4 Years Ago
ahahaha no ... i'll have to look that one up ;) we have well enough ache and pain .. i think it the .. read moreahahaha no ... i'll have to look that one up ;) we have well enough ache and pain .. i think it the far better teacher than joy however ... so glad we can chat ... right here at the Cafe' .. i went on a bit of vacation .. just returned a couple days ago and finally am back in my groove ... lots of reading to do :) love on ya!
I loved the stringing together of haikus!!! The imagery was great in this, I really like how you described...well I can't think of any other way to describe this, the ups and downs of a relationship. It was honestly the title that pulled me in, but it was the little haikus that kept me reading!! :) This was a great poem, Einstein Noodle!!!! :))))
its a special treat when someone looks around my pages a bit to find something that leaps out at the.. read moreits a special treat when someone looks around my pages a bit to find something that leaps out at them .. truly, Nix, I appreciate you taking time .. glad you like it.. it was a bit of a challenge to find flowers whose meaning kind of matched the rising and falling in this .. thank's again.. love your avatar ears :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
E.
3 Years Ago
It was my pleasure :) I enjoyed the read
Thank you! I actually wear them everywhere, I get a .. read moreIt was my pleasure :) I enjoyed the read
Thank you! I actually wear them everywhere, I get a lot of looks and compliments, although a lot of the looks are probably saying "What a weirdo" lol. But I try to embrace my weirdness :3
3 Years Ago
ahahahaha as well we all should Nix .. luv on ya! :)
You so beautifully described the torturous highs n' lows in the game called love--from dawn to dusk he does or he does not S***:)...such scrumptious images...each a paining of it own:)
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Kira! thank you so much ... i feel especially humbled and blessed by this review of yours .. i think.. read moreKira! thank you so much ... i feel especially humbled and blessed by this review of yours .. i think your talents put you on a path to stardom one day ;)) love and joy my new found friend .. top o' the mahrnin' to ya!
E.
4 Years Ago
Your words brighten up this otherwise gray gloomy morning...you spoil me...I feel the same...have a .. read moreYour words brighten up this otherwise gray gloomy morning...you spoil me...I feel the same...have a wonderful day my friend 🌻🌞🎶
What a lovely and stirring collection of haiku. I especially like the rhyming aspect and the way you give a definite tenor to the different moods of love and heartbreak.
The ‘she loves me’ haiku are soft and subtly sensuous while the ‘she loves me not’ haiku offer a sense of the sadness or loneliness of being jilted. I love how you created that effect with your imagery and showed rather than told about the heights and depths of love.
A great offering from you, E. Lovely to read you today!
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
wow....Ellis...thank you so much! i am humbled and so happy you saw all that .. wow .. i am so pleas.. read morewow....Ellis...thank you so much! i am humbled and so happy you saw all that .. wow .. i am so pleased! thank you!!
E.
Excellent stamina in this one as you keep the threads together in the seven haiku and blend in the moving of the earth and flowers in colour and scent. Ends on a high-she loves you!
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
thank you so much for your appreciation of the challenges in this .. and that's what it was for me ... read morethank you so much for your appreciation of the challenges in this .. and that's what it was for me .. rather than a flash of "inspiration" ... so happy you see what my attempt was .. the high note in closing was random :))))))))))))))))))))
E.
"fire born must go out" -- my guttural response to this was, "Ain't that a goddamn truth?"
That's what my first thought, and it almost made me laugh out loud. But, I guess, that's a good thing - that your poem had such a markedly strong effect on me...:)
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
yep .. ain't it the truth indeed ;) glad it gave you a bit of a chuckle ... life is a fickle mistres.. read moreyep .. ain't it the truth indeed ;) glad it gave you a bit of a chuckle ... life is a fickle mistress ..thank you for taking time Laz .. i don't believe we have met before .. i will repay your kindness and take a peek at your streets .. right here at the Cafe'
E.
I love this, very creative and all the corresponding haikus are gorgeous, my jaw dropped when i looked up the monkey face orchid !!!!! so gonna order one, heh ,yea right now :D
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
OHHHHHHHHH i am so glad you looked that up, Corset .. they're incredible aren't they??!! and of cour.. read moreOHHHHHHHHH i am so glad you looked that up, Corset .. they're incredible aren't they??!! and of course i am happy you enjoyed this mish mash attempt .. thank you so much for reading and taking time to review .. love and peace always!
E.
Wonderful use of words and thoughts. The words danced to meaningful thoughts and wonder. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry my friend. I did enjoy this poem.
Coyote
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
thanks again my friend! for taking time .. this one was a bit of a mind challenge and fun for me .. .. read morethanks again my friend! for taking time .. this one was a bit of a mind challenge and fun for me .. God bless!
E.
I like the pace that you created with this piece, and the motion I can sense of the flower twisting and turning, back and forth, like a pendulum, like the nature of this love, it can't quite find its grasp. Hot and cold, light and dark. I'm happy that the poem ended on a petal of love, even though this may be behind the view of dreams. I really enjoyed this, and its beautiful imagery.
thanks LouBelle! thank you very much for taking time and for your encouraging review .. i am happy t.. read morethanks LouBelle! thank you very much for taking time and for your encouraging review .. i am happy that you enjoyed it ... i had fun working it out ... and it felt "right" when i posted it .. but having others enjoy the experience is what its all about after all .. ain't it!? ;) love and happiness my friend
E.
4 Years Ago
Absolutely, that's why we do it... ain't it?! :)))
I like the way you alway lead the reader. The quick and easy banter, of pairing moments within the day to emotions.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
hey kiddo :) i was just on my way to read another chapter of your book ... thanks for stopping to re.. read morehey kiddo :) i was just on my way to read another chapter of your book ... thanks for stopping to read and review ... tickles me innards even more so as we have met in person ... when I am done I intend to visit FB and visit that poetry group .. thanks ever so much for our long friendship here and now in our magical Ozark Mountains as well ... love and peace
E.
I love this I laughed and smiled
but I had to look you up because
writers cafe said your account
didn't exist I was like that isn't
correct so I had fun with that
haha...
But here we are
I found you once again
my friend and I haven't
been on here in awhile
and I have new poems
just been too tired to
post anything.
I hope you and
your family is well 😊👍
she loves me -
darkly dawn into grey
oak limbs creak awake the day
slightest light blinding
she loves me not -
saffron crocus spreads
mirage horizon blazes
pink and orange collide
she loves me -
mismatch of color
intoxicating wonder
clematis climbing
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
thanks for stopping Benita! yeah! i'm still here .. i love this place! so many wonderful art to read.. read morethanks for stopping Benita! yeah! i'm still here .. i love this place! so many wonderful art to read and artists to get to know ;) thank you for hanging in and re-finding me ... not sure what glitch may have caused that .. we are happy and well here in the Ozarks .. have not had to change my life style much at all as i am content to be home most of the time anyway ... peace and safety
This morning as I began to log in to WC, it occurred to me what an inspiring and comfortable place this has become for me.
There are so many talented people sharing, encouraging, teaching and learni.. more..