B******s of God

thank you for getting this far ... you have not become offended in the title ..please give me your input on any and all constructive criticism .. :) as you always do

B******s of God

i was born this way. 

"You may plagiarize Me if you please." 

He said ... while

all of mankind saying: "but

              liters of rain are dropping               

turtle-like green shells ............

                      mapping breaches.

the breaches have made us  so

You  reigning

                       Your rain dropping

whole, quarter, half and whole dropping on all

plagiarize me green

green and sprouting shoots ... sprout and shoot ......."

                                              Then the

                                                           troubles 

                                                                             came.

with water

smooth grinding pebble stone all pretty in fall colors

racked in slings  ... quarter water a drop

begins admission

                                contrition

waking beached craft; whole whales

                                               drafting  excuses 

b******s of God

witches okra .... sly wicked smoke to hide in   (again He says)                                    

"Plagiarize Me                                                     

                          if you please

when I say

                             Let it be and

Come to Me"

E. 

4/29/16

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

There is amazing power in your words. Plagiarizing the green of the earth and all things we were taught....copying what we have seen and yet not making it quite the way it was intended. Of course, in order to really "get" what you are saying, a person must believe in what religion has taught. Not sure I have ever bought into it all....and yet the intensity with which you wrote this makes me sit up and take notice. A unique write to say the very least. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Lydi! very very much ... yes believing is important ..i suspect the beliefs of an atheist would not have a light to turn on in the darkness ..but an agnostic might .. i think the common threads of the major religions would allow for understanding ..however, in my limited reading , only one offers an answer to our inability to fulfill any of the religions rules or paths ;) i take your comments to heart and tell you again that i really appreciate them!
E.

[Butch Decatoria]

P.S> I think I may have to ask you if I can use "Witches Okra" for one of my own--maybe a title... Is that alright by you? Hollar back let me know. TY.

[Einstein Noodle]

please read my about me ...the T. Jefferson quote and you will know that i think i would be honored if you are inspired ;)

[Butch Decatoria]

How did I miss reading this? Wow, great write, and even better for Spoken Word--what a performance that would make... Witches Okra, that just leaves a slimy awful taste in my mouth. This rocks ! Love it!

But on a more serious note... I feeling a little disjointed on precisely what this whole poem means. Dont get me wrong, excellent and superb imagery and beatnik stylings... I think I need a bit more explanation I'm sorry... (is it a disdain on plagiarism or religious mumbo jumbos?)

Still my curiosity does not take away from what a bomb a*s piece this was. And by the way, our own poetry writing and what has been written down is always evolving, dont be afraid to re-write and re-read re-add and re-edit... eventually you know that feeling or sense of the poem being finished and polished. Great work. peace up.

[Einstein Noodle]

it is a little oblique ..i admit ...mostly a conversation between God and humanity ..maybe that will help ..but you must receive what your instincts tell you of course ... as with all poetic expressions ... but you already know that ;)
E.

[AliciaB]

Wow. Interesting. I have to admit I was a little troubled by the title, but I read the poem to see where it would go... I also have to admit that I'm having difficulty wrapping my head around this one (although part of that may be the fact that it is 12:30 AM and I should be in bed right now). The feeling I'm getting is that this poem is about people trying to "play God." There seems to be a multitude of different issues touched on in this piece, and its vagueness leads to great flexibility in interpretation, which I like. I also enjoyed the play on "reigning" and "rain". The arrangement of the lines themselves is a bit bewildering, but it adds an interesting effect. It could be a representation of how wacky and messed up things get when human beings try to take the reins. I like the final five lines most of all - to me, they provide justification for the convoluted, possibly even offensive nature of the rest of the piece, illustrating how God wants us to turn away from the insanity we've created and follow Him and His will. A very thought-provoking piece overall. Nice work!

[Einstein Noodle]

i really appreciate the fact you got passed the title and gave the poem a chance ...flexible ..yes ..and for me what you pull away with in the closing is very gratifying ..thanks again for taking time to read with patience ;)
E.

[KWP]

and yes ... we are all guilty of our own life's plagiarism, for nothing anymore is original, well except perhaps for the original sin, which would be rather delightful if we could throw on a backpack (only packing the barest of essentials) to trip, trolly and traverse our way back to whence we came. Through our own lifetimes and perhaps through a multitude of generations and yes, even realities to plonk ourselves down and have a good picnic lunch - or dinner depending on our arrival time - in the land or the original sin - or perhaps now that I think about it - some moments before the original sin took place - so then, we can frollick in the freshness of the absolute without fear, uncertainty, lies and plagiarism. Where freedom is at its purest and the breath we inhale still resembles life ...

unfortunately I am here and now and copy in some way shape or form I shall ... with the best intentions of course ...

I am left wondering what promoted this write ...

