Ohhhhh-Mega-Ouchies! Poor little pup has gotten himself too close too danger, as we do so many times in our lives. Wrong time, wrong place, just wrong..and then gone...great verse form with leading lines, flow, cleverness of language, metaphor, alliteration, imagery. Billboards blocking painful memories. Great poem E. P.S. Hope pup is rid of the barbs and feeling much better!!
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
ahahaha you are so spot on...its a process...getting barbs removed ;) but we are a strong breed us h.. read moreahahaha you are so spot on...its a process...getting barbs removed ;) but we are a strong breed us humans right?! absolutely love your review ... i am reaffirmed in this particular writing ... love and peace Annette .. again thank you for reading with your whole self and taking time to review .. its very helpful
E.
Hello, Good Morning, Good Bye and repeat...
endings are painful but necessary for progress and i like what you've done here E.
the way you've described the good bye... so good
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
yes...so gratified you captured my intent so precisely ;))) some cycles are such a pain in the arse .. read moreyes...so gratified you captured my intent so precisely ;))) some cycles are such a pain in the arse :} we are soooooooooo ..... human! thanks for taking time my friend!
E.
Doggone it. I remember getting one of those long stretchy leads. Took the dog out.
Got to the park where every bloody dog made a beeline for me.
The lead got wrapped around me, and I went flying.
Glad youtube wasn't around then.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
ahahaha i can see that clearly sir!? ;} Bella is older and has pretty good leash manners but the idi.. read moreahahaha i can see that clearly sir!? ;} Bella is older and has pretty good leash manners but the idiot (Beauregard) is still a pup and has the concentration power of a gnat ...but he's learning ... always grateful for your visits Paul... have a great day!
E.
OUCH! i had trouble with two dogs this morning, one visiting, one lives here. boy was i pissed. next time we walk on a wet day it will be the neighborhood roads on leash.
the everywhere of bristles!
regards,
al
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
thanks for reviewing Big Al! my two for the first time ran off into the early morning woods after so.. read morethanks for reviewing Big Al! my two for the first time ran off into the early morning woods after some critter and i could not call them back ... they are big dogs and don't have the ability to p***y foot around out there ...so i could hear them and both returned after about 5 minutes ...but we do worry about them eh!? always a wise thing to have them leashed ...they are too full of surprises :)
E.
in the mirror? ;) sorry to know we are brothers in those ouchy barbs ;) sometimes one simply can do .. read morein the mirror? ;) sorry to know we are brothers in those ouchy barbs ;) sometimes one simply can do nothing right eh!?
E.
ps. sure appreciate your taking time sir
Maybe I haven’t had enuf coffee yet this morning, but I’m not sure how your poem jives with your photo. Despite the seemingly “out there” quality of how you describe the encounter, your photo clearly shows what “bristles” can do to a poor innocent pooch! I’ve never seen a porcupine, nor saw anyone or creature who had an encounter with one, but it always looks sooo bad! I’m over here cringing, despite the rather gentle wording of your disaster. And I think it’s a pain to snip dog nails (I always manage to draw blood!) I would HATE to have to pluck out these spines! EEEEEK! Thank you for sharing & reminding me to be thankful my pups stick around home pretty much (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
i am not surprised your compassion goes straight to the real dog behind those quills ... and yes! ce.. read morei am not surprised your compassion goes straight to the real dog behind those quills ... and yes! certainly not a fun thing for him ... but he represents my protagonist in this ... innocent puppy victim :) hope you are getting your hippie toes wet in your nearest stream while all this sun shines a wondrous Spring :)
E.
Ohhhhh-Mega-Ouchies! Poor little pup has gotten himself too close too danger, as we do so many times in our lives. Wrong time, wrong place, just wrong..and then gone...great verse form with leading lines, flow, cleverness of language, metaphor, alliteration, imagery. Billboards blocking painful memories. Great poem E. P.S. Hope pup is rid of the barbs and feeling much better!!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
ahahaha you are so spot on...its a process...getting barbs removed ;) but we are a strong breed us h.. read moreahahaha you are so spot on...its a process...getting barbs removed ;) but we are a strong breed us humans right?! absolutely love your review ... i am reaffirmed in this particular writing ... love and peace Annette .. again thank you for reading with your whole self and taking time to review .. its very helpful
E.
viciously good piece here...and as always, poems will remind us of something or someone when they are universal...this one does...reminds me of a best friend i lost so many years ago...we live and die...and some die much too soon. now an imaginary billboard with her picture on it blocks my sun...even though her memory still shines upon me.
j.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
she must have been a wonderful friend jacob ... and pain sure 'nuf changes over time but remains ..... read moreshe must have been a wonderful friend jacob ... and pain sure 'nuf changes over time but remains ...and keeps memories alive ...funny how that works sometimes eh!? thanks very much for your visit to this one... and all your visits my friend .. your input is important
E.
