they could have been so calm, so serene---but then there was the Garden...the tree of knowledge---and the reality of life afterward...
life is thorns and passion, love and hate, sweet nectar and poison...all at once---
carefree left when God said "everybody out of the pool"
we all need to find the perfect fig leaf so we can cover just enough of ourselves to keep our dignity through life.
j.
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7 Years Ago
ahahahaha right you are jacob....love your take on this ..i have a smile to last the day now...throu.. read moreahahahaha right you are jacob....love your take on this ..i have a smile to last the day now...through the light and the darkness ;)))) thanks man!
E.
7 Years Ago
Loved the 'everybody out of the pool' bit. Thank you jacob :D
The story of a relationship from sweet start to cruel finish? Life is filled with good and bad. We have to concentrate on the good....and sometimes search for it in dark corners! The imagery is stunning. Not sure who Zahra is, but the two of you have blended your ink wonderfully. Lydi**
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7 Years Ago
here is a link to her pages Lydia...i think you will enjoy her writings .. we have done a bunch of v.. read morehere is a link to her pages Lydia...i think you will enjoy her writings .. we have done a bunch of very different stuff together over the years here ... she is wonderful to work with and always challenges me to explore new subjects and forms .. thank you so much for reviewing, Lydia, i am glad you stopped by ...always! ;))
E.
they could have been so calm, so serene---but then there was the Garden...the tree of knowledge---and the reality of life afterward...
life is thorns and passion, love and hate, sweet nectar and poison...all at once---
carefree left when God said "everybody out of the pool"
we all need to find the perfect fig leaf so we can cover just enough of ourselves to keep our dignity through life.
j.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
ahahahaha right you are jacob....love your take on this ..i have a smile to last the day now...throu.. read moreahahahaha right you are jacob....love your take on this ..i have a smile to last the day now...through the light and the darkness ;)))) thanks man!
E.
7 Years Ago
Loved the 'everybody out of the pool' bit. Thank you jacob :D
This takes me on an interesting journey that feels ethereal & fleeting, as the imagery shifts along the way. At first I felt the thorns grabbing tight but then there's a "letting go" flow in mid-poem, only to return to grabbing ensnarement at the end. Could be an analogy for how some relationships evolve . . . *sigh!* Fondly, Margie
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7 Years Ago
yes ..it could Margie ... for sure .. thank you for taking time to read and review .. its important .. read moreyes ..it could Margie ... for sure .. thank you for taking time to read and review .. its important to read everyone's thoughts on our stuff says i! love and peace
Wonderful collaborative write, something dark, something light...beautiful language, form, flow cadence, imagery of both sides of nature and life. Love this!
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7 Years Ago
thanks dear friend! so glad you stopped to read and leave a review ... and so glad you like it :))read morethanks dear friend! so glad you stopped to read and leave a review ... and so glad you like it :))
E.
Very powerful collaboration.
Quite apt I read it today.
Darkness really is the world just now.
It's like we get drip fed it everyday.
But light will surely shine.
It always does.
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7 Years Ago
i could not agree more Paul.... sometimes it is kind of scary to think about ... history has some ve.. read morei could not agree more Paul.... sometimes it is kind of scary to think about ... history has some very dark spots in it world wide ..for myself Faith and hope are my buffers and tho they do not give me understanding ... they do bring a measure of comfort .. thanks so much for reviewing this one ... it was, of course, a treat to work with Zahra :))
E.
A beautiful integration of two wonderful poets to leave a lasting impression on the reader. Dark lights are becoming an intrigue to explore and behold. Bravo.......
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7 Years Ago
wow! thanks sami!! for taking time and your thoughtful review ..yes..we agree about the intrigue .. .. read morewow! thanks sami!! for taking time and your thoughtful review ..yes..we agree about the intrigue .. i kept thinking of the Bible verse that says something like .." if the light we guide ourselves with is darkness...how deep is that darkness..." for me kind of sobering for sure ..the best of the day to ya good friend ... sure do appreciate your opinions always
E.
a duet of a poem with so many original metaphors of note and a heap of pathos,
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7 Years Ago
you heard us didn't you sir!? ... thanks so much for taking time and commenting ..vey gratifying my .. read moreyou heard us didn't you sir!? ... thanks so much for taking time and commenting ..vey gratifying my friend
E.
Collaborations so often end up being a competition between two writers or another kind of battleground. But with this piece, you and Zahra have created a passionate intrigue in the finest language two heart-based writers can blend.
thanks emma! from me too! Zahra and i have done 4 or 5 now together ..always a treat and inspiring e.. read morethanks emma! from me too! Zahra and i have done 4 or 5 now together ..always a treat and inspiring experience ... glad you like this one... thank you for taking time to review ... means a lot
E.
This morning as I began to log in to WC, it occurred to me what an inspiring and comfortable place this has become for me.
There are so many talented people sharing, encouraging, teaching and learni.. more..