The poem, the way you’ve written it, feels almost like a spell. It is a kind of magic to find something that could easily go unnoticed and bring it to life. And the way you’ve done it here- taking the three sticks and giving them the flight of the bird- feels kind of otherworldly.
I enjoy the repetition and simplicity of your wording. The syntax adds a somewhat haunting or dream-like note. The call of the creek and the ready ears of the dog becoming attuned to one another.
Animals (and nature at large) have many lessons available if we are open to hearing them. I love the way this poem shows that and also shows the state of being open to imagination and wonder. Wonder is something we never outgrow.
This is lovely work, E. I couldn’t help but see what Margie said about Bella having passed. I’m so sorry to read that. Her memory lives on in great works like this.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
thank you so much for your empathy Eillis .. Bella seems not to have departed just yet ... her spiri.. read morethank you so much for your empathy Eillis .. Bella seems not to have departed just yet ... her spirit lingers, i am sure until Norma and I are ready .. and Bella becomes so many sweet memories .. and thank you for your thoughtful, considered reveiw .. for you to experience our walk in the park as we felt it is completely gratifying for me ... you made me day .. :))))))))))))))))
E.
Well, aren't these things just a beautiful expression of the mind and spirit! I have a Bella too but she is just a wee sprout of a mini schnauzer...they are so much better st the process than we! AMAZING!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Queenie!!! i am so glad to have your visit and review... hope all is well with you .. yes! they are .. read moreQueenie!!! i am so glad to have your visit and review... hope all is well with you .. yes! they are so much better at the process than we ... give your mini a belly scratch from me ;)) glad you enjoyed
E.
yes she did ... your appreciation of that gives me a fine smile this morning Tom ... Bella is curled.. read moreyes she did ... your appreciation of that gives me a fine smile this morning Tom ... Bella is curled up in the doorway to our computer room ... she charges me a toll to pass her ... belly scratches is her method of payment ;)
E.
This is so different and unique. We can imagine and learn a lot when we wander and wonder at things of nature. Dogs, as your fine one did, can show us on those paths. I truly enjoyed this one.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
so glad you enjoyed the little walk with us Sami ... i so agree...our canine friends show us a whole.. read moreso glad you enjoyed the little walk with us Sami ... i so agree...our canine friends show us a whole lot about giving and being aware .. thanks so much for reading and reviewing ..see ya later :)
E.
Dogs have a way of showing how... especially your precious Bella who has the imagination so many human beings' lack, their eyes and minds too busy looking at the ground.
All my two not long ago did this morning was rush about in the sunshine, wondering where on earth it came from.. didn't like to tell them that rain's due!
Your lively imagination is magic both in creating stick figures that fly across water as if born to it.. and words that fly into your readers' hearts!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
oh thank you emma...your review is just precious to me ..so kind and encouraging ... and as dog love.. read moreoh thank you emma...your review is just precious to me ..so kind and encouraging ... and as dog lovers we are connected ... our neighbors have a couple of Boston Terriers that run about like that ... the Mastiff breeds are slow and easy for the most part .. Bella needs some prompting to get started on our walks these days ... your words blessed my day emma ..thank you!
E.
7 Years Ago
Was my pleasure (always is!) but my punctuation is abyssmal! Keep save and smiling, dear friend, pl.. read moreWas my pleasure (always is!) but my punctuation is abyssmal! Keep save and smiling, dear friend, please.
Indeed the 'tail' was true as your pictures testify. The way you use wordplay throughout is quite novel and adds a certain panache to the piece.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
you are too kind John! thank you! i am happy you could find something in it to enjoy ..peace and joy.. read moreyou are too kind John! thank you! i am happy you could find something in it to enjoy ..peace and joy brother!
E.
Now that is creative both in subject and thought. Leads me down all sorts of paths. Excellent.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
i was oping you would find this one Ken ... kind of down your alley a little eh!? i hope those paths.. read morei was oping you would find this one Ken ... kind of down your alley a little eh!? i hope those paths will produce more of your creations and joy! top o' the Mahrnin' to ya sir!
E.
E. its so beautiful what you created with the words and hands and your mind :)
hehe bella has been quiet helpful to bring out the artist in full bloom :P
Have a beautiful and peaceful day!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
same to you angel! thank you so much for reading and for your thoughts ..big love and hugs to ya!read moresame to you angel! thank you so much for reading and for your thoughts ..big love and hugs to ya!
E.
Oh EN, I love this beautiful story that you've painted with your words. I am not very crafty but I also look at things with an open mind and can see things "outside the box". One of my favorite past-times is looking at clouds and finding hidden shapes, etc. ~ I enjoy looking at a piece of ceramic floor tile and picking out hidden faces of people or animals.
EN, it seems that you & Bella are very compatible and are great creative partners!
Thanks so much for sharing your words along with the picture of the bird that you made with the selection of sticks that Bella presented you with.
Blessings, 🙏
~ hsg
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
thanks for reading heavens girl! and for your kind and encouraging review ...yeah! Bella is me buddy.. read morethanks for reading heavens girl! and for your kind and encouraging review ...yeah! Bella is me buddy for sure ;)
E.
Her sticks turned into a bird- love it! You and your Bella have an amazing process..love the form and skillful, clever wordage "slurpingupdrink"- exactly! Your pictures add so much to the words as well. Altogether delightful! Love it & Bella!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
she's a sugar plumb! ;) glad you enjoyed the read and the walk along with us ... Bella is so funny a.. read moreshe's a sugar plumb! ;) glad you enjoyed the read and the walk along with us ... Bella is so funny at times... she will not get her feet wet at all... not in the dew, not in puddles, not in the creek ... so we had to find a spot that has two large, flat rocks she can stand on and get a drink... that is where we found the sticks ... every time i saw them i saw a bird ...finally brought them home ;) i sure appreciate your friendship Annette! best of the day to ya!
E.
This morning as I began to log in to WC, it occurred to me what an inspiring and comfortable place this has become for me.
There are so many talented people sharing, encouraging, teaching and learni.. more..