Black Sea

Collaboration with Zahra and advice from "M"

The Black Sea

Floods wash over blood sands

Breakers defy stone dams

Heights strive to contain our lands

Fighting moon's pulsating hands

 

Her hands forever unfolding

birthing waves mesmerizing

fertile dark ground holding

key of life's ever molding 

in the unburied's dwelling,

sounding timeless echoes,

obstructed secrets wailing

within pending throes.

God is weeping as He sees

Man created to live in light

sinks below light's decrees

making choices founded on night

Pontus Exinus crossings meet

gold calved nations with sulfuric streets

worms suffocate in our Devil's dark seat

anoxic, pro-toxic, sheep's bleating replete

weeping in agony well worth the pain

hoping the truth all Men regain

knowing as well things will remain

a battle well worn over each domain

E. with Zahra and advice from M

Author's Note

the density layers and rich cultural history inspired this one; here is just one spot to read more: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Black_Sea

Reviews

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-- for me, the fourth stanza is where the soul of these beautiful symphony resides... -- in everything, we (as in us human beings) do have a special talent for wrong choices... -- most of the problems in the world today and most of the problems in our personal lives can be attributed to bad decisions... -- but still... sometimes we are able to transcend our human limitations and "regain" our lost momentum and thrive... -- i thank the three musicians who played a role in crafting this piece... -- it has depth, it has intensity, and it is very giving -- much like the black sea...

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..that verse is at the crux of what we are trying to say ..and if choices are based on darkness ..how deep the darkness is :( so glad you read this one serah! so glad it has touched you so!
E.

[.]

-- me too... i'm glad i did...

[Lyn Anderson]

A wonderful collaboration -- you two do this well and seamlessly -- I am partial to the fourth stanza, as it really speaks to me. At any rate, a great read.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you KL! always appreciate your reviews ..yes that 4th stanza ...especially meaningful to me .. our USA has become way too topsy turvey ... political correct attitudes mire the muck more :))
(mire the muck more!? ) ahahahahaha! love you KL ... thanks again

[David Scott]

Oh... I almost forgot. I loved the song! It pared well with your poetry here.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you sir!
E.

[David Scott]

We read here a history told as it should be told; with poetic flare. Much like the bards singing in the ale house, you pen a song sad and bittersweet. We need not make sense or even learn a lesson as of yet, but we should remember... The meaning will find the student when the student is ready fir the lesson indeed.
I think your collaboration has birthed a poetic brain child of darkly inspired pondering.

Well done.

[Einstein Noodle]

i think the Black Sea has a fascinating history and story to tell ..rich cultures surround her shores .. life and death in her layers ... glad you found this one David ..thank you so much ..and Zahra thanks you too!
E.

[TL Boehm]

this one is dark and light juxtaposed, like a lyrical myth, thought provoking and wild. Well penned

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for your sensitive reading TL ..the Black Sea is all that ... fascinating formation, composition and history of so many cultures surrounding it ... i appreciate your taking time ... peace and joy Ms. TL :)
E.

[Valentine]

Love the fourth and last stanzas..Well written with very deep thoughts. Valentine

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Valentine ... it was an enriching experience to work with Zahra and M on this ... appreciate your visits and reviews always :)
E.

[Zahra]

God is weeping as He sees
Man created to live in light
sinks below light's decrees
making choices founded on night

Wow.
And such a great work you've done here. Thank you for inviting me for this collab and though I couldn't do more than one verse, it's such an honor being a part of this. Looking forward to do more.

[Einstein Noodle]

you thoughts and ideas helped throughout ..always an honor and learning experience to work with you ..love and peace sister ;)
E.

[Zahra]

love and peace to you too. Best regards

[SariahM]

It is so freaking good i love it!

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! what could one want more than that ..thank you so much!! nice to meet you Sariah ... and i will return the favor for sure
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong and powerful words and thoughts.
"weeping in agony well worth the pain
hoping the truth all Men regain
knowing as well things will remain
a battle well worn over each domain"
Left reader with a lot to think about. Not enough weeping for the people surrounded by war, homeless and needing help. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Coyote! need to stop by your place soon .. it was meant to rouse some thoughtful introspection ... i feel pretty good it did that for you!
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I always enjoy your work.

[B]

We live
and we take what we want
uncaring
we are human
superior
but many leave darkness on a beautiful sea
so as to speak looking at everything from up above
you cant seem but cry for the evil that can fill hearts

This is so soulful
you literally made my soul shiver

[Einstein Noodle]

because you have a great heart dear friend ... one can not be more moved by a reading such as yours ... thank you so very very much! collaborating with Zahra has always been an expanding experience for me .. thank you so much for your time and comments .. ;)
E.

[B]

maybe we should try to write something together

[Einstein Noodle]

i would love it Nisreen .. and frankly was giving it thought a few hours ago .. your free couplet tendencies is so perfect for working together ... i have some stuff on the burners but nothing exciting ... lets just do it!! :))

[B]

yes ok
lets go for it

[Bohrium Guy]

I would love to see this as well... both of you are good match.

[B]

Affloat a cloud of screaming time
A sailor whistled in dismay

[Bohrium Guy]

Ahh but candle flickers iridescence
like a moth attraction to the flame

[B]

A guitar player flew the land
His home was made of sand

[Bohrium Guy]

But his heart was heard note for note
And passion and romance is his stand....

[B]

Somehow his hand writing was made of gold
Telling a story of us in may

[Bohrium Guy]

Just scribbles on a music sheet
A story to surely unfold

[B]

Yet his heart spoke miles
On a journey on a plane

To meet his lover once again

[B]

Thanks ........................................ :)

[Bohrium Guy]

Thanks ......................................... ;)

[Bohrium Guy]

I just couldn't resist!

[WhiteWillow]

This reads as a classic poem, and yet very relatable to the present. This poem is a gem

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you WhiteWillow and so nice to make your acquaintance ... it is a bit of experimenting in quatrains and rhyme ... we were hoping it would be relatable to the present tho we drew from the very rich history of the Black Sea and its surrounding cultures that have come and gone .. thank you again for stopping by .. i will surely repay the kindness
E.