i am missing Ms. Frieda and decided to re-post this poem which we did together .. i am so angry how one very nasty person was able to drive her from the Cafe :(
Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land
Tapped upon a mushroom cap's fancy, to see if the rabbit hole was rumor curiouser and curiouser about the unimaginable avenue,
She opens my mind and fear grips my colors from the hinterland ..... tremors wink and blink and nod
As I sat upon my newfangled gumption common sense took a recess, spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd to my surprise, the scaramouch of a head talked back
my birthing in darkness musk and dank scent knocks my shroom head explodes collide's scope intense
in his elegant persuasion, made a date for half past daft took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip alas, we've lived happily ever after upon a prime floating island in a cloud
clouds of words spilling like rough gouged stones in tumbler's majestic insane forever now i
What a superb collaboration from you and dear, dear Frieda = yours are minds that walk the same space.. perhaps!
There's so much in this piece, the colour and highlights take the reader into a world of bewilderingly spaced.out somewhere. The phrasing you've used is another language, a magic not to be translated - and who would want to do that...all of us!
Lewis Carrol would undoubtedly want to join the two of you in another collab, happily sharing his enlightenment via any means - even holding the breath and flying off and away with the daisies. . Brava and brava again.. Loved this. Great musical accompaniment, by the way... ..
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
thank you so much emma! and certainly Frieda would thank you as well ... your read is certainly the.. read morethank you so much emma! and certainly Frieda would thank you as well ... your read is certainly the way to do it ..letting go and enjoying the ride ..i do try to write in some of the classical forms from time to time ..because doing so (i think) improves my experience ... but poems like this one are my (and Frieda's) tendency ... i am so happy you enjoyed reading this ..and remembering our mutual friend
E.
8 Years Ago
ps. and i am so happy you mentioned the video ... we had a bit of a search to fine it :)
8 Years Ago
pss. wouldn't that be something to collab with Lewis or any other of our favorite poets of old .. :).. read morepss. wouldn't that be something to collab with Lewis or any other of our favorite poets of old .. :)))) and
8 Years Ago
YESSSSSSSSSSSSS
7 Years Ago
By the way.. i miss my friend, Frieda too, never thought an unseen in the flesh friend could mean so.. read moreBy the way.. i miss my friend, Frieda too, never thought an unseen in the flesh friend could mean so much... Think it's time she returned to us now... she can't hide for much longer.. tis not allowed, tis a crime against poets and wonderful people.
Altogether now... FRIEDAAAAAA, come back, we miss and need you! .
7 Years Ago
FRIEEEEEEEEEDA!! COME BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WE MISS AND NEEED YOU!!!!!!!!!!.. read moreFRIEEEEEEEEEDA!! COME BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WE MISS AND NEEED YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
7 Years Ago
LaUGHING.. that will either inspire her or... she'll make for the hills. Maybe a whisper would hel.. read moreLaUGHING.. that will either inspire her or... she'll make for the hills. Maybe a whisper would help... ready? .... .. . .. ..... .... ... .. ... ..
Going to leave here now, really must. Will be searching high and low, behind doors and under rugs, t.. read moreGoing to leave here now, really must. Will be searching high and low, behind doors and under rugs, top of mountains, deep in the bluest sea. Fridea has to be somewhere..Did you know that mermaids and unicorns are her best friend> Will go find some and ask the way .. bfn.
7 Years Ago
STILL love this collaboration, brings back the way things were, the influence that special person ha.. read moreSTILL love this collaboration, brings back the way things were, the influence that special person had on thinking, on seeing... and of course, as shown in your combined writing... imagination!
Smile soft but broad in memory of beautiful memories and whisper to the wing... 'Come out, come out, wherever you are.' x.
