Once Again

Once Again

Hello!

That's when the troubles came.

We were both sweeping

in seperate lanes and so

lost our footings

Good morning!

That's when the bristles came

We were on the wrong tracks and so

accidents of distress pronounced us

dead and alive

Good bye!

That is something that hangs like

a billboard blocking the sunrise 

shocking the nature of things

smells like singed hair on lightning rods

sizzling the sight and the sounds of doves

E.

05/05/18

Author's Note

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Ohhhhh-Mega-Ouchies! Poor little pup has gotten himself too close too danger, as we do so many times in our lives. Wrong time, wrong place, just wrong..and then gone...great verse form with leading lines, flow, cleverness of language, metaphor, alliteration, imagery. Billboards blocking painful memories. Great poem E. P.S. Hope pup is rid of the barbs and feeling much better!!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha you are so spot on...its a process...getting barbs removed ;) but we are a strong breed us humans right?! absolutely love your review ... i am reaffirmed in this particular writing ... love and peace Annette .. again thank you for reading with your whole self and taking time to review .. its very helpful
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You are so sweet E.! You are most welcome.:))

[Re-Pete]

a stinging write. there is much contained in your words. Thoreau said that, "An early-morning walk is a blessing for the whole day." A lot can happen in the quiet of those wee hours. all good and blessed things can be double-edged swords. which is why can never let our guard down and must ever stay on the right side. if i can only remember which is the right side. great eye-opening stuff oh wise sage ... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes ... best not to take too much for granted ;) and i hear you loud and clear ..the "right" side seems to constantly shift at times .. forever keeping me teetering on one foot ... ahhhhh but who would have things otherwise eh!? love and joy my friend! thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts on this one .. it was born of pure frustration >:/
E.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Somehow “Good Mornings’ never please or energise me much as I am one comfort loving kitty and love to sleep in, my toes tucked into a tender duvet on most days and now I come across this delightful poem that totally justifies my views. So ‘Good Mornings’ only seem right when everything looks really bright! Sorry about the lovely puppy but I’m glad he’s over it. That’s life on some days. Give him a pat for me! 😸

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha you speak wisely little kitten!! yes...puppy heals ...gets over it ... it takes time sometimes but never more than a few hours of pouting ;) you bring fine understanding to this poem ..i had fun writing it ... and more fun reading what you have to say about it ..sleep on ..no need to allow intrusions into fuzzy warm awakenings
E.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Indeed, I never understood the brouhaha over early morning walks and things. As I see it, sleeping in is a blissful way of avoiding most troubles. I hope you’re having a nice Sunday 🌞

[Einstein Noodle]

i am Kitty ..same to you ..i am a morning person ..have been all my life .. i'm usually up by 3 am these days (i'm retired) so when my Norma gets up i am all geared to yaking .. hence the poem ;)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Oh! 3 am is sometimes when I go to bed! (shakes head)

But to each our own, E. Whatever we find our bliss in. Life as I see it, is all about that and meaningful relationships. I’m sure mornings are as lovely to you as nighttime to me ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ........:))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[θεά]

Multiple meanings, multiple interpretations which transpires from the hyperliteral to the metaphorical seamlessly without trying too hard. Fetching and relatable, your poem in my perspective talks about the myriad dynamics which are set into motion with changes in time and the different stages of interpersonal relationship. Beautifully crafted.

P.S. I hope the quills have come off that tender pup.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for such a thoughtful, thorough reading ..who could ask for more Mallika! so happy you found things in there ;)
E.

[Great Aunt Astri]

It is wonderful the way one can identify one's own problems when we happen to someone or thing in a certain situation. That poor doggie, but I can tell exactly how you felt, by looking at this photo.
Well done, and clever you!

[Einstein Noodle]

i love your compassionate understanding dear Auntie! I don't know how I missed your review ???????? but glad to see it now... love on ya!

[Great Aunt Astri]

:}......................

[KWP]

In Aus we have a thing called Farmers friend - which ain't no friend to dog fur at all. Dodger has mastered the fine art of finding them, they take forever to get out.

This is a fun write that I immediately get a kinda warmth to. The long walks with just me and my pal did it for me. Your words express the closeness of relationship we naturally have with our beloved mutts. Really it just a=makes me feel warm and squishy and now I need to find that mutt and his him X

[Einstein Noodle]

no kidding!! i never would have thought this one would make the reader warm and close :)) leave it to you to pull the positive out of "ouch"! really glad you found this one dear one ... top o' the mahrnin' to ya!

[KWP]

it's top of the morning' right now .... hanging out in the ambrosial ... wind chill factor - big for this time of year man .... okay okay gotta go to work X x

[Einstein Noodle]

"ambrosial" ! what a great word you have revealed to me this morning ... been more chilly that the norm around here to...a very welcome cool after many days of humidity and heat ;) don't wok too hard now

[Lyn Anderson]

This reminds me of a country song "You look like I need a drink" - sometimes you just KNOW. Very well done.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha ...yep ... set 'em up bartender! ;) drinks are on me!
E.

[Elizabeth]

Wow... I love this.. The poem has a cheery flow to it which hides the melancholic message behind it.... It has a great flow and an excellent message.

Also I feel so bad for the poor dog

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! there is a bit of lightness to it isn't there ... thank you for the sensitive read and for taking time to review DarkMist ... yes :) poor pooch indeed ... thanks again for letting me know your thoughts
E.

[Beccy]

Can't decide whether persistence or prudence ought rule the day.

We know we should learn from our mistakes, avoid the pitfall next time round, but there is a certain something built into our genetic makeup that often makes us continue to bash our heads against that brick wall.

Great poetry, great message.

Beccy.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! exactly so in this poem Beccy .. thank you so much for reading with sensitivity and understanding ;) really appreciate your review... i have been here at the cafe very little these past days and hope to get back to reading and maybe squeeze another poem out ... peace and joy my friend
E.

[MomzillaNC]

Clever use of imagery and rhythm. Poor little puppy in that image - ouch!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Mom! yes...poor boy....just didn't learn the lesson the first time eh!? sure appreciate your taking time ... peace and joy my friend!
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Haha love the photo Einstein.Yes lessons to be learnt, won’t do that again, poor thing!

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! that's what happens when one tries to hug a porcupine ;) gotta laugh for cryin' eh!? love your visits sir...thanks for taking time
E.

[andrew mitchell]

You are welcome e