i Want

i Want

i want your eyes to speak as

hands that grace lilting southern magnolias ...a

tensile tenuto .... a

leaving of finger tips  stars tracing

i want

hot cocoa and ground red pepper

your hair alive with

emeralds  streaming seaside pearls

that sacred place

i want 

breath to my life 

and drinking

each from one dawn to another

impaling our thoughts ..........a

soul quenching,  wanting  thirst 

i want you.

E.

11/29/2019

Author's Note

Reviews

[Eilis]

I really like the way you mix ideas here. The sensual alongside symbols of comfort. The emeralds and hot cocoa (albeit spicy :D). These juxtapositions speak to me of a greater depth than just a physical want. The soul wanting another soul intertwined with it perhaps.

Sometimes it’s not possible to get close enough. There are distances even in closeness that make it difficult to feel a complete sense of satisfaction.

But your poem reaches. That tenuto is inspired. What a lovely way of thinking about it. Musicality and stopping time to hold on. At least that’s how it shakes out in my head.

This is lovely work, E. Love and desire do create beautiful landscapes in the head-heart. When we step back and let them speak without fear.

[Einstein Noodle]

your review hits every note Ellis .. i am blessed this reached you in all the ways it should .. thank you for such a sensitive thorough read .. so happy it put you there .. i had not thought of those times that no amount of closeness will achieve a fulfillment looked for ... a whole other ballgame eh!? hmmmmmmmmmmm might just tuck that away and steal it from you! ;)
E.

[Eilis]

I look forward to reading your take on the idea, perhaps. You’re very welcome, E.

[Carola]

hi einstein, i'm no romantic but i loved this poem & actually 'got it'!
nice poetic imagery here, congratulations. 👏
cheerio carola
ps. i do look at your poetry but as I stated in my profile if I don't get it, then I don't comment.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ... we know each other a bit, Carola .. and i know the more abstract of my poems do not speak to you .. i love that you read them anyway .. feel free to let me know that you "got nothing out of this one" any time you like ... i listen even more closely to constructive critique ... and drink in any and all encouragement ... both lend validation don't you think?! love on ya .. and thanks for stopping by and checking out my stuff ..
E.

[Unspoken poet]

such a wonderful write, i loved that picture that you used.

[Einstein Noodle]

i appreciate that Kay-T ... so happy you enjoyed reading .. and the pic! yes .. i love it too .. was lucky to come across it .. i hear his plaintive calling every single time i look at it ;) be well...keep staying safe my new friend!
E.

[.]

I believe your final line sums the whole poem up perfectly here.....we can have all the material wants that our heart desires but it never compares to having that one special person beside us to share all of those desires with. This is quite a romantic poem, very visual and sensual and that accompanying picture just adds to the intrigue and sense of romanticism. Sometimes its the simple things that are all we need. Fine expression here, dear E! Much enjoyed! :))

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Jamila! i'm so happy you reviewed this one ... and gratified you found something worthwhile in it ... i so agree with your attitude about material things and the importance placed on them ... i think we are born with a need to connect in a spiritual way .. with one another and with our Creator ... the more we focus on that .. the stronger it grows ... we become more enlightened ... i was really happy to have found the pic ... it signified a lot of what i attempted in the poem ... thanks again for this visit .. great to get to know you a bit more ... all the time .. right here at the Cafe' :)
E.

[Dave Brown]

This appears like one of those never ending human conditions
Never satisfied with what we have and always wanting more

[Einstein Noodle]

g'day to ya Dave! is this our first meeting? ... i will have to stop by and say hi as well ... yes .. we can certainly entertain a lot of things just out of reach can't we ;) thank you for reading and taking time to leave your thoughts .. much appreciated :)
E.

[Dave Brown]

i see I have offered a comment previously
this time I will say that you have also complimented your write with a beautiful image
Altogether, a very enjoyable read

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks man! yes .. i love that pic as well .. still speaks to me .. luv and joy on ya Dave!

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

I want never gets...desires and dreamz ... what is wanted is not always needed ...but the beauty of the words you write here is something all should have...I wish upon these words as well...🌹

[Einstein Noodle]

yes sometimes .. always wanting ;} and truly not always needed ... certainly a motivation though .. either way ;) yes .. that sacred place .. something we can all use ... and benefit from the wanting ;)) love your review .. and what a mesmerizing new avatar!! kind of mysterious :) thanks for taking time Thoughts! i appreciate you!
E.

[Susan 🦋]

Oh la la! of longing want and desire!... " impaling" is ... Hmmm stopping the flow for me. I might have chosen a different word... BUT loving the feel of his one. :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ... i see your point .. it is a bit of a contrasting "image" ... i am taking your thoughts to heart ... i think as it is ...perhaps covers the sacrifice loving brings .. the willingness to suffer ;) please .. what words come to your mind???
E.

[Susan 🦋]

Held captive in thought....
captivating thoughts
penetrating thoughts
Tantalizing...
Ohh I see your point...but I didnt feel that in this one. I also would lay this out differently... just me lol Don't want to step on toes here :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

oh...what good is it to be here if we can not challenge one another .. respect in our differing is much easier than in politics :)))))))))) i like the smoother edges of captive .. and penetrating is a great choice for this one too ... i may just change it .. but if not ... your views have given me pause to reflect objectively a bit more for whatever "next one" i come up with ... thanks again for your reviewing and constructive criticism .. i am not offended easily ... i wear steel toed boots ;)

[Cassie]

This is such a sweet poem, how I have smiled reading it all the way to the end, it has some warmness. I loved it,let me re-read it

[Einstein Noodle]

what more of a blessed review could one ask for .. that you enjoyed the experience and want to read again ... makes me day Cassie! thanks so much for taking time and all your kindnesses here at the Cafe'
E.

[Cassie]

You are welcome my friend

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a lovely piece with sweeping emotions and nice imagery. I love the image you chose for this

[Einstein Noodle]

me to Lyn! that suspended whale screams at me ;) thanks for taking time and finding my little love poem .. and your kind, encouraging review :) love forever dear friend!
E.

[MomzillaNC]

A passionate plea. Great imagery and use of metaphor

[Einstein Noodle]

;) Thanks Mom!
E.

[Corset]

goodness, this is exquisite, I can actually feel the tug in this desire filled decadent long tall drink, where are there any pieces in this puzzle? I usually have to think on it for a bit, I did have to look up tensile tenuto , love how you used that , and the "chocolat" recipe for desire and it delivers a straight forward
tense long note of wanting, just beautiful, love the photo

[Einstein Noodle]

you scooped up all i was trying to serve, Corset ... i could not feel any more gratified as a result ... i love the pic as well ... i may have to get it tattooed on me :)) peace and joy in writing and all other things too!
E.