Black Sea

Collaboration with Zahra and advice from "M"

The Black Sea

Floods wash over blood sands

Breakers defy stone dams

Heights strive to contain our lands

Fighting moon's pulsating hands

 

Her hands forever unfolding

birthing waves mesmerizing

fertile dark ground holding

key of life's ever molding 

in the unburied's dwelling,

sounding timeless echoes,

obstructed secrets wailing

within pending throes.

God is weeping as He sees

Man created to live in light

sinks below light's decrees

making choices founded on night

Pontus Exinus crossings meet

gold calved nations with sulfuric streets

worms suffocate in our Devil's dark seat

anoxic, pro-toxic, sheep's bleating replete

weeping in agony well worth the pain

hoping the truth all Men regain

knowing as well things will remain

a battle well worn over each domain

E. with Zahra and advice from M

Author's Note

the density layers and rich cultural history inspired this one; here is just one spot to read more: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Black_Sea

Reviews

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-- for me, the fourth stanza is where the soul of these beautiful symphony resides... -- in everything, we (as in us human beings) do have a special talent for wrong choices... -- most of the problems in the world today and most of the problems in our personal lives can be attributed to bad decisions... -- but still... sometimes we are able to transcend our human limitations and "regain" our lost momentum and thrive... -- i thank the three musicians who played a role in crafting this piece... -- it has depth, it has intensity, and it is very giving -- much like the black sea...

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..that verse is at the crux of what we are trying to say ..and if choices are based on darkness ..how deep the darkness is :( so glad you read this one serah! so glad it has touched you so!
E.

[.]

-- me too... i'm glad i did...

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! A splendid collaboration. An important and very strategic sea. Aways wondered why they call it black. Lots of countries border it. Very good location for lots of things. A good rhyming poem to celebrate it.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Sami ... for finding this older colab with Zahra ... sure miss her around here ... yes! lots of history in surrounding countries .. and the sea itself so unique in it's layering .. anoxic lower levels .. deep and dark eh!? thanks for taking time old friend! :)
E.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome sir Einstein.

[barleygirl]

This is an amazing collaboration using mostly a monorhyme (that I love to use myself) so it really harkens to my sense of having fun while reading your poem. The dramatic wordplay conveys so much with vivid imagery & the intensity of your descriptions grow more bizarre & thought-provoking as the poem reaches the end. This is the height of original expression! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Barley Girl...so happy you found this one..it was a wonderful learning experience for me...Zahra chose the rhyme scheme if i remember correctly ... we cheated a little with the "ing" endings but i think the words are strong enough to carry ..your review made me re-read it me-self and i am changing "holding" in Ce to "sounding" as i noticed we used "holding" in V2 as well ... what do you think? i absolutely love your new avatar dahlink! what a big beautiful baby!!!

[barleygirl]

As an avid rhymer myself, I do not try to always have perfect rhymes. I believe in the lyrical way of rhyming -- if it would sound good in a song, then it's close enuf for a good rhyme! *smile*

[Neville]

I am so glad I found these splendid words Gene and true... Here I am this evening having just arrived back at my own little bit of Bulgarian paradise but having spent the last three days & nights at the Hotel Atol on the Black Sea Coast which I so love and from where I once drove across the border into Edirne Turkey.... But, I digress and must apologise... A great bit o writing we got here and a smashing folk tune to compliment your fine words..... All Good Things, Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

perfect timing then eh1? ...working with Zahra on this was quite the adventure and learning experience for me ..the Black Sea is so contrary in its makeup ... you must have been thoroughly taken by the lands around it ..such History and mix of cultures ...love ya man! :)
E.

[Neville]

Perfect timing indeed...and yes, such a rich and oft misunderstood history... we will be back in August.... All Good Things my brother and love ya too... N

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .....................

[Neville]

Good evening my brother.. I have dug deep but not been able to find a post that I have not already left my mark upon and so I re-visited this one because I have just got home from visiting the Black Sea again.... anyway, both the ocean and your poem are as good today as they both were when I last paid them a visit.... go get ya pen out Gene..... Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

you are a stalwart friend and supporter Nev! i appreciate knowing you here very much .. lucky man for a second trip to the Black Sea ... I have been a bit inactive in writing lately but i feel the juices stirring ;) i haev been waiting on Sleepless to input on our sonnet collab but he is out to lunch .. i went ahead and sent him a first completed rendition this morning ... if i don't hear back in a few days i will (according to our plan) send it off to Richard for what most likely will be a boat load of corrections :)))))))) then i'll post it ... then ... i can turn my attention to my bits and pieces folder and work something out from that ... our weather here has turned sunny and warm .. cool nights and the forest is fully exploded .. peace on ya bro .. love ya lots! :)

[Neville]

Sounds like you got a plan there Gene.... and back at ya.... Neville :))

[Ken Simm.]

I find so many diverse elements in this. From Sci Fi to dark romance. From ecological to war. It is crammed in the best possible way with all these thought provoking concepts.

[Einstein Noodle]

I could not be more happy to see you found this one Ken...I had such a good time in collaborating with Zahra with the Black Sea as a foundation and inspiration ... its makeup and history are magical ..thanks for reviewing Ken ..so grateful for you taking time
E.

[FOih;]

The final line: "a battle well worn over each domain" is incredibly potent. The entire structure and story transcends beliefs. These are universal moments. Thank you for sharing this.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks M! ;) we had a fine time of learning in the writing of this ... i am glad you decided to check on "The Black Sea" ... i will have to let Zahra know that it is still getting some attention ..thanks my poet friend, thank you for your input in its writing and now :)
E.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Awesome!
I loved the style, structure, story and voice.
Beautifully crafted master piece.
Kudos!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for stopping Jyoti! we don't see each other enough do we ;) so much to keep up with .. thank you for finding this one and taking time to review ..its important to me ..love and joy
E.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

We surely will see more of each other from now on. And it was a pleasure to come along your work! read moreWe surely will see more of each other from now on. And it was a pleasure to come along your work!
Good day E! :D

[icelandicblue]

In light we can see truths that are shrouded in the in the shadows of night, but we must want to walk that path. Powerfully written poem you've got here.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes!! its not chasing out the dark is it!?? its just turning on that little light bulb :)) you are wise and a wonderful friend Icey ... we are getting to be old friends i think :) hope and joy and peace to you and yours!

E.

[Matching Socks]

Very powerful thoughts and images, great work.
You guys write well together.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you my favorite pair of tennies ;) Zahra is such a princess to me ..i so enjoy our collabs. 9we have a bunch of them;) glad you like this one ... thank you for saying so my friend!
E.

[Rita L. Sev]

Created to live in light - put pushing ourselves and each other deeper into the darkness... You guys have hit a nerve, and everyone should take notice. Hauntingly crafted, a masterpiece of truth and warning.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Rita ..truly humbled by your review ... thank you!!
E.

[Richard Patrick]

it was beautiful, and haunting. We do not know what we do? When we make mistakes, but we do not admit we have errored in this story. We shoul want the reader to realize what we have done there. We are perfect, or so we claim to be. But we know we are not.

[Einstein Noodle]

what interesting remarks Richard ..you caused me to go back and read it myself again ;) no ..we certainly are not perfect .. and do things in darkness blinding ourselves to the Light ... and may refuse to admit it for sure ...not a healthy place eh!? thank you for taking time and your thoughtful comments
E.

[Richard Patrick]

your welcome, could you check out some of my work

[Einstein Noodle]

will do for sure! :)

[Richard Patrick]

You are welcome.