I hope it's not what You are in right now Mr. E, it's not funny at all... at all... the confusing cycle, round and round again, and again... in the end, the pain of goodbye leaves us with no clarity in mind, no warmth at heart, and once again we enter the cycle, go round it, to get stuck again!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
yes, spot on and perceptive review ... and thank you for not wishing it on me ;) but i think we all .. read moreyes, spot on and perceptive review ... and thank you for not wishing it on me ;) but i think we all go through such things from time to time ... i appreciate the support you have given to me ... thank you once again
E.
Seems a little re-think, re-take is in motion.. or might be. Your writing holds some fascinating urgencies.. either to think harder, laugh a lot ore more, or, to hang one's head in prayer80 Super sweet pic, super video.. super good Sunday!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
yes ... we do re-cycle in our relationshiops don't we emma...thank you always for your reviews ..i t.. read moreyes ... we do re-cycle in our relationshiops don't we emma...thank you always for your reviews ..i think i have to change the pic tho..you are the second that thinks it is sweet ... those are cactus needles in his poor pooch face ;} .. intended to induce an entirely different response that ohhhhhhhhh how sweet ;) yes... i better find something more clear ...love love love my friend
E.
6 Years Ago
Sorry, sorry, Mr. Noodle, must admit i dint see the negativ of that little picture.. and wouldnt hav.. read moreSorry, sorry, Mr. Noodle, must admit i dint see the negativ of that little picture.. and wouldnt have commented in what's clearly the wrong way, had i known better. Hope the wee soul was okay?
Surprised you can understand what i typed actually, think ii must have been on happy pills when typing!!!
6 Years Ago
i love you emma!
6 Years Ago
Oh my goodness.. didnt expect that.. but my birthday is next month, sir!!!
( My typi.. read moreOh my goodness.. didnt expect that.. but my birthday is next month, sir!!!
( My typing is diabolical.. forgive please. )
6 Years Ago
:) ..................
6 Years Ago
Ohhhhhhhhhhh that poor little mite.. eek, that must have hurt so much... I am so sorry, is he/she ok.. read moreOhhhhhhhhhhh that poor little mite.. eek, that must have hurt so much... I am so sorry, is he/she okay now?
6 Years Ago
well.... for now he is ... but i'm pretty sure the bristling will pop up "Once Again" ;)))))
6 Years Ago
Could do, guess they all came out of skin.. or were they actually tangled with hair Both?
6 Years Ago
its a pic from a google search my dahlink! porcupine quills are barbed and difficult to extract but .. read moreits a pic from a google search my dahlink! porcupine quills are barbed and difficult to extract but they must me or they will fester and work their way farther in ... my guess is that those quills are all puncturing the skin :( poor thing :(((
6 Years Ago
he's a metaphor to punctuate the poem...but it still doesn't seem to be working...i will think about.. read morehe's a metaphor to punctuate the poem...but it still doesn't seem to be working...i will think about not using it ;)
You see, you ask if i've been published and then -discover how 'iggeran't i am! Must away, is ver.. read moreYou see, you ask if i've been published and then -discover how 'iggeran't i am! Must away, is very hot, need get the dogs out.. (Better re.read later)
6 Years Ago
getting Bella and me self some breakfast ... later gator
6 Years Ago
emma...not metaphor on the pic...personification would be more appropriate...i have to keep looking .. read moreemma...not metaphor on the pic...personification would be more appropriate...i have to keep looking those up ...;)
i thought you might like it ...the dog is adorable but look closer and you will see all the cactus n.. read morei thought you might like it ...the dog is adorable but look closer and you will see all the cactus needles stuck in his poor face ...;} hugs right back at ya girl!
E.
6 Years Ago
Ooh it's cactus...poor thing.... Mmm is that why you thought I might like it... :p
But I like.. read moreOoh it's cactus...poor thing.... Mmm is that why you thought I might like it... :p
But I like this part by part thing... like a story with some useful tips at the end.. :))
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