Hunting Doves - Collab with SoloSolace

Solo posted this on her pages a while back so i apologize if you have already read it :} but if you read again .. i hope you are happy with the time spent.

Hunting Doves

Mourning  for themselves, it seems, they coo.

Proper load for the killing is one ounce 

of eights. Kill as many as you can; 

they are small.

There can be no turning of cheeks today.

As sheets fly in classy white

Knowledge imparted by the profile

Low keys of feelings saying no

Hurting the words 

Lack of senseless lurking

Within the curious mind

Rides a form of dove

Blinking out the rut 

How far can they go, after all; 

evolution calls the young ones squabs.

They pick at mother's neck for crop milk.

Who ever said this is somehow better?

They whistle through tails when they leave.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

I'm impressed with a number of things here. elements in the work. Firstly and not in any order of importance; the ornithological correct detail. not many know about pigeon or dove milk.
Secondly it goes without saying that this is a seamless collaboration and perhaps not finally the number of subtle undercurrents there are in this work. A truly remarkable piece.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! thank you so much Ken! your in depth sensitive read is humbling and very gratifying for me ...it means a lot .. thank you again sir!
E.

[Neville]

Having finally got here.. I can only congratulate the pair of ya for crafting what amounts to a really great collab ... I have not shot anything myself for many years.. except myself in the foot on several occasions but there ya go...
as soon as the title caught my eye, I was effectively drawn in.. and I was seriously impressed with lingo throughout.. in effect, I really dont think this could be bettered... Neville :)))))

[Einstein Noodle]

could not hope for more Nev! thank you for finding this one and letting me know your thoughts .. i think this is one of my favorite collaborations ... a real treat to work with Solo .. whom, come to think of it, i have not seen around lately ... hmmmm must check in on him right away ;) so grateful for all your support and ideas my friend!
E.

[Neville]

You are always more than welcome my friend, so no probs on that score.... N :)))

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... Mourning Doves are as essential as Sunshine and Rain... they share our Pain.
They are God’s messengers on earth. Amen

[Einstein Noodle]

i love the way you put that Pat! "they share our pain" ... and put it to song don't they?! thanks so much always for reviewing my poems .. top o' the mahrnin'to ya! ;)
E.

[barleygirl]

Amazing! I've loved this song all my life -- a favorite. One of my dogs is Paloma (dove in Spanish). Plus we have doves around here & I could visualize this whole thing as I was reading. The first time I shot a shotgun, I was dove hunting & I got a black eye from the kick. So many thoughts & memories jamming my head as I read this. My first dove-hunting trip was so memorable, I should write the story. Your poem is a grand inspiration! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

yes...a wonderful song ... a favorite of mine as well...still have the vinyl from waaaaaaaaaaay back then ;) i am surprised that you have gone dove hunting ... did the black eye teach you something ? :) i went once as well ... they are very tasty but i never went again .. just does not seem right nor fair nor any fun at all ... and your dog Paloma .. Spanish for dove .. how cool my friend .. not wonder you connected with this one on more than one level .. please let me know if you do write that story .. i would not want to miss it!

[An owl on the moon]

One can feel the movement of their wings within your words. What a wondrous collab, how it sings from a deep, melancholy place. And I can hear them now, moving across my garden.

[Einstein Noodle]

i also love the owls searching hoot in the night .. i couldn't have expected a better result from someone reading this poem ... movement, sings, deep, melancholy all key to the experience ..thanks so much for your depth and sensitive review .. it is very encouraging
E.

[wordman]

great colab,they are majestic creatures,don`t see why people kill them,food or sport

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ...only a bite or two at most .. but they are pretty tasty ... when i was very young i did shot one and eat it :{ i confess ... the mind i have grown over the years tweeks my conscience ..i use to do a lot of things :-0 ...thanks for reviewing wordman! :)
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

shoot one that is :(

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Transcendent intertwining of talent in this collaborative work. The words flutter and fly, hesitate and fall with such haunting imagery "They whistle through tails when they leave." Disturbing, dark ballet. Kudos to both poets!

[Einstein Noodle]

wow Annette! your words are better then the poem as they say ..so grateful for your reviews and gratified by your response to this one .. God bless!
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

I am humbled by your words sir, and thank you for the blessing- appreciated more than you can know!

[emmajoy]

This really is a wonderful extravagance of language, and, the fact that it was created by two 'separate' writers is extraordinary, there's not a space between two fine minds. Beautiful... sad in a way but... special.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you emmajoy! i think you have hit on all we intended ... it is sad in a way and i love the way you put that ... thank you for your sensitive reading and letting us know your thoughts on it .. blessings always my friend!
E.

[andrew mitchell]

A lovely blended write from two fine writers, I even saw serendipity and lookingatthestars in this poem, funny that :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

what a great compliment as they are both favorites of mine also ... thanks for stopping to read and review my friend .. much appreciated!
E.

[Zahra]

This is really powerful you two. Amazingly penned.

[Einstein Noodle]

glad you like it Zahra! you make my day with your visit! :) love ya!
E.