This truly is a wonderful poem, story, visual - a painting in words, in fact. Tis one of the best i've read for a long, long time. Now why do i say that.. thoughts just sped out of me?!
Your use of language, the way you've broken your phrases is as if your eyes were moving here to there to here and then, there.. watching the flight of the crows... watching their behaviour, their arguing.. and how perhaps, you were reminded of Life.. how things and behaviour work inside it, roots up.
Know that if i read your poem again, other wee scenes and feelings will buzz around my early morning head. That is what good and sincere writing is supposed to do, but rarely does.
Wonderful: (.. the melded colors have become too thick
crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic
tic old frozen earth
how could i divine such a thing .. '
oh my dear friend emma! i could not be more gratified by your esponse to reading this poem ..there i.. read moreoh my dear friend emma! i could not be more gratified by your esponse to reading this poem ..there is nothing more one can ask of our poetry ..thank you from the bottom of my heart ..for reading and reviewing ..for taking time to notice the breaks i intended and for letting your thoughts speed away ...thank you thank you thank you .. the crows have been stewing around in my head a long time so letting them fly was a blessing for me .. they are such a powerful omen and their voices always demanding notice .. love your review ..thank you again sister!
E.
Damn, your poetry always hits me like a ton of bricks, in the best way :) You have such a style to your flow that saturates the reader's senses, superb! :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
your words are very encouraging .. i hope i will not let you down, dear friend! ;) i have to say tha.. read moreyour words are very encouraging .. i hope i will not let you down, dear friend! ;) i have to say that you have made my day .. it's only 4 am (i get up early) and my heart is made ready for what the day will bring ..thanks to you :))) ...you are very kind and gracious, Poppy ..
E.
The imagery seeped into me like winter's cold but the theme passed into something like a question, somewhat understood but with a dim light.
Regards,
Al
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
there is cold there for sure ...good to see you around my friend ... thank you for your reading and .. read morethere is cold there for sure ...good to see you around my friend ... thank you for your reading and review .. i feel gratified it "seeped into" you .. peace and joy good friend
E.
Great use of words. You had me looking them up a lot. Thank you for that, always like to learn new words! I enjoyed the read, it was interesting, poetic!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
thank you for taking time Cyprian .. i had to look them up to use them ;)
E.
7 Years Ago
You're most welcome. Oh, thank you for doing that.
well E, you ain't dead yet, thank goodness so send those crows packing... with a sullen, yet breathing poem as this one, it shows your heart is still warm and beating and it will not go "gently into the night" as another famous poet put it...
anyway, E a very nicely written poem says I...
redzone
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
thank you ..i am encouraged by your remarks .. no... not dead yet! ;) still here trying to get it wr.. read morethank you ..i am encouraged by your remarks .. no... not dead yet! ;) still here trying to get it write ..right?! :} i'm grateful for your visits sir! thank you again!
E.
This truly is a wonderful poem, story, visual - a painting in words, in fact. Tis one of the best i've read for a long, long time. Now why do i say that.. thoughts just sped out of me?!
Your use of language, the way you've broken your phrases is as if your eyes were moving here to there to here and then, there.. watching the flight of the crows... watching their behaviour, their arguing.. and how perhaps, you were reminded of Life.. how things and behaviour work inside it, roots up.
Know that if i read your poem again, other wee scenes and feelings will buzz around my early morning head. That is what good and sincere writing is supposed to do, but rarely does.
Wonderful: (.. the melded colors have become too thick
crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic
tic old frozen earth
how could i divine such a thing .. '
oh my dear friend emma! i could not be more gratified by your esponse to reading this poem ..there i.. read moreoh my dear friend emma! i could not be more gratified by your esponse to reading this poem ..there is nothing more one can ask of our poetry ..thank you from the bottom of my heart ..for reading and reviewing ..for taking time to notice the breaks i intended and for letting your thoughts speed away ...thank you thank you thank you .. the crows have been stewing around in my head a long time so letting them fly was a blessing for me .. they are such a powerful omen and their voices always demanding notice .. love your review ..thank you again sister!
E.
thanks wordman! i am working at that as most are .. the crows image and omen stays with me and final.. read morethanks wordman! i am working at that as most are .. the crows image and omen stays with me and finally found a spot to use them .. if they are happy....i am happy ;) appreciate your time sir! thank you!
E.
Speaks of pain and a glimpse of
beauty of nature I think we all
go in and out of this in life.
Nicely penned.
Blessings my friend
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
thank you Benita ... i appreciate your encouraging words .. love your new avatar, by the way :) read morethank you Benita ... i appreciate your encouraging words .. love your new avatar, by the way :)
E.
7 Years Ago
That's resent picture I took this 2017 of January thank you you're very welcome my friend
Do not watch the videos or listen to things on here, most times my own brand of music is on t.v. My thoughts went to watching the birds in the snow falling getting to the feeders here. Pecking away to get to the frozen suet blocks, Valentine
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
hey V. ! thank you once again for visiting and sharing the images ...my dad use to be very dedicated.. read morehey V. ! thank you once again for visiting and sharing the images ...my dad use to be very dedicated to feeding and housing birds ..he especially loved the Martins who returned to his "hotels" every year .. my self .. i have committed to hummingbirds only .. they are such a treasure to behold and they don't make the mess that others seem to ... I can see you watching out the window and enjoying the crow's behavior ... I like them because they are such a powerful omen and so odd to watch .. i think they are actually one of the nasty breeds of birds .. like blue jays and such .. thanks again for taking time Kathie! much appreciated.
E.
The imagery of communing with nature was fantastic... and then suddenly I thought it was about trying to forget a lost love. The emotions are wounded and dark. The music is lovely....the lyrics touched me. Feeling like a child again....free, innocent. If only we could recapture it all. Lydi**
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
yes dear friend! a lost love for sure ;( not necessarily my own ..but anyone's ;) age definitely put.. read moreyes dear friend! a lost love for sure ;( not necessarily my own ..but anyone's ;) age definitely puts distance between such pain ..and graceful acceptance of shouldering our own little crosses without too much complaint ... its a delight that reading gave you free and innocent feelings .. that's better than anything one could ever write ..thanks Lydia!! i really appreciate all your visits and reviewing :)
E.
wow! Ken ..i am so gratified ..thank you for reading and reviewing.. so happy it brought thoughts of.. read morewow! Ken ..i am so gratified ..thank you for reading and reviewing.. so happy it brought thoughts of history and landscapes .. i know how present you are in those highland places .. glad you enjoyed my friend ..
E.
7 Years Ago
So was it a murder or a parliament of crows? And you are more than welcome.
7 Years Ago
ah well ..i guess i will leave that to you my friend ;)
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