B******s of God

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B******s of God

i was born this way. 

"You may plagiarize Me if you please." 

He said ... while

all of mankind saying: "but

              liters of rain are dropping               

turtle-like green shells ............

                      mapping breaches.

the breaches have made us  so

You  reigning

                       Your rain dropping

whole, quarter, half and whole dropping on all

plagiarize me green

green and sprouting shoots ... sprout and shoot ......."

                                              Then the

                                                           troubles 

                                                                             came.

with water

smooth grinding pebble stone all pretty in fall colors

racked in slings  ... quarter water a drop

begins admission

                                contrition

waking beached craft; whole whales

                                               drafting  excuses 

b******s of God

witches okra .... sly wicked smoke to hide in   (again He says)                                    

"Plagiarize Me                                                     

                          if you please

when I say

                             Let it be and

Come to Me"

E. 

4/29/16

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

There is amazing power in your words. Plagiarizing the green of the earth and all things we were taught....copying what we have seen and yet not making it quite the way it was intended. Of course, in order to really "get" what you are saying, a person must believe in what religion has taught. Not sure I have ever bought into it all....and yet the intensity with which you wrote this makes me sit up and take notice. A unique write to say the very least. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Lydi! very very much ... yes believing is important ..i suspect the beliefs of an atheist would not have a light to turn on in the darkness ..but an agnostic might .. i think the common threads of the major religions would allow for understanding ..however, in my limited reading , only one offers an answer to our inability to fulfill any of the religions rules or paths ;) i take your comments to heart and tell you again that i really appreciate them!
E.

[Sami Khalil]

"whole whales
drafting excuses
b******s of God
witches okra .... sly wicked smoke to hide in"

I take it that God will eventually punish those plagiarizers and bullies of mankind. They are not original and they are wicked. I like how you describe them with those fierce mammals. They can run but there can't hide. An excellent poem and message...:)..............

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Sami ... your visit and opinions much appreciated ... yes ..we all cna be so very fallen ..all the more a pity as it is simply not necessary :{{
E.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:)....................

[Einstein Noodle]

i am especially gratified you see the whales in such a way ..thank you again i say! :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)...................

[Centipedle]

This is a poem I think I'll have to return to again. It has an excellent message and conveyed in a beautiful way.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you again my new found friend! glad you like it and especially that you are inclined to visit it once again ... sometimes when we do that we see a whole other page ;)
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

It is funny. One can be surrounded by beauty and yet fail to see it as the thoughts in her own head rush by. A wild ride this one, E. The reader is forced to read it fast and then return to read it again. Some superb craft. Bravo:)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Pryde .... love your take on it! "...as the thoughts in her own head rush by." we are so much about thoughts aren't we!? thank you again ..for taking time and i am grateful you enjoyed this ride ...i confess it is just slightly over the oblique line ;)
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

I like oblique ... the meaning found is endless:)

[Einstein Noodle]

i am obliquely yours dahlink! :)