The Gathering

The Gathering

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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if this poem sets a certain mood for you, though the video is ten minutes long, you might like it ;)

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The Gathering
my gloaming passed
nonchalant, fine silken silt sifting through
window and door with disregard
IT collected like crows convening in
Oaks of empty scabbards
rattling raucous discord the 
dissonance has abraded comfort ......... you, your
ice pack shouldered: when?........................i
can not garner - the melded colors have become too thick
crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic
tic old frozen earth
how could i divine such a thing 
your leaving as the flock suddenly bursts
an ice pack proffered for my disease ...... this
heart.
E.
1/06/2017

© 2017 Einstein Noodle


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Einstein Noodle

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This truly is a wonderful poem, story, visual - a painting in words, in fact. Tis one of the best i've read for a long, long time. Now why do i say that.. thoughts just sped out of me?!

Your use of language, the way you've broken your phrases is as if your eyes were moving here to there to here and then, there.. watching the flight of the crows... watching their behaviour, their arguing.. and how perhaps, you were reminded of Life.. how things and behaviour work inside it, roots up.

Know that if i read your poem again, other wee scenes and feelings will buzz around my early morning head. That is what good and sincere writing is supposed to do, but rarely does.

Wonderful: (.. the melded colors have become too thick

crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic
tic old frozen earth
how could i divine such a thing .. '

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

oh my dear friend emma! i could not be more gratified by your esponse to reading this poem ..there i.. read more
emmajoy

7 Years Ago

Came to read and listen again... extraordinary!
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thanks emme! made my day, you did!! :))) hugs



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Damn, your poetry always hits me like a ton of bricks, in the best way :) You have such a style to your flow that saturates the reader's senses, superb! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Ruth

7 Years Ago

Ah, bless you hon, thank you, always my pleasure :)
The imagery seeped into me like winter's cold but the theme passed into something like a question, somewhat understood but with a dim light.

Regards,
Al

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

there is cold there for sure ...good to see you around my friend ... thank you for your reading and .. read more
Great use of words. You had me looking them up a lot. Thank you for that, always like to learn new words! I enjoyed the read, it was interesting, poetic!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thank you for taking time Cyprian .. i had to look them up to use them ;)
E.
Cyprian Van Dyke

7 Years Ago

You're most welcome. Oh, thank you for doing that.
well E, you ain't dead yet, thank goodness so send those crows packing... with a sullen, yet breathing poem as this one, it shows your heart is still warm and beating and it will not go "gently into the night" as another famous poet put it...

anyway, E a very nicely written poem says I...

redzone

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thank you ..i am encouraged by your remarks .. no... not dead yet! ;) still here trying to get it wr.. read more
This truly is a wonderful poem, story, visual - a painting in words, in fact. Tis one of the best i've read for a long, long time. Now why do i say that.. thoughts just sped out of me?!

Your use of language, the way you've broken your phrases is as if your eyes were moving here to there to here and then, there.. watching the flight of the crows... watching their behaviour, their arguing.. and how perhaps, you were reminded of Life.. how things and behaviour work inside it, roots up.

Know that if i read your poem again, other wee scenes and feelings will buzz around my early morning head. That is what good and sincere writing is supposed to do, but rarely does.

Wonderful: (.. the melded colors have become too thick

crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic
tic old frozen earth
how could i divine such a thing .. '

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

oh my dear friend emma! i could not be more gratified by your esponse to reading this poem ..there i.. read more
emmajoy

7 Years Ago

Came to read and listen again... extraordinary!
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thanks emme! made my day, you did!! :))) hugs
touching write my friend,great imagery and metaphors

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thanks wordman! i am working at that as most are .. the crows image and omen stays with me and final.. read more
 wordman

7 Years Ago

just don`t feed them to much,lol
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

ahahaha! good advice wordman! i will take it! :)
Speaks of pain and a glimpse of
beauty of nature I think we all
go in and out of this in life.

Nicely penned.

Blessings my friend

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

thank you Benita ... i appreciate your encouraging words .. love your new avatar, by the way :)
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Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

7 Years Ago

That's resent picture I took this 2017 of January thank you you're very welcome my friend
Do not watch the videos or listen to things on here, most times my own brand of music is on t.v. My thoughts went to watching the birds in the snow falling getting to the feeders here. Pecking away to get to the frozen suet blocks, Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

hey V. ! thank you once again for visiting and sharing the images ...my dad use to be very dedicated.. read more
The imagery of communing with nature was fantastic... and then suddenly I thought it was about trying to forget a lost love. The emotions are wounded and dark. The music is lovely....the lyrics touched me. Feeling like a child again....free, innocent. If only we could recapture it all. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

yes dear friend! a lost love for sure ;( not necessarily my own ..but anyone's ;) age definitely put.. read more
What a poem. I love the way this folds around itself and speaks to my history and landscape soul.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

wow! Ken ..i am so gratified ..thank you for reading and reviewing.. so happy it brought thoughts of.. read more
Ken Simm.

7 Years Ago

So was it a murder or a parliament of crows? And you are more than welcome.
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

ah well ..i guess i will leave that to you my friend ;)

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