Love ya ... beeen floating around the realms ... but I still love ya X

[Einstein Noodle]

my dear friend KW ..how i have missed you and your contributions ... :) its getting hard for me to find something of yours i have not read .. "what prompted this?" ... honestly i was contemplating my very "human" condition and the title went up in lights in my third eye ;) ... this was in the incubation chamber for quite a while and after failing to get my younger son to go in with me on it (i was stuck with only the title and general direction) .. i just wrote it .. probably edited a few times and it seemed right ... i love your review (as always) sensing "B******s of God" struck a tender place .. ??? not so much about plagiarisms of humans to humans ;) and i do love you too .. my new Avatar is one from the new digs in the Ozarks ..but i owe you so many more ... such a wondrous place says i! :)))
E.

[KWP]

which new avatar ? where ? you owe me some pics of the new digs yes :)

[Einstein Noodle]

oops ..i was going to use one from our little park in Mountain View but decided on my sky dive instead ..going to put up the one from the park today ... i am not much of one for taking pics .... will have to make it a goal for the next sunny day (been raining a lot here lately :)

[KWP]

raining here too .. they say we can expect a deluge this weekend ....

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..........

[Einstein Noodle]

https://youtu.be/xM7BRP7uzFk

[KWP]

oh it rained ... and rained .. and poured ... flooded ... rained so more ... king tides ... beaches washed away ... rain in my bones :) ... happy monday (to me) happy days to you XXX

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my dearest friend ..enough is enough ..i would worry for your safety but am sure you have many boats that float and lines that rescue ... it has let up for us ...late yesterday afternoon and all day today ... i do love the storms but a week makes one weary of it .. indeed ..a very merry happy monday to you!!! love and peace and great joy! :)

[Barbara Walker]

Such an appropriate title! I dunno', I think by now He's had enough of looking at us and shaking His head and He gave up on us and walked away. I wouldn't blame Him!

[Einstein Noodle]

i absolutely get such a kick when i see your avatar :) thank you Barb! yes ... so many eons of chances to choose the light ..and in my own short lifetime so many times fail in it ... can't imagine our Creator's impressions :( ... on the flipside ..according to the Book i believe ..Salvation is readily available :))) ... perhaps God was prepared for disappointments right from the Beginnings ;)
E.

[Barbara Walker]

Ah, yes, there is THAT. Why, HE'D have to be MORE than super human! HE/SHE would have to be, like a Supreme Being, an entity beyond our paltry minds to fathom...can ya dig it?! Good mornng, my friend😇

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..i dig! ;) pretty sure our Creator is all that!!

[Rita L. Sev]

"God created Man in His own image, and being a gentleman, Man returned the favor." This is the quote that came to mind as I read your words, E - not sure how close I am to "getting it", but I do appreciate the inspiration to think!

[Einstein Noodle]

what a great quote!! very edgy ..will go-a-googling to find out more ;) you should not stay away as long as you have ... lots of people (i am sure) miss your uplifting poetry and spirit ... is school out for the summer yet?? what more can one ask than when the reader mulls things over a bit ;)) love and peace Rita .. all the time!
E.

[Rita L. Sev]

Hi, E - Still two more weeks of school (Exams this week). The real chaos is that we are moving at the end of July. We have been de-cluttering and preparing for the sale of our current home, and packing what we can pack at this point to move to the new house. Still in Philly, but closer to school and a house that is the right size for us. I feel the pull of Poetry, though - I have to let it lead me a bit... :)

[boblakin]

I was there, twice. Once thing was the way children as young as pre-school, were taught to hate.

Would be nice if mankind could find harmony, but I'm not holding my breath.

boblakin

[Einstein Noodle]

good morning bablakin! thank you for stopping by and giving your review .. much appreciated! taught to hate in pre-school ..how terrible ..i have seen news clips addressing the hate in some radical Muslim groups that do just that ..a blindness the replaces that hate with murderous intent ... so horrific to be responsible for such a corruption of little children ... :(( yes ..a harmony and balance struck in all things would not necessarily be a utopia but certainly a place of acceptance and maybe even compassionate understanding .. and i hear your scepticism ...am not holding my breath either ..rather taking deep cleansing breaths and exhaling all the good fortune and harmony i can ;)))
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

When it comes to nature, men are poor copycats. Now, your use of litres confounds me and intrigues me. The American spelling is quite a concept to me -- spelling a unit of measurement differently when it's a unit not in general use in the U.S. So tell me, why litres, and not gallons? Just curious ...

[Einstein Noodle]

gallons did not come to mind ... but i will think about that in consideration ... but we do use litres in the US all the time .. mostly on pop bottles ... tho i don't buy pop ... i think the quarts that use to be the norm are a little smaller than the litres ;) a while back there was a push to go metric in all things but the protests were loud and large enough to stop the effort .. but litres of pop survived :)) love your visits my friend ..i do pay attention to them!
E.