this is my week 2 assignment for a class. we are supposed to use a correlating object to express thoughts and feelings about a social issue .. its a free on-line class from the University of Iowa
So many changes
Too many failures
She's supposed to succeed.
Her hands clench old and worn books
frayed grey and brown books
broken buildings
It's as though they were her only treasures.
Falling apart at the binding books
curriculum content books
long obsolete; but
in this hood .......... treasures. She can't do any better
He sees her
Waits for her
He devours her plaid skirt just below her knees and
knows she deserves it.
He smiles for her and shows his teeth
his dirty needle teeth to
bite,spit and
drool in school
they call it a crime
He hates her books, her hands, her hope.
He can barely contain the disdain .....he makes more money in a day.
the lunch packed by mother grinds to dirt her
books go down
s'pposed to save .........scattered leaves torn and blown
the dust doesn't settle
it chokes and blinds the lessons lost. So many changes
life teaches us lessons books can't---and some who resent others' learning, want to burn not only the books but also the others' purpose in life...destroy them mentally, physically and emotionally.
like Lydi...want to punch this guy in his ugly , sneering teeth.
heavy hitting here...
the abuser needs to be bound within the pages and the book slammed shut and stepped on.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
yes ...bad guys do exists don't they ;( innocence and opportunity snatched away in a heartbeat .. th.. read moreyes ...bad guys do exists don't they ;( innocence and opportunity snatched away in a heartbeat .. thanks for reading jacob .. i appreciate the encouraging words
E.
This poem hurt. After the first read and knew its conclusion the second time through really hit me hard as I realized what was happening. Her unsuspecting innocence in hope ground into the dirt of toxic masculinity. Primordial deeds I wrote of in 'I Am A Man'. The tragedy of this is so powerful. I'll be pondering this for some time. Good poem.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
thank you for finding this one William .. i appreciate your effort to peruse me pages ... yes .. it .. read morethank you for finding this one William .. i appreciate your effort to peruse me pages ... yes .. it is an awful thing no matter how one takes this .. thank you again for your time and reviewing me stuff :)
E.
Loved this , E, high school/college abuse is a normal part of the whole growing up thing, frat parties and rohypnol is the normal place to be, sad but true
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
yes....so sadly true ... our focus has been denigrated to sex and violence in every corner of Americ.. read moreyes....so sadly true ... our focus has been denigrated to sex and violence in every corner of American life ... and if one takes the high road .. scorn and mockery is the reward ..i wish it were not so ;( really glad you found this one gram .. i really appreciate your take on it!
E.
5 Years Ago
No worries E, I imagine it is worse these days, with peer pressure, social media, naked selfies, etc.. read moreNo worries E, I imagine it is worse these days, with peer pressure, social media, naked selfies, etc,
Noodle,
Can't help but visualize a demon lurking in this poem . . . it's like a symbol of the evil that lurks in the shadows looking for whom it may devour. It seems the violence expressed so well here goes beyond the physical rape to a rape of the soul of every young mind with the contempt that certain people show for innocence and its desire to blossom into something for the good. Well done.
Tom
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
thank you so much for your reviewing ...you understand all i was trying to say and more ... i feel p.. read morethank you so much for your reviewing ...you understand all i was trying to say and more ... i feel pretty gratified Tom ... thanks so much!
E.
Einstein Noodle, this is such a powerful write and we all close our eyes and our minds to the possibility that this could be one of us.
The saving grace is if God does exist, and it is my belief He does, those who have performed such evil acts, in this life, will reap His wrath.
Strangely, I was reading some of the gnostic texts and there was one section that was profound. Supposedly, each evil act we have done in life, we receive a mark on our faces. It may be a boil or a mole or a weeping infectious sore. We cannot see ourselves in darkness, so we will be exposed to light and given a mirror. And what we see is what we become.
That gnostic prophesy detailed God's wrath on us sinners.
Your poem is excellent. :-)
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
so glad you read this one .. i believe also that its God's saving grace that will lift us up and th.. read more so glad you read this one .. i believe also that its God's saving grace that will lift us up and that we all will account for our lives ... i think we will all have a surprise coming as well ... some good... some not so good ;} your review inspires me .. the gnostics are worth learning about i think ... tho i don't believe as they do on several points .. one, that everything material is evil .. on the contrary i think it is mystical itself .. and points one directly at God Almighty ;) so happy you reviewed this one ...i am going to read up more on Gnosticism instead of my "word for the day" ;)) thank you so much!
E.
5 Years Ago
I'm glad I read it too. I read the gnostics as well as many other spiritual/biblical texts as I lik.. read moreI'm glad I read it too. I read the gnostics as well as many other spiritual/biblical texts as I like having a background on many of the religions.
