Once Again

Once Again

Hello!

That's when the troubles came.

We were both sweeping

in seperate lanes and so

lost our footings

Good morning!

That's when the bristles came

We were on the wrong tracks and so

accidents of distress pronounced us

dead and alive

Good bye!

That is something that hangs like

a billboard blocking the sunrise 

shocking the nature of things

smells like singed hair on lightning rods

sizzling the sight and the sounds of doves

E.

05/05/18

Author's Note

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Ohhhhh-Mega-Ouchies! Poor little pup has gotten himself too close too danger, as we do so many times in our lives. Wrong time, wrong place, just wrong..and then gone...great verse form with leading lines, flow, cleverness of language, metaphor, alliteration, imagery. Billboards blocking painful memories. Great poem E. P.S. Hope pup is rid of the barbs and feeling much better!!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha you are so spot on...its a process...getting barbs removed ;) but we are a strong breed us humans right?! absolutely love your review ... i am reaffirmed in this particular writing ... love and peace Annette .. again thank you for reading with your whole self and taking time to review .. its very helpful
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You are so sweet E.! You are most welcome.:))

[Onlyme]

I guess danger and troubles and all things, that are woes. Is natures way and god's way of saying we are just but mortal and human beings. And we take the fall. And learn from our mistakes.

[Einstein Noodle]

hi Dee! thanks for stopping to read ..yeah...so true ... its the learning that sometimes is the hardest to get through a thick stubborn noggin' ;)
peace and joy ... you comment reminds me of my own gratitude that God doesn't give up on us when we have to go through something more than once ;)
E.

[Onlyme]

So very true Einstein, Life gives us all lessons to learn. Even if we do not like the idea or the experience of having to go through them once let along again and again. Until, we learn.

[Einstein Noodle]

hugs Dee ((((((((((((D)))))))))))))))))

[Island Hippy]

Oh dear .... poor little guy (hope he’s ok now)The number of times I went where I shouldn’t have, one soon learns.
Hello .... goodmorning .... goodbye, very clever and there is an easy rhythm to this which makes the reading delightful.

[Einstein Noodle]

glad you enjoyed the read Hippy! thanks so much for taking time to let me know you were here ... yes...poor painfull pup ...like a revenant he keeps returning ;( ...thanks again so much for reading my friend

[Sami Khalil]

You describe this incident marvelously and with sinking feeling. Accidents happen, normalcy is broken and decisions are needed fast and quick to remedy the situation, lest be a great loss. You are a masterful writer, sir Einstein.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for visiting Sami! i haven't been around much and so especially appreciate someone just stopping by ... and thank you for sharing your analysis ...so spot on ... God bless always ... hope to get back on my normal routine and read much more once again ... but for now..love and peace sir and again thank you for taking time to seek me out ;)
E.

[Sami Khalil]

You are most welcome. All good.

[Veronica Parker]

I love the bee bop jazz of this piece. Reading on i felt if i held on tight enough the music of the poem might carry into an after part. To a place where trouble is the fun, and the fun is on till day break.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my Veronica! you are the risk taker aren't you?! :)))))))))) not quite my idea of fun but i hear you ... love and pain seems the endless train don't it?! thank you so much for your remarks...makes me smile and tickles me innards .. to meet such a game human being ... right here at the cafe! :)
E.

[Ken Simm.]

So many places we should not go but we do. So many lines in this write strike a chord. Do we learn. I hope we do.

[Einstein Noodle]

you feel me Ken! i know you do ... we go there just the same ... and get the same old pain! ;} thanks so much for reviewing my friend ...i have been away lately and not visiting as much ... God bless sir!
E.

[Mrudula Rani]

The consequences that follow every encounter. Some chance meetings do leave scars.
The goodbyes that we have never had a chance to say, will stay with us forever.
Poor little puppy, I hope he was given an anesthesia before removing those quills.
Hope everything is great with you E!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you my friend....yes!! poor little guy ;) i think they are falling out over time ... you know... exquisite pain prolonged ;))) love your compassionate read of this my friend ... and yes!! every encounter is a risk when one things about it ... God bless!
E.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... when we lose footing ... it is hurtful... for every road that is blocked, there will be a new direction... where kindness overflows. truly, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

now that is the optimistic view that keeps on keepin' on ;) we get stuck enough tho ..it may be time to venture in another direction eh!? ;) thanks so much for your time Pat!
E.

[Dara]

I love the image you chose to go with this wonderful poem. How well it represents what happens in a relationship. In the beginning it almost feels like an accident waiting to happen. There is the thrill and the newness followed by the "bristles that happen' putting us on the wrong track. And then, sadly, when it sometimes ends the good bye that "hangs like a billboard blocking the sunrise." Very cleverly and masterfully written as always. Loved it!

[Einstein Noodle]

Dar ...i am so gratified you took this adventure with me all the way ;) sure do appreciate all your support and reviews ..peace sister! ;)
E.

[R.E. Ray]

E., as I finished reading your poem, I thought of nature, specifically sunrise, noon, and dusk, and how life comes in cycles. Every "hello" fades and a "goodnight" follows. Still, we rise for tomorrow's greetings, even if a hope. Great musical pairing, too.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks man! nature is a balm...even in the worst of storms eh!? ;) sure appreciate your time Mr. Ray! thank you ... and i am so happy you checked the music! g'day to ya sir!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Some relationships feel like a runaway train. The imagery in this is just fantastic, E. I enjoyed it. What sort of photo is that though? Can't figure it out! Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

the photo is troublesome to enough to get me to take it down i think..it is a dog with his muzzle full of porcupine quills ... if you have ever tried to bring cheer to one who "bristles" its what you get for the effort ;)))

[Lydia Shutter]

Ahhh, now I see what it is. Oh, some people do not want to be happy, E. Trying to make them smile is excruciating.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep! for sure my friend :)