The Bathroom

The Bathroom

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

The Bathroom

closing locked doors with
secrets bounding off papered walls
 
sound proof

ostentation not allowed but
its a comfortable space
like cozy jackets

mirror of sponges.
self absorbing timbers for
moots long imprisoned 

nine inch grey and steel
prisms of pride
secret service protected

more iron clad dowries
password redundancy 
stuck                           

like Walmart greetings

tap tap his cigarettes 
he packs tight and
lights it 
to lip
----------------------------

no one is looking

08/18/2016

© 2016 Einstein Noodle


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now why haven't I thought of writing about it? not in a poem though. you did that pretty well.
people won't openly talk about it but it certainly is the favoured retreat of many. mine at any rate. that's where I make important decisions like getting married or deciding to have kids.
good to read you again, E.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

ahahahaha ..your a gas ... a classical gas my friend ...thanks for sharing! :))))
E.
Woody

8 Years Ago

:)))))...........



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Hmmmmn... still thinking about this one! The smoking bit reads obvious enough, the hiding a terrible secret maybe.. banned substance... or... is that just a veil for something more.. let's say, physical. Nuff said. I rather think you've used humour to camouflage your own unspoken and quite vivid thoughts. Love the gentle humour, the gentle nudging into places in your read'ers minds!

For most folk, the bathroom is a place of refuge... and refuge, isn't it?!

Posted 8 Years Ago


emmajoy

8 Years Ago

lots of characters smiling back at you as i slide back into my sad, dreary world..
Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

:( ......close your eyes and breath deeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep .. :) i venture a guess you have.. read more
emmajoy

8 Years Ago

Have worries amongst those people... this place is my escape!
Hum... I'm thinking: " This poem is as good as the paper it's wiped on" :-)


I mean that in humorous spirit, that's just what come to mind.... Now as I consider how you felt after writing this and phrase two, is coming to mind. Like Borrowed from..". I'm glad you spit that out?" Well I'm glad you ( ) that out. LOL. Your too much

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

wasn't quite understanding your comments until this morning ...thats a danger of the internet and tr.. read more
Cryingkate

8 Years Ago

:-)

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Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

love you, you big Cry Baby :)))))))))
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1VJ
I think this one is more about sneaking those f**s, ( nicotine sticks for those who think me rude and un-PC) than the loo! :)

Very entertaining, wan't sure what to expect. I love 'secret service protected'.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

ahahaha ..yes f**s ..well used term and understood by all for what it meant ..waaaaaay back when ..p.. read more
Another smashing write E.N....Now I'm getting jealous.........N

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

ahahaha ..thank you sir! you are too kind .. much appreciate your reviewing ...:)
E.
Neville

8 Years Ago

Always a pleasure E.N... If I did not enjoy it, I would not do it, I assure ya... N
Yeah Bathrooms can be very comfortable place to think, sing, smoke (i dont but manys do) . You feel like you are so away from everyone else and yeah NO one is looking, thats what make you be yourself . Lol is the only place where no one looks at ? i dont know but i do think so.
That was very good peice of work. I enjoyed the read an the thoughts you gave me:)
Have a good day my friend .
*Suhad*

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

thank you stars! so glad you took a peek in ;) and relaxed ... your visits and comments are always a.. read more
First off, bravo. Quite the funny, and endearing tale. Light the cigarette, some light reading -- I never understood such practices, but had an ex who spent way too much time in there. And let's just say, it was a relief that he smoked.:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

OK!! not going there my dear friend :) .. however, thank you so much for reading this one .. i have .. read more
I never read a poem that gave dignity to the bathroom the way this does! Loved the reference to the "Walmart greetings".

You are the consummate story teller, my friend!



Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

well, Kelly, it is the home of the throne eh!? :))) thank you for your reading and review ..i love t.. read more
Love, love this one! So clever and down to earth, hmm sounds just like the author ;-) It also reminds me of the other day when my sister called me from her bathroom just to have privacy. I will have to store this one in a special place my dear friend.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

i can not tell you how much i appreciate your encouraging review .. have been feeling in the creativ.. read more
hahah such a realistic poem, love the imagery and great story telling.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

Lola!! nice to meet you! yeh ...the b-room doesn't get more real eh!? i don't smoke no moh! but the.. read more
My father (who quit smoking) uses the bathroom an awful lot now.
He also brushes his teeth an awful lot now too.
He loves the fresh air too because he always opens the window in there.
He's very thoughtful that way. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

ahahahaha! love your comments ..he thinks he's "getting away" with it too ..doesn't he :} your visit.. read more
Papaya

8 Years Ago

Getting away with what?
I know nothing! :D
I liked your poem, peace and joy to you .. read more
Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

thank you Papya! thank you for your poetic friendship! re-read your comments and it gave me smiles a.. read more

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