I would never have known the church split into 2 versions (East and West) in 1054 AD. The Eastern (Greek Orthodox)) church in Istanbul, Turkey is the Hagia Sophia, and the Western (Roman) church is the Vatican. This separation is now referred to as the star of the East-West schism. The Eastern church was taken over by the Ottoman empire and converted into a mosque, but is now a museum.
its an incredible and sometimes almost shocking history ..Papacy's efforts to bring East and West mo.. read moreits an incredible and sometimes almost shocking history ..Papacy's efforts to bring East and West more closely together are continuing (a good thing says i) but seemingly to no avail as Greek Orthodoxy resists on those few but resounding sticking points .. a sad thing .... but unity, in my mind, is not necessarily doctrinal ... much of the "differences" are minor and the united part is in God's Spirit only ;) wish we could talk over coffee Tamara ... peace on Earth!
5 Years Ago
Einstein I feel deeply, and of course I may be wrong, that this world is on a collision course with .. read moreEinstein I feel deeply, and of course I may be wrong, that this world is on a collision course with the Almighty. :-)
Very powerful too. As a rape victim, I know what the feeling could be when there's no help at all but you just have to hold your tears.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
oh my goodness JungLee! i am so sorry for your experience but i also so admire your courage and stre.. read moreoh my goodness JungLee! i am so sorry for your experience but i also so admire your courage and strength ... i am privileged to have met you here at our Cafe' and share poetry together with everyone else too ... rape is a violent crime and when families and systems fail to protect and provide a stop gap it is beyond tragic .. God bless you at this very special time of year ... healing us was a big part of Jesus' teachings and actions .. love and peace
E.
...lessons lost...
I can't image anyone turned in a more powerful piece than this.
It's dark, sad and weighted.
Posted 6 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
sorry i somehow missed these "month ago" reviews ...glad JungLee reviewed and brought me to it .. th.. read moresorry i somehow missed these "month ago" reviews ...glad JungLee reviewed and brought me to it .. thank you very much Cherrie! your comment really gives me a boost ... thanks so much for taking time and reviewing for me .. it means a lot!
E.
an education is priceless. any learning invaluable and precious. there's book smart and street smart. book smart a lot more innocent. street can be cruel. ignorance is bliss and jealous too. darkness loves darkness and is opposed to the light. poignant write. social issues can be ugly as you remind us. great accompanying song to boot ... :)
Posted 6 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
ahahaha ... so glad you enjoyed the song...old Johnny Winter has long been a favorite "old guy" rock.. read moreahahaha ... so glad you enjoyed the song...old Johnny Winter has long been a favorite "old guy" rocker .... thanks for taking time Pete! i agree...street smart and book smart are very different things ... both can save a persons life in one way or another ... Merry Christmas, Pete and thanks again for reviewing
E.
This made me want to kick, scream, and slaughter...the reaction of my warrior nature I suppose. So often these things are swept between the pages and only read about in horror literature. Hard assignment, I hope you got good marks?
Posted 6 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
yes.... swept away by all ... God bless your warrior spirit dear friend ... that is what everyone ne.. read moreyes.... swept away by all ... God bless your warrior spirit dear friend ... that is what everyone needs to make this world a better place for all... i couldn't feel any more successful than your being roused by this poem ... thanks so much for visiting me pages once again .. and for taking time to write your review .. i appreciate it very much!
E.
No punches pulled here and got a couple of sneakies in to the kidneys I see.. good on ya Gene.. It seems to me you ticked all the boxes and then some.. if you didn't get top marks for this composition & pass at distinction, then I demand a re-count.. Cheers, N
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
no...in the ring and throwing my hardest .... recount??????? do you have a recounting lisence my fri.. read moreno...in the ring and throwing my hardest .... recount??????? do you have a recounting lisence my friend? hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm! ;)
E.
6 Years Ago
oops ... sp? lisence .... correction team please....
6 Years Ago
names and addresses, gimme names and addresses.. how bad do ya want em hurt E.. c'mon tell me bro'.... read morenames and addresses, gimme names and addresses.. how bad do ya want em hurt E.. c'mon tell me bro'...
6 Years Ago
bad my friend...realllllllllllllly baaaaaaaaaad :) meet me at the pool haul at 10
Nice poem, but the title, wooooooooooooooh.
I'm gonna give it 100/100. Nice account name,
Einstein Noodle :D
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
i don't believe we have met have we? ... at any rate .. thank you for taking time to find this one ... read morei don't believe we have met have we? ... at any rate .. thank you for taking time to find this one .. nice to know that the title was the hook for you ..and about the name ;) i love Einstein and the work he accomplished ..and all his frailties as a human being .. we was quite the flirt you know ... and a poor mathematician .. but ohhhhh the intuitive gifts he had were uncanny .. anyway.. thanks again, glad you liked the read and nice to meet you ... i (like many) have a big liking for Pink Floyd ...see you soon at your place ;)
E.
I am not sure if we have met or not, but let this be my debut appearance to you, and let you be your.. read moreI am not sure if we have met or not, but let this be my debut appearance to you, and let you be your debut appearance to me. No problem, any time. What do you mean by, my place??
This morning as I began to log in to WC, it occurred to me what an inspiring and comfortable place this has become for me.
There are so many talented people sharing, encouraging, teaching and learni.. more..