The Maze

The Maze

frenetic winds like contrails 

whispering through the chambers

one man

one woman

turning twisting reaching

                                      rising 

falling 

hips sway lips say

unknown  -   invisible need moans  -

'round corners of unadorned halls                                                                           

virgin 

empty quiet apprehensions of

two minds tumbled out of a spin cycle

set at opposites 

THE DOOR! 

18 yr old boy ... 16 yr. old girl ...... 

facing flint and steel sparks in an instant fade from fire yet

deepening molten embers glow

true light to pierce the time

3/31/2019

E.

Escher's inspired stairs

Author's Note

Reviews

[Neville]

I dunno why but I just come over all emotional, and that aint like me.. I was hoping I might find something new from ya Gene, and blimey.. some find.. this must surely rank among my favourite poems of yours my friend... bloomin well done might sound like a cliche methinks, but tis part of me now and I sincerely mean, bloomin well done... Maybe I am beginning to feel my years and hanker after moments past.. but you sure got me this mane.... Am bound to revisit this page over and over... Neville :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Neville ... your the brother i never had ;) and i am very happy this one has gone to the top of those you have read of mine .. i think it is a hallmark for me as the way i am inclined to write and my "voice" have found a foundation to hang from ... and my focus for writing has taken a bit of a turn ... love on ya buddy .. a real joy to have your presence here!
E.

[Neville]

all those things back at ya Gene and true..... and yes.. you do have a unique style & what a pleasure it is... N :)

[R.E. Ray]

Your poem recreates the anxious passion of youth, the insatiable desires without a defined path. We walk-run in cycles, dizzily, and sometimes find nothing later but fond memories, and some we never actually realized. Good write and ideal image paired with your poem.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep ... it was a maze wasn't it?! thanks so much for taking time to review my friend ..god bless you today and always!
E.

[Pete]

a wonderfully confusing time in youth when pulse quickens. oh those stairs. the emotive, pensive breaks in your deep lines. definitely not a time of order and reason. classic theme and song. memorably reflective ... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

love your sensitive and in depth reading and understanding of this ... who would want for more ... so glad you stopped Pete ... appreciate it a lot!
E.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Einstein love this and the music great too !

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Julie! i appreciate your time and glad you checked the song too ;) peace on ya!
E.

[Paul Bell]

A bit before my time, but the concept never changes.
In a way the same memories remain as well.
Dancing must be blamed for the world's' population, not forgetting the main ingredient, the music.
There is a lovely awkwardness to your poem too. Two people meeting for the first time, caught up in the moment leading to that other great moment. Mind you, also led to the fires of hell descending on you if you were unlucky.

[Einstein Noodle]

ah yes! the song!! a pretty old oldie for sure! love your reference to the dance, Paul; reveals a man who senses the "flow" of things :) and yep! an ageless story really ... and you have added the danger inherent in those sparks ..that darkness only too evident on the web ... "girlie" mags use to have to have covers covered with blank brown paper .. only the titles showing .. and ... kept behind the counter ... and wrapped in plastic ... times have changed ... there is some terrible evil worsened over time me thinks ... thanks for stopping and i love that you pick up on that very teen awkwardness so many of us suffered and suffer still ... tho playing it "cool" seems much better rehearsed ... sorry .. i am blithering on aren't i ... peace and joy to ya!
E.

[Paul Bell]

The awkwardness was the apprenticeship. lol

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it was! .........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i remember this....you took me back to parking on Briggs Street...an old dirt road, great for necking...which now is a damn highway...
our memories of old...and those days turned to dust.
love the dryer metaphor...
and oh...that song by Sonny James...Young Love...got that single when it came out..played it to death...
great song.
thanks for this trip back.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

you wore down the vinyl??? :))))))))) yes .. i agree .. a wonderful song reflective of that more "innocent" time ... so happy this sparked some memories ... the fire was always in those kisses ... one rightfully should cherish every one ... and in our now time ... with luck those kisses become something deeper and non-singeing ;))))))))))))))))) thanks for sharing a bit of your Briggs Street ... love and peace sir!
E.

[AYVID N]

The maze...a brilliant analogy for the first moments of discovery. The sparks do fade, the impressions remain. The fire shapes and moulds. I loved this roller coaster ride you take your readers on and it is a heady feeling. Appreciated very much E !

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Divya ... sure appreciate your taking time here ... lots of ups, downs, puzzling and angst happens on that ol' Love path doesn't it!? :))))))

[Veronika25]

Dear Noodle,

I appreciate your work because of your unique style. There has always been an e.e. cummings progressive influence within your words; it is lyrical and "frenetic" :P. You understand the rules of grammar and simple mechanics yet you understand poetry is able to be rebellious. You are a true poet and musician at the Heart.

The content has struck at the cello heart strings of mine. Society frowns upon age differences. I love the raw beauty that is contrasted with the logic of a "maze"; an eternal change in the cerebral labyrinth. Romance is not always a pretty thing to see neither is sex. I imagined two virginal youths entertwined together in the moment attempting to fit like a still shot jigsaw. Then they learn they must always sum up their parts to make up a whole.

Visually, "The Maze" concentrates on the mechanical aspect of the Left Brain. In contrast, the imagery and details dances meticulously together into a dance. Stunning and raw beauty comes to my mind.

Thank you for sharing, Einstein Noodle. You truly are kindred to e i n s t e i n perspectives.

Yours truly,
V25

[Einstein Noodle]

i don't know how i missed this V25 ... thank you for such a thorough review and generous encouragement ... seems something is attacking poets here and replacing the authors' comments with a blank space and "Guest 49 years ago" .. someone needs to get a life eh!?
E.

[Veronika25]

I apologize for the delay. That is odd that has happened on here! I have not come across that yet.

And you are very welcome. :D

[Einstein Noodle]

apparently it came from our WC managers and all has been set right! .. thanks again for your review .. it is incredibly uplifting for me to be me-self ;) love on ya V25

[Robert Trakofler]

Your maze did amaze this bunny's gaze and left him ablaze in its displays! the flow of this thought flow is grand good sir. this line...

facing flint and steel sparks in an instant fade from fire yet
deepening molten embers glow
is all golden:)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhhhhh the Bad One's stamp of approval ..could not be more tickled my friend ...and if poets are allowed ... that line is one i like me self ;) thanks sir .. for you time .. glad you enjoyed reading!
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Nice work Sir, a maze indeed on love. Brilliant lines Gene.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Andrew ... always refreshing seeing you face around the Cafe' ...thanks for showing it on this particular page and poem ... thanks you for all your encouragement sir!! peace and love
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Hey! What a top compliment Gene. Thank you my friend. Dont get too much time to review others and write at this current time however you get to know who are your true friends that constantly review your works and stand by you. Thanks my friend.

[Cherrie Palmer]

The maze of emotions to be found in this is endless. That foggy memory of first passion is a maze unto itself.
But this is everything it should be and more

[Einstein Noodle]

so happy you dared to enter ;) i have such vivid snatches of scenes as i went down the dating/friendship maze ... such a tiring swirl while in it ..but looking back i am so grateful for all those seeking experiences shared ... break a heart .. broken heart ;)))))) how dramatic it all was eh!? love on ya Cherrie ... God bless! :)
E.