Sad that we live in a plastic throw away society..what a mess modern mankind has created..and the ocean strives still to caress us with beauty..a hard task for nature to struggle through such disregard and mess..your writing is always so well expressed a delight to read
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
yes yes yes Fran! exactly it ... how She must moan at the effort :((( thanks so much for stopping an.. read moreyes yes yes Fran! exactly it ... how She must moan at the effort :((( thanks so much for stopping and taking time to review ... peace and joy Fran! :)
E.
Oh wow, I feel sadness in your write, very well expressed. I like your song choice as well
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
oh kescha! thank you for noting the song! it fits in funky kind of way .. wasn't sure if it would ad.. read moreoh kescha! thank you for noting the song! it fits in funky kind of way .. wasn't sure if it would add that element of a romance .. and a sailing away or wanting that lover ... thanks for taking a peek on me pages ... glad to have met you!
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What a vivid, jarring description of the relationship between man and the ocean. We have a hard time understanding the impact of our actions and even when it is there for us in plain sight, it still doesn't elicit widespread change.
I love the way you used the guise of an abusive relationship...because that is the truth of it. We are frittering away the things that keep us alive and doing it with abandon. It's difficult to make the shift, though. We've been living one way for so long and now we are trying to relearn everything, essentially.
Great, thought-provoking poem.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
yes yes and yes .. this kind of change we need is so slow .. but we are working at it .. small thing.. read moreyes yes and yes .. this kind of change we need is so slow .. but we are working at it .. small things we can do everyday will make a big difference .. i just know it! thank you for pointing out the abusive relationship .. its at the core of what i was attempting with this one .. love and joy my friend!
E.
This is a vivid and very intense depiction of what seems to me to be a toxic relationship. I have experienced this, and it often seems like an endless, bloody war between two souls clashing.
I may be wrong, but that is my interpretation.
Well written, well done.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
definitely about a toxic relationship but the meaning is broader .. ;) not sure we have met before L.. read moredefinitely about a toxic relationship but the meaning is broader .. ;) not sure we have met before Lyanth .. i will have to stop by your place right away .. thanks for taking time to read and review .. i appreciate it!
E.
My wife and I have what seems like daily discussions about plastics. I remember a time when milk cartons were made of some sort of biodegradable cardboard. We try to limit our us of the stuff.
I wrote a satirical piece not too terribly long ago. This work reminded me of it. It's called How To Save Earth. I hope you take a gander at it, if you already haven't.
We need to stay on top of this and get the rest of the world on board.
I'm not an environmentalist, but I do see a problem here.
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5 Years Ago
thanks for sharing your discussions M.E. ... and your review ... i appreciate it! :) i remember back.. read morethanks for sharing your discussions M.E. ... and your review ... i appreciate it! :) i remember back a little farther sir .. i use to get to help our Milk Man deliver door to door .. glass containers that where left in the Milk Box when empty to be exchanged ... a simpler way of life back then .. with a lot of things lost that perhaps would be better off kept ... i am not an extremist either is that is what you mean ... but a healthy mind set and awareness of our impact on Earth is pretty important .. i will look for your poem for sure.. thanks again for visiting
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I enjoyed this, Einstein. I wouldn't change a word of it. Even now, environmental science frets over a contenient-sized eddy of plastic remnants and debris somewhere in the Pacific. Sea creatures constrain their bodies and digestive tracts with it. Humans bury it in mountainous piles in every town. Its proven links to the incidence of cancer keep research labs humming. One great bit of progress involves new formulas to make plastic refuse more consumable, maybe one day fully biodegradable. We pundits must keep humans ever aware of their plastic footprint and its detriment to progress. You are doing God's work here. Well done. -- Doug
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5 Years Ago
Doug! .... thank you so much! yes .. we do need to be every mindful of our impact ... i read about t.. read moreDoug! .... thank you so much! yes .. we do need to be every mindful of our impact ... i read about those studies .. so far unsuccessful .. but its encouraging to know there are those who are trying ... i guess the problem is imitating plastics strength and elasticity and combining it with "biodegradable" ... i was watching a series on sharks and spikes in attacks on humans and it touched on plastics doing just what you say ... and i was surprised to learn that oceanic plastic garbage float piles are in multiple places :(((((((((
i didn't know there were so many ... thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts on this one .. much appreciated sir!
E.
Aww, hell! I usually struggle with poetry...preferring straight lines from Point A to Point B. But dang! if I wasn't caught up by the second line and went right to the end - in one shot! And got it all, I think:
"...coffee ground brown", plastic imitating all forms of nature, that migraine, though! Woo!
But, who is "he"? I get the "she" (Mother Earth, yeah?) The only masculine "entity" i can immediately name is Satan/Lucifer. Is the current generation a masculine one? (*snort* not exactly my first guess by the amount of butt-hurt babes cryin' out there).
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5 Years Ago
:) thanks Carol .. couldn't be more happy that you followed all the way through ... i gave pollution.. read more:) thanks Carol .. couldn't be more happy that you followed all the way through ... i gave pollution a masculine gender against the female of Mother Nature because men are more prone to being the abuser .. but in the poem "he"" is "pollution" from all ... really glad you asked .. and thanks again for the visit .. a treat indeed!
E.
i'm very saddened by this universal problem, and you captured this tragedy so perfectly without being too academic, or frankly, boring; every word just builds my interest more and more. beautifully written in such a way that makes me conscious of my plastic use.
a review on my first work would be lovely, as i am new to writer's cafe. keep writing, never lose hope that this world will be a better place. :)
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5 Years Ago
i will head you way shortly Hello ;) thank you for reading and letting me know your thoughts and fee.. read morei will head you way shortly Hello ;) thank you for reading and letting me know your thoughts and feelings on this one .. we can never be to conscious of our use of plastic .. i absolutely hate it when i stop at the grocery and realize i have forgotten our cloth bags ... :((((((((( love and peace on ya Hello! see you around .. and welcome to the Cafe' ..i have found it a great place to learn and share
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Wowwww this is one of the most awesomely creative poem I have read in environmentalist tones with concerns for our Eco system in scintillating personification and metaphor wow . I ESP admire " the bile of disregard " and the plastic line and migraine to press your point of man's rapacious destruction of the planet. The govt in Tanzania where I have settled have only now banned the usage of all plastic polythene bags but there's so much other plastic dumped ah . Kudos for this powerful write.
Pls pleez do review/ comment/ give yer thoughts on my newest poem. I like Interaction for the human feel.
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5 Years Ago
that's quite a handle you have there S ;))) Tanzania!! wow!! i will certainly repay your visit asap!.. read morethat's quite a handle you have there S ;))) Tanzania!! wow!! i will certainly repay your visit asap! thank you for checking me out and choosing this one ... i am more than gratified and encouraged by your review .. thank you again ... yes .. we are behind the 8 ball when it comes to plastics ... so useful and versatile but so damaging ... and so much of it overwhelms our poor green planet ... God bless you and your sensitive consciousness S ... a pleasure to meet you
E.
Though the truth of this poem is sad. I must say it was very cleverly written. I like how "tide" can be used in three different was. Very clever.
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5 Years Ago
nice to meet you Franco! thanks for taking time and reviewing this one ... i'm happy you found some .. read morenice to meet you Franco! thanks for taking time and reviewing this one ... i'm happy you found some merit in it ... will return your visit shortly for sure!
E.
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