The Gathering

if this poem sets a certain mood for you, though the video is ten minutes long, you might like it ;)

The Gathering

my gloaming passed

nonchalant, fine silken silt sifting through

window and door with disregard

IT collected like crows convening in

Oaks of empty scabbards

rattling raucous discord the 

dissonance has abraded comfort ......... you, your

ice pack shouldered: when?........................i

can not garner - the melded colors have become too thick

crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic

tic old frozen earth

how could i divine such a thing 

your leaving as the flock suddenly bursts

an ice pack proffered for my disease ...... this

heart.

E.

1/06/2017

Author's Note

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This truly is a wonderful poem, story, visual - a painting in words, in fact. Tis one of the best i've read for a long, long time. Now why do i say that.. thoughts just sped out of me?!

Your use of language, the way you've broken your phrases is as if your eyes were moving here to there to here and then, there.. watching the flight of the crows... watching their behaviour, their arguing.. and how perhaps, you were reminded of Life.. how things and behaviour work inside it, roots up.

Know that if i read your poem again, other wee scenes and feelings will buzz around my early morning head. That is what good and sincere writing is supposed to do, but rarely does.

Wonderful: (.. the melded colors have become too thick

crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic
tic old frozen earth
how could i divine such a thing .. '

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my dear friend emma! i could not be more gratified by your esponse to reading this poem ..there is nothing more one can ask of our poetry ..thank you from the bottom of my heart ..for reading and reviewing ..for taking time to notice the breaks i intended and for letting your thoughts speed away ...thank you thank you thank you .. the crows have been stewing around in my head a long time so letting them fly was a blessing for me .. they are such a powerful omen and their voices always demanding notice .. love your review ..thank you again sister!
E.

[emmajoy]

Came to read and listen again... extraordinary!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks emme! made my day, you did!! :))) hugs

[Neville]

My deep delving delivered this eve and left me wondering how and why I had not found these words before... and just in case I am beginning to sound boring, I truly refuse to apologise, but revel instead in my own ecstasy having found this priceless poem Gene... tho now read several times over and squinted at twice I gotta take a break and check in again later.. this is what poetry is about and no kidding.... N

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Neville ... i believe you ;) and i feel genuinely humbled this spoke to you so ...i have to confess this one is a favorite of my painful poems and times ... its tough to be left eh!? love on ya brother! thanks so much for searching and landing on this :)
E.

[Neville]

the strength both behind, and which underpins these fine words is not only awesome, but in a way beloved by those who thirst for words, painfully beautiful.......... Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks man! :}

[Neville]

welcome and true.. N :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

The lines mesmerize- broken like the crows’ caw..Your dark brushstrokes paint a coven of these dark emissaries and harbingers of death..or are they symbolic of painful, lethal memories that gather and scream for release into flight? Poe-esque in black-cloaked feelings of despair, repulsion perhaps? Haunting, poignant, brilliant write. Bravo E.N.!!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Annette ..you are so kind and encouraging ..really happy you felt this dark mood ... as i re-visit it just now i think...ohhhhh i could work some more on it ...but all of our poetry is like that isn't it ;;) thank you so much for all your reviewing ..and have the best of the day :))
E.

[Drowning In Reality]

Just stunning... Love the imagery.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much for taking time Drowning ;)
i much appreciate knowing what you think and feel ..God bless .. peace and joy!
E.

[Drowning In Reality]

Peace and joy to you as well.

[Cherrie]

this is crafted in a masterful way, from format to rhyme it propelled me onward, very lovely.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Ms. Palmer ...and how nice to meet you!your review is very kind and encouraging for me...thank you again...so glad you found something in this one :)
E.

[Miss Sharon]

Bravissimo a thousand times multiplied! I've been away for a bit at another poetry site and now I see that I have been missing out on QUALITY writing. I have returned! Thank you. ~Sharon

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Sharon ..glad you are back and visiting ;) i feel pretty gratified you found reading this one worthwhile ..huge thank you ma'am!
E.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

So much vulnerable revelation of the deep deep place of heart; I liked your use of words- My gloaming passed, sift-sifting, oaks of empty scabbards, melded colors become to thick, crows stilt stepping, ice pack proffered for my disease....this heart. Trying to rewrite the whole wonderful thing so i just focused on what I could. Your use of punctuation really brings out a lot of flavor. Your amazing. Well anyway that's all for now thanks also for the intense, deep music. It was so heavy and dark in swirling emotion. Loved it.........................Bless you sir! Kathy

[Einstein Noodle]

you came!!! ;) thank you Kathy! your review inspires and encourages me to no end ...(hope you will not be sorry;) really glad you listened to the music as well ..it is long but worth the time says i!it was a difficult time and remains (at times) a difficult memory ;))
E.

[B]

The heart is so valuable and it first senses darkness
Some instilled by others
Some just seem to be a reproduction of circumstance
We strive to keep that soul
clean of all that may stain it

At least this is how i saw this one

Good job !!! You have this way with words
Very strong visuals here

[Einstein Noodle]

thank Solo... i hear you! the heart is so wrapped up in a lot of good stuff ...sometimes it says "RUNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN! ;)
i am grateful for your bringing in the spiritual attempts to maintain the very precious of gifts ..our souls ... thank you again for taking time and for your thoughtful review
E.

[B]

oh i know that run all too well lol
i have been running half my life
oddly enough i am good runner in real life
used to win races ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .........me too ..until shinsplints took me down ;} and a woggy hip :o

[B]

I stopped to dance
quite literally
your body gets heavy when you run
muscles start to form really fast in your legs
so i stopped

[Einstein Noodle]

your a dancer!!! how cool! :)

[B]

In my bedroom
Yeah ..... i am afraid i am too shy to join anything formal and i tried
how are things on your end
do you have ear plugs to handle the trump parade

[Einstein Noodle]

aaaaaaaaaaaaaa wut!? i love parades ...i have my own whenever i take the dog to the park for a walk ;)))) but i'm too creaky to dance ... tho i do give it a go ..never say die...right?!

[B]

lol
But really what is going on with this guy
Can't he get a sedative or a mute button

[Einstein Noodle]

i appreciate your opinion my friend. seems we have gotten far off the course of "The Gathering" tho ;) i am not disheartened by our President. I hope with all my prayer that American Citizens will benefit from fair deals and good jobs created instead of jobs lost ..... so i am saddened by the words you choose to describe our President but do respect your right to express and oppose him... vote, vote, vote right!? :)

[B]

I am sorry. I didn't mean to be mean. I guess I only got this upset when he banned muslims. That's not nice. But I see he might do people good Americans. Hopefully he learns that muslims are good too and starts liking us. I am sorry.

[Einstein Noodle]

it has never been about all Muslims .. ;) please mail me here if you like .. love and joy to you my friend!

[B]

i hope not ..... i just know tons or iranians and iraqis living in the US .... and they are now in fear .... thats not fair ..... i will mail you .... i didnt mean to be rude though i am sorry

[Einstein Noodle]

not a problem ..this is a forum ;)

[Sami Khalil]

Nothing less than splendiferous in wording, mood and video. You have melded all together marvelously and nonchalantly to spotlight the fighting of the crows and bring it all to memory...:)..............

[Einstein Noodle]

oh those crows....right!? thanks Sami .. glad you enjoyed .. that means a lot to me :)
E.

[Sami Khalil]

All true. You are welcome. ...::::))))

[Creepy Swine Guy]

It certainly DOES set a mood. I especially found myself rapt by you desriptive prowess here ...

"crows stilt stepping little yellow claws tic
tic old frozen earth
how could i divine such a thing "

[Einstein Noodle]

very happy to have your review Swine Guy! and i think the lines you picked are the "turn" so to speak ..thank you so much .. your encouragement and your time is much appreciated.. peace and joy sir!
E.

[Woody]

breathtaking use of language, E. wonderful imagey!
boy, love the crows in this poem, and the ice pack and everything else.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! Woody i am so gratified that a humorist as you is moved to hear the crows ;) my day is made by your reading and sharing your review ..thank yo my friend .. i love the crows as well .. they always speak a certain quiet and unknown wisdom don't they ;) love and peace sir!
E.

[Woody]

hey do you know that Beatles' song that goes:
"although I laugh and I act like a clown
beneath this mask I am wearing a frown"?

[Einstein Noodle]

i couldn't place the song reading the lines ..had go google ...and of course I remember the song .. putting on the smile can be part of healing or more disquiet of soul ... one must choose when to "let it all hang out" eh!? i enjoy your (tho seldom displayed) serious side ... but am always lifted by the smiles and chuckles your humor brings .. also am reminded of Smokey Robinson's "Tracks of my Tears" ;{