My Eye Beholds a Winsome Song

Editing help from Richard

My eye beholds a winsome song for naught

but I to hear; and tho, nay ears can speak

my words will sail, unfurl, such want and reach

a  rocky, jagged bleed too far aloft.

My only ring  undone was held and fought

a heart sublime to render fallow each.

Her love and fields left empty; long impeached

in future hemlock groves tween strangled thought.

Nay words to thee from pinkest lips upon

frail grassy knoll dare mean to drink my fill.

Your nectar there, as dew, so sweet to tongue

repleat with mercies yielding bliss now gone.

Depart and send up song for ears to thrill

this heart and stop the bleed for love's undone.

Author's Note

The Petrarchan sonnet is divided into two stanzas, the octave (the first eight lines) followed by the answering sestet (the final six lines). The rhyme scheme, abba, abba, cdecde or cdcdcd

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

I just love the way poetry says everything so eloquently. These words are so beautiful-winsome,song, naught, sail, unfurl, aloft, sublime, groves, grassy, knoll, nectar, dew, bliss, sweet and thrill-that I had to remind myself that I was witnessing heartbreak. Excellent, E.

[Einstein Noodle]

;) ....perfect! ...thank you my friend! thank you very very much :))
E.

[andrew mitchell]

A lovely medieval tale of love Einstein, superbly written in that old fashion way to deliver fine verses worthy of capturing the princess in question. What a woo indeed!:)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you sir ... it was a challenge and a pleasure working it out ..i appreciate your taking time to read and glad it gave something in return ..
E.

[Lorry]

I don't know what to say about this piece Einstein, I've never heard such eloquence and beauty before. I may not know that much about poetry, being completely self taught and an awful teacher, but this is why poetry has such a hold of so many of us and we can only wish we were even in the same ball park as your words. You could transport me back four hundred years to the globe theatre and the audience would applaud wildly, but not before booing that young upstart Shakespeare off the stage :)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha ..you know...i bet Shakespeare had many a booings ... your remarks humble me ... if you read my about me you will find one reason at least for my starting to write ..the other was a major emotional loss that could not be held inside .. before WC i started on MySpace until they changed everything .. then i made my way here where i learn with every visit ... self taught can not be considered less of anything in my book .. honest writing trumps all ;) thank you for your kindness in visiting and reviewing ..it is nice to meet you and i will certainly return the favor ... i am gratified to beat hell by your enjoyment of this poem ..God bless
E.

[B]

I like how you describe her lips
It most certainly is a very romantic piece
very light and sweet with desire and some sense of bewilderment
well done E

Wanna write together .....

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Solo! i would love to write together .. its something that WC offers that i very much appreciate..thank you again for reading and reviewing
E.

[Sami Khalil]

Romantic at heart, masterful with pen. Such an awesome poem with depth and discipline...:)...........................

[Einstein Noodle]

that means a lot to me Sami! thank you ..happy you enjoyed reading.
E.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome .....:::::)))))

[SleeplessVolcano]

ohhh...bravo Mr Professor E! This makes me wanna take peanut butter and spread it on a few volumes of Shakespeare and eat Romeo & Juliet or Hamlet as a snack with high tea....:) The Petrachan is lovely.....I like to experiment....I even found some sonnets which mock the tradional rhyme scheme, just proving that creative poetry can also flourish as a sonnet, even when all the rules are broken!!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you sir ...peanut butter on Shakespeare ... thanks for the big smile now crossing me face :))))))) yes ...one must have the rules else no rebellion ;) love your review sir ..top o' the mahrnin' to ya!
E.

[emmajoy]

Video so appropriate... makes me smile.

Good morning, sir. I can't write to form, I try to do so as a discipline, rarely if ever successfully. Consequently, your offering is an absolute feast and revelation. Seems you can do anything because you want to, you work and work until you achieve and, look now, right now, the lyricism and structure you've created, exquisitely

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you emma ... for taking time to read and review ...i agree ..the discipline is good for all from time to time .. trying new forms never is in vain ...here at the cafe the unique styles of all makes this such a fruitful place .. i could not be more gratified by your smile .. and a fine morning back at ya! love and peace
E.
ps and thanks for mentioning the video .. its so beautiful i think .. Italian (some say French) is in my opinion the language of love ..i think because they can express being upset as passionately as being in love ;)
E.

[emmajoy]

As far as I'm concerned, all things Italian are... delicious!

Oh yes, POETRY. Must appear a little intelligent, much agree with what you say about discipline! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ........ and ((((((((((((ej)))))))))))))))

[Kelly Scheppers]

What can I say, other than you swept me off my feet with this poetic gem! It gave a feel of Shakespeare to me which I find utterly enchanting...which is typically what you are on any given day!

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness ..swept you off your beautiful feet did i!? my life is complete ;) thank you for your kind words which encourage me to no end! i am so grateful for your friendship and opinions, Ms. Legs!
E.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are a joy to know, Gene, and I am equally as grateful for your friendship! x

[Einstein Noodle]

((((((((((((((((((((((KS))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Great Aunt Astri]

Einstein, I think your therapy is working! I would say you no longer have Altsheimers!
Marvelous poem.

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhhhh Hallelujah! my good good friend!! i am cured!! :)))))))))))))))))
thanks Auntie ..your review is much appreciated always .. and you know... i am kind of proud of this one .. like KWP has said ..it is not my norm .. but very satisfying because of the discipline demanded .. thank you for stopping to read ..love and joy to you!
E.

[Dara]

Such tenderness conveyed in each line of this beautiful poem. Written with the heart of a true romantic, the words wash over the reader like a warm spring rain. Your poetic skills really shine here. Simply wonderful!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Dara! i appreciate your encouraging words and am very happy you enjoyed reading this one .. i actually had fun (in hindsight) grinding out something to fit the rigid form ;) love and peace to you dear friend!
E.