Affairs of the Heart

loosely generalized observations ;)

Affairs of the Heart

For every man

who wins her heart

A man stands in shadows

torn apart

For every woman 

who finds her man

three are broken

unable to stand

Sunrise could not find him in  heart's shadow

No sharper edges wrought to cleave those bindings;

locking the pain with loss and despair

another had won her love. 

disregard replete; he moves

one to another, another; and another 

now in bliss, remiss of those memories,

he weds while broken stems alter Sunrise

no longer kissing their lips

hands only brushed the pearl of their veils now

fingered shards, shred them to shrouds 

three to cover each.

03/10/2019

E.

*the first two verses were one of those "flash inspirations" one has the tendency to think they are genius, only to throw them out when read later ..i know you all know what i mean ... but i didn't throw them out because it "felt" right .. so i added the second two verses ... trying to say the same thing in a bit different way ... would love to know your thoughts on them

Author's Note

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E. I found your poem moving. It also brought a memory back of an aunt by marriage I was very fond of. She really cared for me at a time my parents were 400miles away. I was young. She said to me to hang on to my man and look after him because there were other women round every corner waiting to prise him away. She wasn't wrong there, that's exactly what happened.

That loss is incredibly difficult to deal with, there was much pain and I sensed that in your lines you yourself understand that loss. Loving someone who doesn't feel the same way about you sucks. Sometimes you may meet someone else, but that broken trust shatters the heart and it takes one hell of a lot of glue to stick it back together.

Do not bin this piece. You have much to say here. This reader fekt your words on an emotional level.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

oh no Chris ... as i started to read your review i thought it would be a more happy story with your aunt (i had several nearby when parents were miles and miles away;) but i am so sorry for what happened to you ... no matter how long ago it never goes away .. i lost my wife to cancer when she was only 30 yrs old and working through that i often thought how much more difficult it is for those divorced and/or abandoned ... because they are still around .. and friends and family take sides .. so the emotional support given is not nearly sufficient .. many times makes things worse i think ;((( thank you so much for your very encouraging review ..i have been pretty insecure in posting and keeping it as is ... truly .. i very much appreciate your words, Chris ... God bless you and big hugs girl ... (if that's ok)
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Hugs very gratefully received. I am so sorry for your loss. Your words have a universal appeal. Loss however it comes as a result of being abandoned or through death is life changing and difficult to deal with. Your poem reaches out to those who have suffered loss. Please post more if you are able to. Sending you all good wishes and a hug from me to you.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Chris ... i appreciate all your support .. wasn't sure about the first two verses as they were in the raw ... thank you

[gram linski]

Great evocative poem of love lost and love found, not quite first love but possibly stronger because, keep writing the good stuff, E,

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks gram! i truly appreciate the encouragement ... it comes at a good time ;) cheers me friend!read morethanks gram! i truly appreciate the encouragement ... it comes at a good time ;) cheers me friend!
E.

[R.E. Ray]

E., so much truth to your poem. It seems we often, maybe always, measure later loves from our first. We compare and sometimes imagine things that never existed -- like she might have actually loved us. Sometimes, though, we find good fortune in unanswered prayers when a greater love finds us (and we're on the inside looking out).

[Einstein Noodle]

yes indeed ..and oh how the what ifs can stay with us ..no matter how happy now nor how long ago they were ..my my my ..you review has sent me down memories lane ...
E.

[Paul Bell]

love sure is a battlefield, not even sure if there are winners and losers.
But in the 21st century, women don't seem to take any crap anymore.
But the game of love is also fun, and that's why we all compete in it.

[Einstein Noodle]

how true how true ... the times change .. and love seems always a game ... even when true of heart ;) thanks for dropping by Paul! peace on ya!
E.

[Mrudula Rani]

I love the idea of playing with words. Even though your first two verses are perfect in expression... some times we have the urge to put point of view in a better frame. I am glad you did rewrite the poem to your satisfaction, E. We write first and foremost for our( writers) complacency, and post only to see the rejoinders.

