My Eye Beholds a Winsome Song

My Eye Beholds a Winsome Song

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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Editing help from Richard

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My eye beholds a winsome song for naught
but I to hear; and tho, nay ears can speak
my words will sail, unfurl, such want and reach
a  rocky, jagged bleed too far aloft.
My only ring  undone was held and fought
a heart sublime to render fallow each.
Her love and fields left empty; long impeached
in future hemlock groves tween strangled thought.
Nay words to thee from pinkest lips upon
frail grassy knoll dare mean to drink my fill.
Your nectar there, as dew, so sweet to tongue
repleat with mercies yielding bliss now gone.
Depart and send up song for ears to thrill
this heart and stop the bleed for love's undone.

© 2017 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle


The Petrarchan sonnet is divided into two stanzas, the octave (the first eight lines) followed by the answering sestet (the final six lines). The rhyme scheme, abba, abba, cdecde or cdcdcd


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I just love the way poetry says everything so eloquently. These words are so beautiful-winsome,song, naught, sail, unfurl, aloft, sublime, groves, grassy, knoll, nectar, dew, bliss, sweet and thrill-that I had to remind myself that I was witnessing heartbreak. Excellent, E.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

;) ....perfect! ...thank you my friend! thank you very very much :))
E.



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well, wow! that's a rather impressive bunch of words running and dancing their way right down the screen.

Hard not to get caught up immediately within the first few lines, askance of where is this melody of thought taking me. It bounces, twists and turns right there in front of my face ...

it asks for more and gives more.

this is certainly different for you E - I like it very much - well done X X x

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

yes...very different indeed ;) thanks so much for giving it a read ma'am ..i love to see your smilin.. read more
An ethereal world you have created through such poetic mastery with such romantic balance of the abstract and concrete. I commend you for the aesthetic paragon of old English illustrated in such excellent piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

wow! you are too kind sir! nice to meet you and i will stop by your place for sure. glad you enjoyed.. read more
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J Manuel

7 Years Ago

That's a 10-4
I know nothing about proper sonnets, I just read and see if I get it and enjoy what I am reading. This has that old country sound when read aloud. I like that. Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thanks Valentine ... sure appreciate your giving it a read .. ;) the sonnet is not my home page eith.. read more
Wonderfully romantic poem...and the form is exquisite. The old English words are a bit off-putting for me, but I loved the feel of the emotions in this one. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thank you Lydia ..for taking time to read and review ..much appreciated! i understand what you are s.. read more
Lydia Shutter

7 Years Ago

I very rarely write forms. It is too restricting for me. I do understand why you used those words!
I'm so envious of those who write to form, and so beautifully at that. Lovely romantic write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thank you Papaya ... coming from you i am thoroughly gratified and encouraged .. so happy you enjoye.. read more
Papaya

7 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)
Ah... if I could write thus... :-) Really lovely.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

i am certain that you can my friend! i think trying one form or another from time to time adds focus.. read more
Drowning In Reality

7 Years Ago

Nah... I'm dyslexic. I can read Shakespeare, for example, only when i listen at the same time... unl.. read more
I honestly care very little about what form a poem is written in. what I do wish to know is does said poem affect me? If the form helps it do this then all to the good but that is the extent of my interest in form. Now how it compares historically, that is another story. This makes me think of Donne or Kit Marlowe and that also is good.
This is, all that aside a lovely, liliting romantic piece. Just the thing for the season. It does absolutely have an inner melody.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

you are an experienced hand in this sir and not alone in your thoughts on form ... but having a basi.. read more
E, i miss reading classical verses. And i am truly glad to read a piece using the classic form/structure. Simply beautiful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thank you gabrielle ..classic doesn't come easy for me but the reward in the attempt is worth the ef.. read more
Oh so beautifully composed! I love the fixed-form poetry and you've mastered the Petrarchan sonnet
in this awesome post! ~Sharon

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

very happy you like it. fixed forms are a must for someone like me .. a free verse man by nature .. .. read more
Magical, mysterious, melodious, sensual, and distraught, Gene, you've taken your readers' senses on an iambic journey through wonderment and emotion, with such poetical aplomb one is hard pressed to wonder if it were not Patrarch, himself, who penned this brilliant piece.
I bow with envious gratitude from pleasures derived, and humbleness that my name was mentioned.

I am convinced you can do anything poetically with equal skill … amazing, My Friend! ⁓ Richard 😳

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

short story stevens

7 Years Ago

I'm sorry for commenting on your thing but I just started this site not even 5 minutes ago and I hav.. read more
short story stevens

7 Years Ago

On another note this was a beautiful piece
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

i am not sure if you are talking to Richard or myself or both ;) but i will be glad to visit and rea.. read more

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