Standing Stone

the privacy of her expectations

kept 

those things hidden tight  

                  I

pushed them into compression locks, she

squeezing shut and squinted yet

still oozing her secrets; it

couldn't be helped

in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance

Tell me darling!            Please!                    I beg

standing  stupor with a pick- shovel 

and sifter ....shaking ... ever shaking 

through the debris  to glimpse

some bit of

understanding

            

never settling

honestly ........... tombs of the ancients are an easier task

01/24/2018

E.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

This is a deeply moving and personal journey written in a unique dramatic format- i can easily hear this as a spoken poem...a lover with the object of his love figuratively entombed by her secrets, expectations and emotional debris- and he trying to dig her out literally and figuratively. Brilliant metaphor. Eloquent and poignant words reveal unbearable
undercurrents of pain and frustration. I concur, a most formidable and long- suffering task to endeavor. I hope that luck, strength and infinite understanding prevail for this poor protagonist. Great write my friend!

[Einstein Noodle]

God bless you for your very understanding read of this..and thank you so much for pointing out what you liked about it ... i truly appreciate your review and understanding heart Annette ... i feel so gratified and validated ...thank you again my friend ;))
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Your poem touched my heart E. Blessings and light wished back to you.:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Unfortunately, there is no way to guess what someone else expects of you and if it remains a hidden secret, no one can be happy....no one will get what they want. Such a wise life lesson in between the lines here, E. I enjoyed it. "Ever shaking through the debris to glimpse some bit of
understanding".....I have been there....and I relate. Excellent! Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

exactly Lydia ... its no fun is it!? i appreciate you quick insightful grasp of this poem's intent ;))) i suppose the patience, compassion and a state of no expecting nottin' would be a way to maintain ones own peace and joy with every encounter with the Standing Stone ;))))))) love ya

[Lydia Shutter]

Those with no expectations are never disappointed, my friend. Always do what you feel is right and have no regrets. That is the way to live.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .i will take that advice my friend!

[Fran Marie]

a clever piece here so well crafted..especially like the closing line,, very witty write all the way from start to finish..nice work Mr E..

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ...thanks Fran ... good to hear what you think .. glad you enjoyed my little humorous frustration ;)
E.

[Moonie]

Ha, love the little clever line you decided to end it with...you have a knack for alliteration and that shines through this one! Another gem! Good writing, E.

[Einstein Noodle]

one of the poets tools that can keep us out of trouble yet tell it like it is at the same time eh!? have to say it again Moon... i am so happy you are back and active ...
E.

[wordman]

sometimes it` is hard for us to figure it out,like a puzzle

[Einstein Noodle]

yeah! pretty much is isn't it wordman ..thank you for your time ..sure appreciate all your visits and knowing what you think
E.

[wordman]

always a pleasure

[Kelly Scheppers]

Yes, as a species, we can be quite an enigma, can't we? You about knocked me off my feet, (and or legs) with the line, "in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance". Talk about knocking the ball out of the park, I think you just busted its stitches!

Kelly
x

[Einstein Noodle]

ohh hi babe! ;) thanks so much for your perspectives and very encouraging words ... i could not ask for more than to "..knock the ball out of the park" for you.... very humbled dear Legs! ;) thank you
E.

[redalia]

love the irregular pace of your words, it gives the impression that the poem speaks with a passion. love the ending too, kinda funny! understanding one another is a difficult task!

[Einstein Noodle]

i appreciate the specifics of what stood out for you ..it makes it helpful in maybe improving ... yes..a bit of humor meant in the exasperations of the closing line ;) peace and joy redalia!
E.

[Karen Redburn]

Wow, something new from you always brings a smile and curiosity. Human beings difficult to understand, believing some of us have more answers than the rest. Digging around in the mess, looking for ways to understand each other. Stubborn determination to keep going, and finally a realization that understanding long dead things might actually be an easier endeavour. That's what I got from the poem, and I loved it! Cheers!!

[Einstein Noodle]

Karen you are very kind ..wow back at ya! spot on review ...very much what i tried to express ... such relationships can be very frustrating for the one closed out eh!? especially if one cares ... and seems the more one tries the more thick the walls and mazes become ;) best to just shake the head and walk away :))))))))))))) thank you for your positive review ..it is very encouraging
E.

[Alfred Kukitz]

wow E!

blown away in a whoa whoa way. lines, ideation, narrative swoon!

regards,
al

[Einstein Noodle]

i think you "feel me" brother ;) thanks for reading and i am very happy with your response
E.

[Alfred Kukitz]

phenomenal lines!

[Paul Bell]

The living give expectations.
The dead leave mystery.
It's strange how you can never understand someone when they're living. But death seems to give answers.

[Einstein Noodle]

it does sometimes doesn't it Paul ... along with a lot of forgetting and forgiveness for that person ... our own conflicts and grievances shine a light on ourselves don't they ..when the one in conflict with is dead ...you have given me some good fodder for thought with your comments ... thank you for taking time sir!
E.