The Maze

The Maze

frenetic winds like contrails 

whispering through the chambers

one man

one woman

turning twisting reaching

                                      rising 

falling 

hips sway lips say

unknown  -   invisible need moans  -

'round corners of unadorned halls                                                                           

virgin 

empty quiet apprehensions of

two minds tumbled out of a spin cycle

set at opposites 

THE DOOR! 

18 yr old boy ... 16 yr. old girl ...... 

facing flint and steel sparks in an instant fade from fire yet

deepening molten embers glow

true light to pierce the time

3/31/2019

E.

Escher's inspired stairs

Author's Note

Reviews

[Neville]

I dunno why but I just come over all emotional, and that aint like me.. I was hoping I might find something new from ya Gene, and blimey.. some find.. this must surely rank among my favourite poems of yours my friend... bloomin well done might sound like a cliche methinks, but tis part of me now and I sincerely mean, bloomin well done... Maybe I am beginning to feel my years and hanker after moments past.. but you sure got me this mane.... Am bound to revisit this page over and over... Neville :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Neville ... your the brother i never had ;) and i am very happy this one has gone to the top of those you have read of mine .. i think it is a hallmark for me as the way i am inclined to write and my "voice" have found a foundation to hang from ... and my focus for writing has taken a bit of a turn ... love on ya buddy .. a real joy to have your presence here!
E.

[Neville]

all those things back at ya Gene and true..... and yes.. you do have a unique style & what a pleasure it is... N :)

[Cassie]

Interesting write but kind of sad. I enjoyed

[Einstein Noodle]

can you expand on the sadness you felt? i am curious about that, Cassie ...
E.

[Stella Armour]

understanding your forst sensual emotions is indeed like finding your way through a maze, never quite knowing the right way forward and feeling unsure as to the rising heat that drives you on ... until, the damn bursts and the first real afterglow is the path you were inadvertently seeking..

[Einstein Noodle]

whew Stella! your review got me going this morning ;) yeah ... youth eh!? "it was the best of times, it was the worst of times" :)))))))))) love and peace my friend .. thank you for stopping .. top o' the mahrnin' to ya!
E.

[Stella Armour]

if only we could have the wisdom of age in our youth ... would that not be a wonderful thing?

[Einstein Noodle]

i'm not so sure about that Stella ...might take all the fun out of it :))))))))))))))))))))))))) like a roll-a-coaster on a flat line

[Stella Armour]

Hahaha ... maybe &(*.*)&

[sette]

it is one hell of an emotional writing.. the confusion the doubting and the learning along the way makes it an interesting read

[Einstein Noodle]

oh how we stumble along the love raod don't we sette? ... what a great review .. thank you for taking time once again to read me "stuff"
E.

[Cryingkate]

Wow ! Neville isn't the only one awe strucked.. Perfect poem and Music combo. Put me right where you wanted us. I felt enchantedly at another place and time With my first Love.

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhh my luv, Cryin' Kate!!!! i am so happy to see your here! at the Cafe' ..on me pages once again!!! thanks so much for reading and your review made me day ... its where the poem came from so i am gratified it brought you there ... in your own story ... love love love on ya girl!
E.
ps. checking to see if you posted and i missed something :)))))))))

[sharonlee]

Honestly. ... emotive for the strangest reasons. ... I didn't hear echoes of my own love-past. .... but imagined my mother and birth-father.
The ages are right... however their light did not pierce time... it shone until I was 2.
Emotive write my friend.

[Einstein Noodle]

not from your own echoes?? but emotive ...how very interesting indeed Sharon .. there is much more to your story no doubt ... 2 years old is such a formative and important time in our lives ... you have found some comfort and peace in your art and poetry i am guessing ... have you written any poems specifically about your mom and birth dad??
E.

[sharonlee]

No I've never really been inpired or pulled in that direction... my own echoes of love I have, of course, some faded some not so faded... and some imagined... ♡

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha i have lots of those imagined :} love on ya Sharon!!

[Papaya]

so difficult to navigate love and such when so young
i love the flow and dance of this. I think you've touched on something that creates deep feelings within the reader, remembering...

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for reviewing Ana! so nice to see you 'round this ol' Cafe' :) that's kind of the place this came from .. some great, passionate, awkward memories ... wrapped up they give me a warm smile ... tho difficult at times it is the language of love after all ... again...thank you for taking time my friend
E.

[Papaya]

:) you're welcome and it's good to see you too (:

[Sami Khalil]

Memory lane of youth who went through the motions and emotions. I love how you narrate the story and feed us with great wisdom lessons. How things change and evolve! How the maze is unknown and then is solved! Memory can indeed pierce the time and go through the emotions. Your style sir is original and unique.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Sami ... i am encouraged by your review as this poem ...when i wrote it and shaped it brought me to the realization that this is how i best express myself and ideas ... tho i will certainly continue to attempt Classical forms .. i feel very comfortable in the skin of this kind of free verse ... peace and joy .. happy memories down yer lane buddy!
E.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are good. . You are welcome.

[Einstein Noodle]

you are very kind Sami! thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

::: )))))))))))))

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Young love and intimacy just isn't what it used to be... is it E? I am so wrapped in the essence of this! swoon~~~~

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness ... i am feeling me cheeks warming and turning red :) so very gratified this affected you so .. thanks you very much for reviewing Ms. Queen ... you made me day!
E.

[barleygirl]

Even tho this is about "young love" . . . it could be about any age love. I love the way you use the artwork & theme of "maze" to describe how tangled up it can feel. I am catching a hint of danger here, as well as the simmering passions. I hate to say this, but I had a fleeting moment when I was thinking of two young lovers in a crowded place with multiple floors/stairs, torn between the attraction they have for each other & then having that moment ripped apart by a mass shooting. It's so sad that this is so top-of-mind these days, I can't even read a poem without having it cross my mind! But I'm more likely to read "danger" as being the unpredictability of young love, not a mass shooting! I love your writing & the way you use single-word lines for emphasis (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness Margie!!! your comments speak to the atrocities in the news are way too many .. with very little balance ... so much good goes on without the accolades deserved :( ... you are correct dear friend ..this is much lighter than that ...danger always exists when passions blaze, the mind goes off line and we flail about in a certain insanity I would not trade for anything ;)))))))))))))))))))))) as always .. i appreciate you taking time to read and review ... thank you!
E.

[Great Aunt Astri]

You deal with this eternal theme beautifully. And Escher's 'going up' and 'going down' at the same time' print, reflects the precariousness of our first attractions. A change of voice? Good for you.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ... a change ;) thank you always for your kind support Auntie! glad you enjoyed ... funny how a well worn road can excite ... in writing this, of course, i had and have some wonderful memories ... tho at the time it is not a lot of fun suffering the insecurities and brand new roads that seemingly have no map ;) love on ya dear friend ..best of the day to ya!
E.

[Great Aunt Astri]

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