Standing Stone

the privacy of her expectations

kept 

those things hidden tight  

                  I

pushed them into compression locks, she

squeezing shut and squinted yet

still oozing her secrets; it

couldn't be helped

in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance

Tell me darling!            Please!                    I beg

standing  stupor with a pick- shovel 

and sifter ....shaking ... ever shaking 

through the debris  to glimpse

some bit of

understanding

            

never settling

honestly ........... tombs of the ancients are an easier task

01/24/2018

E.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

This is a deeply moving and personal journey written in a unique dramatic format- i can easily hear this as a spoken poem...a lover with the object of his love figuratively entombed by her secrets, expectations and emotional debris- and he trying to dig her out literally and figuratively. Brilliant metaphor. Eloquent and poignant words reveal unbearable
undercurrents of pain and frustration. I concur, a most formidable and long- suffering task to endeavor. I hope that luck, strength and infinite understanding prevail for this poor protagonist. Great write my friend!

[Einstein Noodle]

God bless you for your very understanding read of this..and thank you so much for pointing out what you liked about it ... i truly appreciate your review and understanding heart Annette ... i feel so gratified and validated ...thank you again my friend ;))
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Your poem touched my heart E. Blessings and light wished back to you.:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has a mixed emotional feel to it. Frustration and disappointment as the subject remains tightly stuck within a psychological cave and no matter the excavation attempts remains a mystery. Nicely penned Sir!

[Einstein Noodle]

you hit the proverbial nail sir .. tension to breaking with no escape ..thanks for reviewing this somewhat older and, confidentially, ... a tad personal piece :} peace and joy Sir John!
E.

[gram linski]

the archaeologist sifting through the bones of wasted lost love, inhaling dust and the ghost of memories, nice one, E,

[Einstein Noodle]

yeah ... she's a tough nut to crack that one ;) might better have gotten wasted :) thanks for finding this one gram .. love, peace and joy
E.

[KWP]

to release ourselves of all the secrets - the stuff we keep so close to our chest - is it that we fear the other will simply not understand, is it that we fear another judgement - ahh to live in a world where freedom means exactly that - freedom from thought ...

on the flip side - it keeps the mystery there, it means we will never ever truly know another complete, it gives us a chance to grow, learn, love and most of all accept each other just as we are ...

this is an interesting topic you have chosen here - humans - ah, we are a funny lot X

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhh we are indeed Elizabeth ... your impressions as always are sensitive and deep ...i am particularly glad you found this one to read ...Thanks always my friend ... big love and peace to you
E.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I love everything about this piece from the title, to the content, and the music that accompanies its.... those secrets that both kill us and keep us alive.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhhhhhhhhhh yes ...the mysteries of women ;) love ya Queenie! i am happy and humbled this spoke to you so ... thanks so much again for taking time

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A hidden journey laid bare for the reader, emotional needs never met but thought aloud for the reader, well done, good read.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Thomas ..i appreciate your time and encouraging remarks ... yes! never met indeed :(
:)
E.

[Neville]

It is evident from the positive remarks left by my many reviewing predecessors that these words resonate with so very many of us and on so many different levels. This is another one of your poems that must be consigned to my personal favourites. Thank you dear friend for sharing......................N

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Neville .. i am gratified and humbled it goes into your favorites ...yes ... lots of room to interpret ... i needed it to be that way ;}
E.

[Neville]

I know that feeling well..Oh and my pleasure...N

[Mrudula Rani]

E, You are a pro at writing poetry! How vividly you describe the frustrations of a lover at the secrecy of her expectations! If she keeps her expectations hidden, that is because she doesn't want her expectations to become your limitations!

[Einstein Noodle]

:) thank you for your kind review Mrudula! yeah...pretty frustrating eh!? ;{ glad you found this one to read my friend ..thanks again for taking time
E.

[Mrudula Rani]

It's entirely my pleasure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

some people hide so well....had an ex like this...she just couldn't trust enough to open up...and when she finally left, her secrets went with her...interestingly we still see each other and talk on the phone at times...and now she is much ore open...and often says she wishes she hadn't been so angry and mistrusting back then...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

you feel me then jacob...those relationships are doomed ...when one's "secret room" is 98% of the mansion with no chance for renovation .. one can pound as long and hard as we please but the will just do not budge ... really glad you found this one to read my friend ..love and peace always sir!
E.

[barleygirl]

As a person with tons of baggage buried deeply, I can very much relate to being on the receiving end of this message! I bet one or two of my suitors over the years were feeling a lot like this. Sometimes it's just a moth that cannot be captured *sigh!* Always love your unique way of describing universal situations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

boy do i appreciate you reading and reviewing this one especially Margie...because i see you as a very strong and honest woman ;) our privacy shells can be thickened and made harder by circumstances beyond our control ...so letting people even part way in can even be impossible .. very frustrating for those who feel that need to "connect" ;) hugs my dear friend
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words wonderful, demanding and worthwhile. You made the reader feel and understand the words and the emotions.
"in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance
Tell me darling! Please! I beg"
The above lines. So damn good my friend. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! Coyote!!! i feel very gratified by your remarks ..because i read in your poetry that you are a sensitive man who knows what pain and "soul" are ... God bless ... and thanks so much for taking time here
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem and you are welcome my friend.