Sticks

Sticks

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

My dog showed me
sticks
Her name is Bella and
she showed three sticks to me
on our walk
sticking 
out of the creek water where
she stood slurpingupdrink
Bella is faun colored and 
Bull Mastiff'd
wide mouthed frog
one hundred twenty five pounds full
 ..
she showed me
one long, finger thick stick with tails ...and another
eighteen inches ...ends shredded and
one for my mind
One
For
My
Mind
its the process you see
we took them home one day and
i made a bird
she showed me sticks
i made a bird
it's flying now behind my eye
every time we walk along the creek. 
The process .....
Do you see?
her sticks?

:)
08/28/2017
E.

© 2017 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle

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The poem, the way you’ve written it, feels almost like a spell. It is a kind of magic to find something that could easily go unnoticed and bring it to life. And the way you’ve done it here- taking the three sticks and giving them the flight of the bird- feels kind of otherworldly.

I enjoy the repetition and simplicity of your wording. The syntax adds a somewhat haunting or dream-like note. The call of the creek and the ready ears of the dog becoming attuned to one another.

Animals (and nature at large) have many lessons available if we are open to hearing them. I love the way this poem shows that and also shows the state of being open to imagination and wonder. Wonder is something we never outgrow.

This is lovely work, E. I couldn’t help but see what Margie said about Bella having passed. I’m so sorry to read that. Her memory lives on in great works like this.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thank you so much for your empathy Eillis .. Bella seems not to have departed just yet ... her spiri.. read more
Eilis

5 Years Ago

You’re welcome, E. On both counts.



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She shares what seems a simple stick but means much more to her. You acknowledged it's importance and created something so beautiful, like a symbol of the special bond you both share. Please keep writing and creating!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

thank you Taino for bringing me back to this poem...it was a special walk and yes with doggies we ha.. read more
You both have a great understanding I must say. What a pair you two make!
A light, fun to read poem. Enjoyed it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

you are very kind ...Bella is much more full of it than i ;)) we do have fun tho ... and now we have.. read more
Zoya

6 Years Ago

Haha, all of you make a happy family im sure! Most welcome.
wow.... I love this sticks!!! the poem is fun and makes a good pleasure reading. it is also creative.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thanks so much Mirror! so gratified you found this one a fun read ... the whole experience was over.. read more
Mirror

7 Years Ago

you are most welcome, dearie.
You and your dog in harmony! She knew what you needed, and you created a beautiful sculpture.
Nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thanks Auntie ..such a pleasure to have you review ... glad you found this one and enjoyed .. Bella .. read more
I suppose that's why dogs lead, and humans follow.
Dogs have remarkable abilities. From sensing cancer, to everyday tasks humans could never contemplate.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

yes they do ... incredible sensing abilities ... just by allowing our love to them heals US doesn't .. read more
Quite unique, another gift from the Dogs methinks. Mine is a young Border Terrier 'Brulee' just brought me part of a brick, maybe I will build a wall one day.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

ahahahaha Brulee!! what a great name for a brick layer ;) my younger Beauregard picks up rocks ... i.. read more
Animals are so intelligent
seems she sees beautiful in many
things as I do poetry is everywhere.

There is still life in the wood even
though it isn't growing somewhere
it's that energy she was just showing
you saying what can you do with
this daddy.

Like my experience yesterday
September 24 2017
before dinner
at 6pm I leaned over
too far near the sharp end of
the small table to plug in my
cell phone to charge,

And ended up bumping
the right side of my forehead
but no bleeding but
It really hurt I'm clumsy
like my mother,

But kit she's
a beautiful white German shepherd
and she wanted to lick my ouch spot
On my forehead all better
was so cute lol... thought I'd share
that experience with you I might
make it into a poem.

Thank you for sharing
This lovely jewel. Take care friend

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

oh Benita..thank you so much for sharing that experience with your Kit .. my sister had a white Germ.. read more
Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

7 Years Ago

Very true :)
The wonders of dead wood brought to life in your writing E, nice work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thanks big A ... sure appreciate your visits .. i had such a blessed time during the whole "process".. read more
What a splendidly rendered story poem, Gene! ✨
And, that beautiful bird is a masterpiece of creative art, straight from its finder's and crafter's creatively concerted effort.
I'd say you make an excellent team … too bad Bella cannot wield a pen, giving us her thoughts, too, but I doubt they'd be far different than your own amazingly entertaining, vividly entreating version.
One unique aspect of this piece is the manner in which you've formed your lines and verses, combining with the before and after pictures of those "Sticks" … I'd say Gene and Bella belong together.
I love it all, knowing, too, that wee original structure is worthy of its place in an art museum for all to enjoy, and what a lovely finish and presentation, My Friend.

Thank you for the wondrously unforgettable thrill! ⁓ Richard : )


200/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

WOW!!! i am so humbled and pleased all at once sir ...your enjoyment of this one in all its "present.. read more
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

ps i especially appreciate the specifics you point out about structure ..it helps a lot you know ;)
The concept of something "flying behind my eye" is super duper! Dogs see things a little differently than we do and of course poets see things differently to begin with. What a lovely write...filled with imagination and happiness just to be on a nature walk. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

hi Lydia! "...just to be on a nature walk" for sure ... all day everyday right?! ;)
E.

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