Bursting

written 12/03/2015 and slightly tweeked on the date below ..i wish i could remember the inspiration please know there are no right or wrong ways to see this .. i hope you share your impressions

Share the bursting

trills and sustaining spices

                                     please  ......................................    

both sweet and sour....................

                     

                 Overwhelm 

me 

                      ....I will consume you.

melodies of institutes are

songs for forlorn loons

magnifying ...  

constituting ... 

(as if they couldn't sing for themselves)

                       weary           ...so damn weary

                       worn

                       and 

bursting  ............................ apart 

seams and scenes  

not meant for human beings

rant and wriggle dance to

shake free............ old tales ........... please!

in sophisticated skank .. 

E.

03/02/2017

Author's Note

Reviews

[Neville]

Like being caught in an explosion, or riding a bagatelle & not knowing where the next hit is coming from, or where the hell it's gonna strike ya... The original inspiration is now irrelevant, what matters, is there once was one and whatever it was, gave birth to 'Bursting'... Liked and liked a lot my friend ..... Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

i am particularly glad you found this one and brought me back to it by reviewing Neville ... you are right of course .. the inspiration's call is more than enough ...riding a bagatelle!! great expression my friend ...or knocking around inside a pin ball machine ;) so happy you liked the read ..actually its these kinds of expression that best suite me .. love and peace :)
E.

[Neville]

Peace & Love... are all we really need so back at ya my friend.... N

[Neville]

.. Still enjoyed as much as my first visit, even after two very curious years mate .. so there, it must be bloomin good .............................. N :)

[Einstein Noodle]

sorry not to have something new sir .. but I think today I will get one done. been working on another hymn poem and I believe it is ready. I appreciate all you visits of course my friend; and the encouragement .. it's kind of a curse isn't it?! to agonize over words, forms etc. ... why the heck to we do it Nev? We are more than twice bitten aren't we!?
E.

[Neville]

Darn write mate .. write on Gene .. no pressure from me at least, so take it both easy n slow ..

N. :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Haunting, evocative songs of loons- primordial and ever-seeking...rest...love...fulfillment...God...as do we. Fitting backdrop for the melancholic, searching, despairing and eloquent words of this poem. "Weary...so damn weary...worn and bursting....apart......seams and scenes". Love the statement, the original form and movement of this. " Dance to shake free"- Yes! Wonderful.

[Einstein Noodle]

i appreciate your sensitive reviews Annette .. they encourage me so you might want to be careful ;)) love and joy my friend
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

So beautiful and Melancholic
they seem sad and weary
from the weight of the world


to be in the loving arms
of the LORD because
life is tiring...

I know
the feeling maybe
when I'm with my
family things might
be calm again but
God family and
friends
help until than.



melodies of institutes are

songs for forlorn loons
magnifying ...
constituting ...
(as if they couldn't sing for themselves)

weary
worn
and
bursting ............................ apart

seams and scenes




I enjoyed the poem and the
Video happy sad lovely.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you sooooo much Benita .. your sensitive read and your feelings are exactly what i meant ..thank you again for taking time ma'am ..and i agree about friends, family and the Lord ..all can be places of rest and assurance ... as all those things can also be stressful points in our minds and bodies as well ;)
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

I'm always happy with family I'm more stressed around my husband he's a lot more negative about things in life it's very tiring so God family friends praying poetry the bible music movies going one walks always very healing I love being around my little niece she has so much energy a handful just like how my sister and I were at that age but she's sensitive sweet and bossy lol she's like sunshine and the most blunt open-minded and funniest little 6 year old so my family is very calm refreshing souls to be around. But you're very welcome. 😊

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

I meant on not one

[Einstein Noodle]

sensitive, sweet and bossy ... how perfect is that in a 6 yr. old little girl ;) both my girls were like that ... the teen yrs may get a little tricky but if everyone makes it through OK ..there is a good chance your niece will be confident and original thinker ... valuable in many situations and stations in life .. Happy Easter Celebration by the way ;)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you very true :) same to you my friend

[Island Hippy]

This strikes me as deeply emotional like someone carrying the weight of the world and with that burden they have lost themselves. The words "overwhelm me.... I will consume you" there is such emotion there. I also really like the way you use the word bursting, there's energy in that word. My review is rather poor but I enjoyed this a lot. Izzy

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much for your review Izzy ..its important to me .. love your take on this one and appreciate you choosing to read it ...what you point out are key focus points for me personally ..there is a lot in this one ..something for all i hopes ;)) love and peace Izzy ... shake a hula for me will ya!? :)
E.

[ReedWrite]

please ......................................

That one line...coming where it did...the way you penned it...touched me. I don't know why. It just triggered a response. I also loved this line:

Overwhelm
me
....I will consume you.

So few words...yet so rich in emotion and meaning!

weary ...so damn weary
worn
and
bursting ............................ apart

I feel every word...and immediately empathize with the emotions driving your pen.

What a beautifully crafted piece, E! Kudos!

[Einstein Noodle]

oh thank you Reed ..getting this one down was cathartic for me and i could not be happier that you mention that one word and how it affected you ... i appreciate your "feeling" this one and for letting me know ..love and peace!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

after some time we are so weighed down by emotional baggage, our song becomes a shrill sound..not a melody but a forlorn wail...
and there is no calm, no contentment left...if only we didn't think so much, and felt more.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes!! the damn brain ..just please give me the off switch ;))) great comment ...seems you feel the anguish ... thank you for the review my friend .. much appreciated!
E.

[aLittlePain]

Well call me loonie! ....lol 'songs for forlorn loons' I chuckled at that. We could howl at the moon if you like E :)
Now... 'sophisticated skank' that was just sublime :) for musicians skank has a bit of a reggae groove, both a dance and a style of guitar strum. Very cool poem E! R xo

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you ma'am ..your review has made my day ... i feel younger and suddenly have more energy ... i suspect it will explode in dance within minutes!:))) yes...howling at the moon ....absolutely have done that ... and caused the dogs to start barking on the next ridge over ;) love your visit Pain ... top o' the mahrnin' to ya!
E.

[aLittlePain]

Haha, you're welcome E in all honesty I don't stop by your place often enough, but am always grateful for your frequent visits x

[Einstein Noodle]

;) .....................

[KWP]

Hello you - Songs for forlorn loons - that was the line that made me smile - I am sure we all have a bit of forlorn looniness in us yes? In that case it's a sing for one and all - I am happy to sing with ya my friend - I will also bring the whisky so we can burst and dance sophisticatedly skank style - whatever the heck that is ...

I like this work of yours - I like the leaps and bounds and giggles it brings :D ....

love to you E XX

[Einstein Noodle]

i am fulfilled if you are leaping, bounding and giggling my friend! ... i was just at your place finding things i haven't read and here you stopped to see me as well .. i call that vundabar dahlink! the loons are impressive aren't they ... skank! ;) its an old slang expression .. it popped out without thinking so i left it tho i am not sure about ti in the poem .. ah well...best leave well enough alone right?! so nice to see your happy face Elizabeth .. God bless you big big ...right now!
E.

[Drowning In Reality]

I love your style. Wide open to the experience and the sensations they inspire. Well formed as well. I always feel my form is lacking when I see one so well done. Bravo.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..i do lean toward the free verse ..but try more classical things to help ground me as i have no real education nor experience in writing .. i shmooze here at the cafe to learn all i can ;) your reading attitude for this one is spot on ...we must be kindred spirits as allowing the freedom seems natural for you .. thank you for taking time and nice to be getting to know you! see ya around :)
E.