Spinning

would specifically like to know if repetitions work for you or not :) also am not picking on Gore ..just love the pic! could be any one of them eh!?

Spin

Tornadic whirls and dusting

down

           down

                       down

Debris of humus twisting

a

   round

                round 

                              round

concrete words asunder as

they spin 

                    spin

                               spin

(but i thought you said)

No No NO 

my colors are more hued

in rainbow, pastel and 

well well well

you see?

it will always be the same

                                               same

                                                          same.

E. 4/18/2016 

Author's Note

are you kidding me! the captcha for this was "hooknose" ... what more can one say! :)

Reviews

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Hey E, I think the repetition is so dead on. They are all repeat performances of the last one plus a little extra. I doubt we even have an election this year. We don't choose who the next idiot is, they do. I don't even vote anymore. Nothing to vote for, except more of the same BS which I'm totally disgusted with. It's about to get even uglier, my friend. But, it is always darkest before the dawn. Sometimes people have to it bottom before they stand. We will stand again :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for taking time once again lynn ..i have been a Republican (because of professed platform all my voting life (46 yrs.) this year their failures to stick up for me; and the ignorant, weak fear mongering about Donald Trump (not that i particularly like him) has caused me to register as independent ... i consider myself an informed voter and do watch quite a bit of news on several channels; but i agree with you 100% ..not hardly worth voting ...:( in all my years i never knew about the Dems "super delegates" ...sigh! and i have always been opposed to the whole electoral college fiasco ... if one gets the majority ..they should win ..it could be so easy! i am heartened by your positive attitude ..perhaps change will be demanded of enough people that it actually occurs :}
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. i like your take on the repetition ..had not thought of it that way :)))

[barleygirl]

Lots of times I don't like repetition in poetry becuz it feels like it's being done in a mechanical way or to satisfy some pre-decided poetic form. In this poem, it sounds natural & perfect for the way politicians always repeat themselves a few times in a row, to make a point . . . oh so timely & apt in this season of prez hopefuls.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you again barleygirl ..for reading and commenting ..thank you for your input and answering my bit of doubt about the repetitions ..i agree with you as suing it can be trite and an excuse for lack of a better way to say something ..but you and others seem to see how it works in this particular poem about those maddening politicians ...and they must think we are all so very stupid ...argh! i simply end up praying for us all ...it takes large hands to preserve freedoms and keep us safe .... sigh!
E.

[barleygirl]

I'm old & have no kids, so I can hole up in my hills here & ignore the whole freakin' charade, except to tune in occasionally for entertainment value *smile*

[Einstein Noodle]

oops ..i meant using it ..not suing it :} Dr. Weil (written many books) says that to reduce anxieties we should stop reading, listening and watching the news among other advice) it is a good thing to limit it ..especially if one is passionate about politics and governance (me) so i can not cut it out completely but do try and limit it ... you are fortunate for your hole in the hills .. just moved to the Ozark Mountains in my retirement dream cabin .. easy to let it all go the way it will ...its a big big picture and (i believe) in God's hands only! :))
E.
ps no such think as old ... ;)

[barleygirl]

Dr. Weil also said "Friends are God's way of saying sorry about family" . . . *heh! heh! heh!*

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ......... i am not surprised you have read him ..isn't he grand!?

[Lyn Anderson]

It gets the point across, however... I like others of yours better. As far as being an effective mechanism to illustrate a point, it is.

[Einstein Noodle]

i hear you ..this is a very simple no birth pains poem ... thank you so much for your review KL ... you inspire me to think about reworking this one and to stay edgy when writing and sharing ... love and joy
E.

[Bacchus]

The repetition works for sure
very well done-
we are a stuck system.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes we are ..thanks for the visit Bacchus .. and your encouraging review :)
E.

[Matching Socks]

Politicians can spin anything. Still,there may be the odd decent one out there. I thought this form and repitition was very effective. Nice work.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Ana!! this election cycle has me fairly disgusted with them all ... i have never missed a vote but i may this year ... the country seems past ruin and not help in site ... our gov. will never pay our debt ... never felt so cynical ... oh well! thank you for your taking time and letting me know what you think ..i was a bit concerned about the repetition ... so thanks!
E.

[Matching Socks]

It's sad when you're forced to choose between the lesser of the evils.
Our own PM is not perfect, but better. Anyway, you're welcome. :)

[Pryde Foltz]

The romans had their Colosseum and forum and now there is ultimate fighting and Washington ... hard to tell which goes with which. Clever and well-constructed write. E:)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Pryde ..how interesting your line between Washington and the Coliseum ... never would have thought about it ... seems its where we are headed tho ... first the numbers racket, then drugs ... next will be gov. subsidized prostitution .... all to feed the beast ... sigh! :(
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

The key is recognizing the leader who have authentic love for people and giving them your attention and support and not the racketeers.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ...but where oh where are they? ;}

[Pryde Foltz]

Release yourself of judgement and pay no attention to commentators and you will see:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, it could be any politician for they all spin, but then again so do business moguls. I liked the repetition. It emphasized your thoughts. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Lydia! i wondered if it might seem too much ... i appreciate your input ..and yes ..lots of spinning whenever a Public Eye is peering ... i am at that point and saying let them have it ... its not worth the bother ... and i have been an informed active voter since i could vote ... sigh!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

I have never missed even the tiniest election since I registered to vote for McGovern. I will not stop now....but the choices are not quite what I hoped for.

[Einstein Noodle]

you attitude inspires me ... i have never appreciated the electoral college in which a president can win the office without the majority of popular vote .. but this year learning (for me) about the "super delegates" has me crawling with disgust ... so corrupt. :(

[Valentine]

I have to say you are trying to invent your own style too. Wouldn't it be boring if we all wrote the same. Valentine

[Einstein Noodle]

i suppose so Valentine ... but the tools remain the same don't they?! i started writing in this fashion but my wonderful Mother-in-law gave some some very good advice so i started trying classic forms and collabs using other cultural forms etc ... but free verse is nothing new and it remains my most spontaneous ... i seem to want to pick at them as they are expressed so easily ..;} know what i mean!?
thank you for taking time to read and comment Valentine ... much appreciated!
E.

[Valentine]

I have no style either, I did not study poetry writing. Kathie

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ................