Transitions

in collaboration with Nisreen

"Transition"

Mammals wailed in disbelief

whose voices echoe in the deep

The Blues in saxophone relief

twenty tons of krill eating teeth 

A miracle was birthed 

In full bravery

A figure of man 

Brought peace to the land

from the soup of primordial mix

hides in plain sight, octopus tricks

spills ink jets when spotted

unwinding his reach previously knotted

Unhiding a double face

One face appeared

mirrored

With all its ugliness

Tolerating peace 

negotiations repleat

Creating so much noise

simply vocal 

Confusing the masses in news

it was essential ...

built to destroy

writings of justice 

burning the toll

Liars in wicked teeth of brown

Dying in the dawn

Melting in snow

ignorant

transition expedient

relative ingredient

matters not

which face one wears.

E. with Nisreen

Author's Note

Reviews

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-- for me (someone whose first language is not english), this poem describes the anatomy of evolution... and the concluding lines reveal that despite all the commotion caused by people who make a lot of noise or lie, human beings continue to evolve... because those who create a cacophony are not the architects of evolution... they're merely "ingredients"... and their importance is not substantial in the larger scheme of things... it's "relative" to other ingredients... -- -- mammals still turn into human beings and human beings get better with time despite the presence of noisy rotten apples...

-- from this perspective, the poem does a fantastic job of describing the intricate details of the process of evolution... -- the collab is flawless... (one cannot tell who wrote which lines)... so well done both of you... -- the two of you are 'thinking' people... and there aren't too many around so thank you for writing this intensely thought-provoking symphony...

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness serah!!!! your review captures my breath .. well read ...so intuitive and precise .. seems the honor to be ours for your reading .. no kidding!!! can't wait till Nisreen reads this .. thank you to the max!
E.

[.]

-- my privilege, E... -- i love pieces that delve into the depths of the human condition... and once again... you and Nisreen did a fab job... -- very seamless collab... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much!

[.]

-- you're very welcome, sweet one :)

[Lydia Shutter]

You're welcome E. happy V day!

[Perkele.7885]

Einstein, when I started reading this poem I had to stop and shake my head. This is not Einstein! This is Nisreen. I had to double check. That is when I saw that it was a collaboration and I laughed at myself!

As with all 'Nisreen' pieces, I had to read this poem repeatedly. I still do not have a grip on it other than it is growth and transition of life over time intervals and what changes the environment underwent.

[Einstein Noodle]

ah yes ...the intrepid Nisreen ;) ...... thank you for your perseverance .. she is a delight to work with and can not be restricted eh!? .. i learned a lot from the experience
E.

[B]

lol
thank you raj :)

[Scott Metro]

The essence of life itself. I have long wondered if the struggle is really a defiance of gravity..that all stress is due to the battle to oppose gravity and stand or grow upward...with gravity constantly trying to pull us flat to the earth.
Enjoyed your primal images...well penned brother.!!
Scott

[Einstein Noodle]

i would absolutely love to be a silverback ..so strong on the haunches .. but alas ..the only silver i might claim is actually grey ;) as i get smaller ..and smaller ..and smaller :)
E.

[B]

i like your thoughts Scott
Thank you

[jesserose99]

I must admit, I had to read this a couple times. I don't know if that means my brain isn't functioning on all cylinders or..both of you were just functioning that much higher. What a delight though when I finally got it. We do wear a mask of two faces we...humanity. It seems the distance between the two is growing too. The twisted just gets worse, and the love has to love harder to undo the twisted. I really enjoyed this...I love the sound of ticking in my brain. lol
The words were beautifully crafted together, you worked together wonderfully.

[Einstein Noodle]

so nice to meet you jesserose (my adoptive grand daughter carries the same name :) i think it beautiful .. i fully appreciate you taking time to untumble our brains ..we simply "let go" .. :) sometimes things are like that ... your take is sensitive and in depth ... but please do not give yourself a head ache ;) will certainly stop by to get to know you better ..thank you ever so much again!
E.

[B]

We just happened to come up with something positive
and unusual
E is simply gifted Thank you Jesse

[Cryingkate]

It's sorta uncanny how I struggled at first the other day to find the one theme here and get drift of the intention.
Today I feel I see it. It seems there are more then two collaborator minds speaking several thoughts about the World's situation. When I realized this was several thoughts all coming in to speak of the whole situation.
I went again to the beginning and there it was..... Even the ocean mammals gave voice.
"Mammals wailed in disbelief whose voices echoe in the deep"

It's as though creation itself spoke loudly here from all walks of creation. That is why I hear the many voices and thoughts.
I really do love this. On the surface it just seems like an OK write. But I knew the other day that it wasn't, that's why I said I would return.
I believe you guys were really in -tuned with the creational force and just let go and let it speak.
Conscious or not.
I feel her moving and ranting in this.. Well done : Soldiers of the Pen"

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Cryingkate ..for stopping again to read .. sometimes it is easy to read and miss a point because of how my mind is working at the time ..coming back shows a great deal of respect ..and it is appreciated to be sure .. :)
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

Nisreen is so impetuous and passionate and as a free flying breeze .. i had to let go of the noodle ... and run with the wolves and wind ... embrace the wild howling ... for my part i come away with much more than offered ... you are a cool breeze Nisreen!!
E.

[B]

lol
i am laughing so much
thank you E

[Einstein Noodle]

love to you girl!!

[B]

lol ..... you are giving me so much care
i love u E

[Einstein Noodle]

[B]

hoping that is a good message

[Einstein Noodle]

have no idea how that went blank ??? big big hugs Nisreen!!

[David Scott]

It seems odd how the poem went from the surreal to darkness... Art mimics life or does life mimic art? I wonder at this sometimes.
The face, or the creature holding life, is never as important as the life, the Spirit, within.
This poetry is compelling for many reasons to me. I like how you leave plenty of room for the imagination.

[Einstein Noodle]

nice to meet you David! ..You must read Nisreen to get more of a feel for this .. it is "out there" for sure and it is the imagination we agreed to attempt to tweek ... she is avante guard, a beat generational born late .. Nisreen is over the top ..so much a pleasure to write with her .. your review is very interesting and causes me to take puase to think ..thank you very much!
E.

[B]

Thank you David :)

[David Scott]

Ah yes.... I thought I had read your work. Seldom send out requests...
Sorry to have lost touch.

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Hmmm...this is certainly interesting :) Mans evolution is repetitive. We rise to fall and it's on going. Seems like we forget how smart we are lol I love the first 3 stanzas. Unique artistry :)

[Einstein Noodle]

lynn!! so glad you took time to visit and review .. its what keeps the glue of WC sticking eh!? .. evolution ..never proven .. mostly relied on ... (if it was proven it would be called a "Law" of ... ;)
we seem to forget a lot of things eh!?
love sister
E.

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(((( you )))) We sure do E

[Einstein Noodle]

[Cryingkate]

Dang..... This is deep...... I'm gonna have to chew it well before digesting......
But I have a hunch it's gonna taste good....

[Einstein Noodle]

:))))))))))))))))))))) love you Cry Baby .. so grateful for your visits always ... please take your time ..there is no hurry ;)
E.