Father Nature -- a collaboration with Sleepless Volcano

Mother can't take all the credit now ... can She? :o

Father Nature

He stretched out owly after a night rent

tempestuously over indulgent

A carbon hangover clutching his heart

Footprints of greed wound his green shoots with darts

Ethereal mint mists wash carbon prints

wine sulfur,drunk raging presses the hint

Bloodied, his fists, as they beat in the sky

Now crimson, this life source, never will die

puce ore of the mountain shaping His jaw

shaking core shift plates he opens earths maw

Like ants, all life shrieks with blood, sweat and tears

Oyster-grey smoke giving birth to fresh fears

grind glacial brows unfurling earth shapers

lost, green life, buried under sky-scrapers

Despite the torment of stark, rough handling

up from his knees, our earth is still standing.

collab. with Sleepless Volcano 

9/18/16

 

"Birth of the New Man" by Salvador Dali....

Author's Note

Reviews

[barleygirl]

If I were to imagine a good fit for a collab, it would be you two & this proves it. You both have a similar way of presenting your thoughts & ideas with "out-there" nuance. I love the way you use "carbon" & other pollutants in such mind-bendingly creative ways. I love your artwork & your words conjure up a similar visualization of how father earth might be feeling with all humans' abuse heaped upon him! *eeeek!* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

your the best Barley Girl

[mattavelli]

Hello, Einstein! :)
That's quite a morning stretch and a beautiful concept for a poem. The painting that you've chosen here is one of my favorites. I saw it about ten years ago at the Dali museum, here in Florida.

[Einstein Noodle]

it is a fantastic painting no doubt sir! the Volcano chose it ... we do give all the credit to Mother eh!? we figured time to give Father a go :)) thanks for stopping to read and taking time to comment ..its very important to us ..peace and joy sir!
E.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Einstein Noodle,
This was a good reminder; not to take anything in this world for granted! Our sweet earth where our hopes and lives are pinned. Very well constructed to bring me the reader right into your space which is the whole point I guess.........................You did this with someone else; Sleepless Volcano, Amazing to see!.....................Blessings to you Kathy.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Kathy and nice to meet you! I will certainly stop by your place soon. Yes! working with the Volcanoe is always inspiring to me .. he has a fine spontaneity .. as a writer one can not ask for more that the poem drew you in ..thank you so much for this encouragement
E.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Interesting concept. I love it when one comes up with something that makes someone say, "I never thought of that before," which you have done for me. A friend wrote a poem describing Death as a woman, and she told me where she lives that's the basic concept. That being said, it's interesting to read a poem about Father Nature. I enjoyed reading your description of him, the imagery of everything was amazing! Great work.

[Einstein Noodle]

good to see you here Cyprian ...seems its been a while :) and thank you so much for mentioning that.. its a part of the point .. glad you liked the reading .. its has been a while since i've been to your "house" too .. i'll be knocking on your door .. thanks again for the visit
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[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Good to read your writing, Einstein. You're very welcome. I'm trying to get more used to writerscafe. I need to make going to my notifications a habit. It's a working progress. :)

[aLittlePain]

Very smooth collaboration! Argh...We're an awful bunch, generations of waste and consumption...greedy temporal materialism. Those last two couplets...dope! R xo

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks again my friend ... yeah ... sad to say we can be as horrible as well as great ... the Volcano is very inspiring to work with ...always a learning experience ... so glad to be getting to know you better :)
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[1VJ]

We are a self-destructive lot, aren't we? Smooth and consistent collaboration, so many great lines to choose from. I like them all but this one spoke volumes.

'grind glacial brows unfurling earth shapers
lost, green life, buried under sky-scrapers'

Bravo you guys!!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Paloma .. working with the Volcano has been and is a real treat for me .. really appreciate your reading and for your encouraging comments :)
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

A seamless collaboration that handles humanity's destruction of the world in a unique way. Carbon footprints, melting glaciers, and skyscrapers. The imagery is stunning and that Dali artwork is the perfect accompaniment to your words. Great work. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Lydi! glad you enjoyed reading ... i agree about the pic ..the Volcano found it :) really appreciate all your support my friend
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[Papaya]

You two collaborate so well together!
The imagery is fantastic and the message is not lost.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks again for taking time Papaya! the Volcano is very easy to work with .. thank you!
E.

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I love it! Mother nature isn't one to say (wait until your father comes home). Maybe we think we are all powerful "adults" and we can do as we please and manipulate the weather and act as if we are gods now...but mother will always have the last say. She will preserve and protect the core of all living things even at the expense of purging living things to do so.

[Einstein Noodle]

i love your "wait until your father comes home" ...really gives me a laugh ..wish we had thought of that ;))) nature is a mighty fury amidst the beauty eh!? it should be an easy lesson to respect that .. but our lives (for most) get so caught up in day to day eking out .. with the all powerful at the other end ..as you say ...love your thoughts my friend ..thank you so much for reading
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[andrew mitchell]

i love this cd my fav and the poem depicts what mother can do when she is angry, no match for man. great duo here.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ELP were so far ahead of things .. the elevating of the piano while he played then spinning it was magical ... yes ..Mother has a Manly side right!? :) thanks for reading and commenting my friend!
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[KWP]

I find it kinda funny I find it kind of strange, people see the planet dying and all we do is sit and gaze.

You can sing that line to the song Mad world if you like :)

ahh, a thought comes to mind, if the poets could physically change the world we may live in the lines of a lullaby, well that is the poets who focus on the bigger picture that is.

There are some that would argue that if you are going to rhyme you must not use singular in one line and then plural in the next, it's no longer a valid rhyme ... also I believe you poem here is one of strength and I feel words like 'would' and 'while' are not needed and by having them there at all simply drags away from the poem itself ... we poets need to sift, filter and then remove MOST words (something a chitter chatterbox like myself needs to work on).

How can it be our earth is still standing? we humans need to take our eveolution pills every day, twice a day in fact and make it a double dose, we seem to be slipping behind.

you guys make an excellent team ... nice one X

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for those fine suggestions .. i am taking them to heart and will be sure that the Volcano checks it out .. i think our attitude was loose use of couplets and rhyming each one ... if we tightened the ship even further the rhythm needs work as well .. we rather kept the form loose and wanted our idea to be the most important thing ... i would not disagree we have cheated a bit :O
thank you KWP your review is very helpful and i am glad it got you thinking of those pills .. wouldn't it be nice if we had them .. made them part of vaccination processes ;)
E.