The Maze

The Maze

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

The Maze
frenetic winds like contrails 
whispering through the chambers
one man
one woman
turning twisting reaching
                                      rising 
falling 
hips sway lips say
unknown  -   invisible need moans  -
'round corners of unadorned halls                                                                           
virgin 
empty quiet apprehensions of
two minds tumbled out of a spin cycle
set at opposites 
THE DOOR! 
18 yr old boy ... 16 yr. old girl ...... 
facing flint and steel sparks in an instant fade from fire yet
deepening molten embers glow
true light to pierce the time
3/31/2019
E.
Image result for endless stairs painting
Escher's inspired stairs

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Einstein Noodle

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I dunno why but I just come over all emotional, and that aint like me.. I was hoping I might find something new from ya Gene, and blimey.. some find.. this must surely rank among my favourite poems of yours my friend... bloomin well done might sound like a cliche methinks, but tis part of me now and I sincerely mean, bloomin well done... Maybe I am beginning to feel my years and hanker after moments past.. but you sure got me this mane.... Am bound to revisit this page over and over... Neville :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks Neville ... your the brother i never had ;) and i am very happy this one has gone to the top .. read more
Neville

5 Years Ago

all those things back at ya Gene and true..... and yes.. you do have a unique style & what a pleasur.. read more



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Your poem recreates the anxious passion of youth, the insatiable desires without a defined path. We walk-run in cycles, dizzily, and sometimes find nothing later but fond memories, and some we never actually realized. Good write and ideal image paired with your poem.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

yep ... it was a maze wasn't it?! thanks so much for taking time to review my friend ..god bless you.. read more
a wonderfully confusing time in youth when pulse quickens. oh those stairs. the emotive, pensive breaks in your deep lines. definitely not a time of order and reason. classic theme and song. memorably reflective ... :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

love your sensitive and in depth reading and understanding of this ... who would want for more ... s.. read more
Einstein love this and the music great too !

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks Julie! i appreciate your time and glad you checked the song too ;) peace on ya!
E.
A bit before my time, but the concept never changes.
In a way the same memories remain as well.
Dancing must be blamed for the world's' population, not forgetting the main ingredient, the music.
There is a lovely awkwardness to your poem too. Two people meeting for the first time, caught up in the moment leading to that other great moment. Mind you, also led to the fires of hell descending on you if you were unlucky.


Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

ah yes! the song!! a pretty old oldie for sure! love your reference to the dance, Paul; reveals a ma.. read more
Paul Bell

5 Years Ago

The awkwardness was the apprenticeship. lol
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

yes it was! .........
i remember this....you took me back to parking on Briggs Street...an old dirt road, great for necking...which now is a damn highway...
our memories of old...and those days turned to dust.
love the dryer metaphor...
and oh...that song by Sonny James...Young Love...got that single when it came out..played it to death...
great song.
thanks for this trip back.
j.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

you wore down the vinyl??? :))))))))) yes .. i agree .. a wonderful song reflective of that more "in.. read more
The maze...a brilliant analogy for the first moments of discovery. The sparks do fade, the impressions remain. The fire shapes and moulds. I loved this roller coaster ride you take your readers on and it is a heady feeling. Appreciated very much E !

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks Divya ... sure appreciate your taking time here ... lots of ups, downs, puzzling and angst ha.. read more
Dear Noodle,

I appreciate your work because of your unique style. There has always been an e.e. cummings progressive influence within your words; it is lyrical and "frenetic" :P. You understand the rules of grammar and simple mechanics yet you understand poetry is able to be rebellious. You are a true poet and musician at the Heart.

The content has struck at the cello heart strings of mine. Society frowns upon age differences. I love the raw beauty that is contrasted with the logic of a "maze"; an eternal change in the cerebral labyrinth. Romance is not always a pretty thing to see neither is sex. I imagined two virginal youths entertwined together in the moment attempting to fit like a still shot jigsaw. Then they learn they must always sum up their parts to make up a whole.

Visually, "The Maze" concentrates on the mechanical aspect of the Left Brain. In contrast, the imagery and details dances meticulously together into a dance. Stunning and raw beauty comes to my mind.

Thank you for sharing, Einstein Noodle. You truly are kindred to e i n s t e i n perspectives.

Yours truly,
V25

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

i don't know how i missed this V25 ... thank you for such a thorough review and generous encourageme.. read more
Veronika25

5 Years Ago

I apologize for the delay. That is odd that has happened on here! I have not come across that yet... read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

apparently it came from our WC managers and all has been set right! .. thanks again for your review .. read more
Your maze did amaze this bunny's gaze and left him ablaze in its displays! the flow of this thought flow is grand good sir. this line...

facing flint and steel sparks in an instant fade from fire yet
deepening molten embers glow
is all golden:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

ahhhhhhh the Bad One's stamp of approval ..could not be more tickled my friend ...and if poets are a.. read more
Nice work Sir, a maze indeed on love. Brilliant lines Gene.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks Andrew ... always refreshing seeing you face around the Cafe' ...thanks for showing it on thi.. read more
andrew mitchell

5 Years Ago

Hey! What a top compliment Gene. Thank you my friend. Dont get too much time to review others and wr.. read more
The maze of emotions to be found in this is endless. That foggy memory of first passion is a maze unto itself.
But this is everything it should be and more

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

so happy you dared to enter ;) i have such vivid snatches of scenes as i went down the dating/friend.. read more

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