Einstein's Ring

i hope you enjoy this go at an English sonnet and a bit of romancing the Science ... i added a haiku for the same title for fun .. let me know what you think :)

Einstein's Ring

My darkness falls over your haloed brow;

beguiling my heart, seducing my dream.

These eyes in search, the sourcing of the Tao,

a beauty eclipsed beyond what it seems.

Fair light is bending 'round curves, thus renew

dark matter enraptured heart in the skies

my gravity closing  a rainbow hue

to gather wrapped fingers of stars and sighs

Your presence was hiding behind cold shield;

while lightning explodes in brilliant arrays

Light sounding 'round heavenly faces yield

sun rings while Helios tightly at bay.

Gaze not in wonder God's gifts that abound;

songs of the Universe sing and resound. 

Haiku (of the same title)

galaxies hiding

eclipsing eyes perceiving

light bends delighting

Author's Note

from Wikipedia
"n observational astronomy an Einstein ring, also known as an Einstein-Chwolson ring or Chwolson ring, is the deformation of the light from a source (such as a galaxy or star) into a ring through gravitational lensing of the source's light by an object with an extremely large mass (such as another galaxy or a black hole)."[1][2]

dark matter: (same sourse)"Dark matter is a type of matter comprising approximately 27% of the mass and energy in the observable universe that is not accounted for by dark energy,"

dark energy: "a theoretical repulsive force that counteracts gravity and causes the universe to expand at an accelerating rate.
"Einstein's theories allow for the possible existence of dark energy" "

Reviews

[lightsong]

For me, and aside of the Author's note, this was a meditation's experience, the connection with the higher divine power, the images You saw through it, the presence of Your lover whom was firmly there almost in each image, it was like floating through the universe, an experience not many can fully go through. an amazing sonnet Mr.E something new from You for me to read, and it was a pleasure and real joy, the Haiku is quite amazing and strong too, it's like a "waking up" message to open the mind, to see beyond what eyes can see, and in both poems I felt a sentimental yearning waving gently like the calm sea behind Your lines.

Thank You for sharing Your superb experience with all of us.

[Einstein Noodle]

what can i say Light ... such a sensitive reflective read and review on your part ... i could not feel more gratified as a writer ... when you see and feel all the things in a poem we are truly connected says i! thanks so much Light! glad you liked it ... yes, sonnets are not my cup of tea and i have to work extra hard at them .. but i think i grow a bit each time i do ... as well as some of the other strict classical forms ... they stretch my word appreciation :}
E.

[lightsong]

You are always so very welcome, and I say that You surely have big and wide wings to adventure in the realm of poetry 😊 🦅

[Einstein Noodle]

:))))))))))))))))))))))) thanks Light!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

galaxies of love hiding behind eclipses, just wishing they could show what is hidden.

like both the haiku and the sonnet....

you bravely attack the sonnet and do it with such finesse...i could never succeed at this form of poetry in a million years...it would sound so stiff and formal---you have a soft, supple edge to your writing...just creeps up on us in a nice way.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my! jacob .. feeling so humbled right now .. truly .. i thank you for reading and for this review that inspires and encourages me to do more .. (maybe you want to take it back:) the help and advice from Kl and Richard helped to get this done .. a rewarding endeavor ..and you (i am sure) could knock one off .. thank you ..thank you so much sir!
E.

[B.J]

Beautiful encaptulation of words. There is an hidden energy behind your words. So intoxicating

[Einstein Noodle]

i feel humbled reading your review ..truly! thank you so much for taking time and i am so gratified you found reading a positive adventure :)
E.

[B.J]

I am truly relaxing a great deal more, able to read more and enjoyed your work. Thank you

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ....................

[Miss Sharon]

Holy shenanigins! The sonnet is beautiful and perfectly written. Your metaphors are so well done...I love all of it! And the hakiu...perfectly written and perfectly beautiful! You get two thumbs up from my corner. ~Sharon

[Einstein Noodle]

Miss Sharon .. your review is so encouraging ..i had advice and encouragement from KL and Richard without which i would not have attempted it ... thank you so much for taking time .. i feel quite gratified that you enjoyed it!!!
E.

[Miss Sharon]

Always my pleasure to read something of value! ~Sharon

[Valentine]

I love the older style of writing and word usage. Olde English gets to me. Valentine

[Einstein Noodle]

the sonnet almost forces it doesn't it?!! thank you Valentine .. for your precious time spent reading and reviewing :)
E.

[Lola_Bee]

this is so beautiful, i kept reading each line meticulously understanding the beauty as it unravels. your use of words are placed perfectly and creates such amazing imagery! Looooved this poem

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you my new found friend ... rigid forms and rules are not my natural cup of tea ..with help and encouragement for KL and Richard my painful finishing of this was lightened ;) i feel warm and gratified you took time reading each line ... thank you again!
E.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... Our earth has beautiful stones to be
polished and set into rings that reflect the
sun and the moon whereupon we become
an intricate part of the Universe. truly, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! you read it again!!! thank you so much .. and yes it is .. and yes we do .. all the time, every time ;) Einstein was a remarkable mind .. and very much human .. (with flaws) the last decade or two of his life is kind of sad ... he sailed .. and he floundered .. especially in America we only remember the genius .. but .. thats ok too eh!? :))) i am particularly gratified you came to read this again .. the sonnet very hard for me ..a committed free verse kind of guy :) the advice and encouragement i received from KL and Richard were a blessing .. thank you again my friend!
E.

[Patricia Wedel]

You are welcome... Pat

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... "Light sounding 'round heavenly faces"
is an endearing thought. When days are dark and dreary,
it is just the shadow of an angel's wing protecting you.
Your poetry is a reflection of the stars... truly, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for starting my day with such inspiring comments .. i am so glad you enjoyed reading ...have the greatest day ever Pat! :)
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your writing make me stop and think. This poem did.
"Your presence was hiding behind cold shield;
while lightning explodes in brilliant arrays
Light sounding 'round heavenly faces yield
sun rings while Helios tightly at bay."
Somethings cannot be controlled or denied. The above lines were my favorite. I love myth and tale. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry Einstein.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

and thank you sir for taking time to read and comment ..i do appreciate such good friends as yourself here at the cafe ... hope your day is fantastic .. its a little after 4 am here .. soon the sun will be rising ;)
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Always a pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.

[Lyn Anderson]

I had to review this one again -- achieved, the sonnet, with iambics intact -- now darling, one teeny tiny tweak that by my logic shall not alter the iambics --3rd line change source to sourcing (H/S/H/S/H) -- as the inflection can then stay with the of, and fix the little H/H there.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes!! in reading i knew something was amiss but just did not see it ..thank you KL ..i really really appreciate your input and taking another look .. i will fix it right now .. a big fat thank you!!!!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

You are welcome. Now, isn't it a crazy feeling to have finally got it exactly right? I don't know, nobody could understand unless they actually tried it.:)

[Einstein Noodle]

YES!! absolutely ... down right proud of myself ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

You should be, my friend. You should be. Maybe one day I will go back and fix all the ones I thought were sonnets. Uggh. The thought is daunting, and there is only maybe 6 of them.

[Einstein Noodle]

aaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggh! :}

[SleeplessVolcano]

now you need to go into the other direction and turn this into a short story! :)

Best way to keep our minds sharp, hey?

Great work E......as is your custom.....

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha ..a short story ..i have that recurring thought from time to time ..i am yet to find the courage to attempt one ... i agree .. giving other forms a go does sharpen the mind .. and vocabulary ... i am really glad you stopped to read Sir Sleepless ... thank you for such encouraging remarks .. and challenge to give the short story a go :}
E.