[Einstein Noodle]

how true how true ..with hope the rejoinders are things we can draw from ... thanks Mrudula .. for spending some time here on me pages!! peace and joy on ya!
E.

[Robert Trakofler]

The first two stanza were in fact a spout of light glad you didn't ditch them and sorry those other folks did get ditched... my empathy falls victim to conundrum of whom the other three were the rejected or were you rejected by the three. is it the veil of death of the three or the veil of simple time and memories past loss. it doesn't matter is suppose for each scenario is a loss and flow of its own probably should read this more but that's what the bunny has seen :)

[Einstein Noodle]

the bunny knows all says i! what you see is what you get eh!? ;))) the basic thing is that men typically leave more behind (3) than women (1) its in our primitive being i think ... but yes ... deaths involved no matter how one looks at it .. sure appreciate you taking time to read and relate Bad One! :)
E.

[h d e rushin]

My doctor of 25 years (or more) shared with me something I thought I would never live long enough to hear another human say. He told me how when he first saw his wife to be, that he was going to marry her. Then he went on to tell me that if somehow she would leave this earth before him, that he wouldn't want to live anymore. I said to myself, "Oh S**t!" , finding the sublime is in no way connected to one's ability. Happenstance is everywhere, happing, all at the same time and no matter how close love resembles UFO'S, witchcraft or sorcery, it is none of those things. It is just two people looking for solutions to hurt or extreme loneliness.
The first stanza here is a teachable moment to everyone and anyone who wants to write a love poem.
(1)Sort out all the truth from fiction. (2)Expound on that thesis.....great poem...dana

[Einstein Noodle]

i just love your voice Dana!! i said it before and i saw it now ;) and i am grateful and uplifted by what you share in response to reading this one ... your Doctor is a fortunate man having "heard" and responded to his inspiration of love ... did he ever tell you how many doors he knocked on first? ;)))))))))) happenstance is happing ... you are too cool! i might just steal that some day my friend! so glad you enjoyed reading my little Affairs

[andrew mitchell]

How true Gene, how true! Nature is not only survival of the fittest but one has to be competitive as well to win at all costs or you lose. Someone will always win and there will be casualties. Great write Einstein.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much again for taking time on me pages Andrew...so happy you related and connected ... and yep .. sad but true
E.

[barleygirl]

I agree your first two verses are genius, so I'm glad you didn't throw them out. It's becuz you are straightforward in a startling way . . . stating truthful observations we can all relate to. Then you go more into your nuanced way of embellishing, to flesh out your meaning as you go along, & I had to do a little more work to visualize everything you describe. Also, as one of the ones that LOVE has left behind, the nuances often get lost on me! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

your reviews are always so important to me Margie ...simply because of our different approaches ... mine abstract and yours linear (as you have put it) your input helps me to try harder to keep a balnce of some sort so everyone can read and feel they have gotten something from what i write (like all poets i am sure) thanks so much for working that second part out .. and thank you very much for valuing the first part ... helps a lot to know!
E.

[Fran Marie]

The first two verses set the scene for just how painful love. can be..like a merry go round ..you love someone they love someone else..someone always ends up standing in the shadows of love waiting for a better outcome should they try again in this game of love..nice work E..

[Einstein Noodle]

i know.... it can seem so unfair right!? :( its such a struggle and can be so painful ... but does work out ... and we can be happy in the end if we try ... so glad to have your review Fran ..thanks for taking time!
E.

[lightsong]

it may takes years, even generations to meet and find Your true love, through that road You meet many experiences and though they might be unbearably painful sometimes,they are there for something or another, but the most painful thing when You are fully aware and with real belief of what's inside You, while Your love can't feel or know it, and You can't convey it to them either, it must come from their own inner, sometimes You wait for them for long times until they wake up...

[Einstein Noodle]

yes yes yes Light!!! exactly so! i wonder sometimes how we make it through ... love on ya my friend .. so glad for your remarks!
E.