7 Years Ago
i missed your comment of 2 months ago! hmmm .. computers right!? so glad this brings you such fond m.. read morei missed your comment of 2 months ago! hmmm .. computers right!? so glad this brings you such fond memories ..i know you have given a smile to our good friend ..yeh! mermaids and unicorns ..can't get much better than that ..love and peace emmajoy
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much... still miss my friend with the curled pinky and language that knew, knows, no bo.. read moreThank you so much... still miss my friend with the curled pinky and language that knew, knows, no bounds. Sweet thoughts in life to you, my friend.. :)
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6 Years Ago
yes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will.. read moreyes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will return ..the burn must have simply been too much :( but we can keep remembering her can't we ..and her voice and cussing especially ;)
6 Years Ago
STILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanitie.. read moreSTILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanities in Italian - and to be happy in any way that suits the moment. Frieda, wherever you are, come back, there are warriors here to protect you.. believe me.
1 Year Ago
I don't know how i missed this from you, Emma .. i wish she would come back too .. and read how we a.. read moreI don't know how i missed this from you, Emma .. i wish she would come back too .. and read how we all support her :(
1 Year Ago
Today, 29/08/2023 and still miss Freida. Such a character, a little wicked and absolutely special. .. read moreToday, 29/08/2023 and still miss Freida. Such a character, a little wicked and absolutely special.
Must find a post of yours that I've not reviewed now. :)
Em, your comment touches my heart .. yes .. she was just a little wicked and so full of spunk and jo.. read moreEm, your comment touches my heart .. yes .. she was just a little wicked and so full of spunk and joy .. i miss her too. i tried the email that use to connect me but did not hear back .. from my streets, the attention this poem has gotten and continues to get is flabergasting .. and humbling .. she is a corker still i am sure; but it would be so nice if someone could give us an update. love on ya me dear friend
5 Months Ago
Am meant to see this wonderful collaboration tonight. It is a much needed gift. Although we never me.. read moreAm meant to see this wonderful collaboration tonight. It is a much needed gift. Although we never met, Frieda and I were close friends: we even had our own Italian language, talked about pasts, futures, everything. Amongst the good and bad, she taught me how to stand up to much of the online silliness and.. ultimately the evil too. THEN, that darling woman, was hurt by it. I tried to keep in touch, but Frieda was too hurt to even come near this place. I've learned since how things happen in here, cliques and gangs and single manipulation -' happens everywhere these days.
Dear sir, many, many thanks for re.posting this collaboration. It still stands as one of the finest poem ever posted in the cafe. And, via you, will always be here. Em
On first read, this was too much for my not-yet-entirely-awake brain this morning. I read it again. More images appeared. I read two or three pages of reviews and comments. I read it a third time. I watched the video. Wow! This is getting good. I read it a fourth time, much more slowly, stopping at every word. Such a mind-blowing experience to be had from the imagery you and Frieda have woven here! Then, for fun, and in keeping with the idea of the poem, I read it backwards. If you ignore the syntactical anomalies, it is equally as powerful! You and Frieda created an abstract painting of “clouds of words…like rough gouged stones” that can be appreciated from any angle!
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
WOW! how you felt this my new found friend...if i may call you that?? :) how so many miss dear Ms. F.. read moreWOW! how you felt this my new found friend...if i may call you that?? :) how so many miss dear Ms. Freida ... i could not be more gratified .. nor have i been in my more than a decade here and a decade beyond ... of non-educated poetry endeavors ...i must and certainly will visit your lanes sir .. right here at the Cafe' .. i can not express my gratitude for your review ... when another creative writer reads .. several times and then again .. is way beyond what one could hope for ... thanks so much for finding this and taking your precious time to review .. see you 'round sir! ... right here at the Cafe' :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
E.
I have been gone awhile and do not know your friend but if it was the cranky talentless old man hack who thinks he's a bona fide literary critic that lurks around looking for a mark to insult I'm truly sorry.
This read like a mushroom trip and I liked it! Very reminiscent of Lewis Carrol.the imagery is fantastic!
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
well ... welcome back! it very well could be the same culprit .. i do not know .. people like that h.. read morewell ... welcome back! it very well could be the same culprit .. i do not know .. people like that have come and gone and thankfully, at least from my street .. it has been quite a while since the last one .. thank you for choosing to read this .. so happy you enjoyed the imagery .. it was great fun to write along with Frieda and many will always miss her .. thanks again so much for reading and commenting .. and for returning .. love and peace!
E.
I took peyote as part of ceremony just a month ago (wow, was that only a month ago?!?), and this of course brought the experience to mind! Wonderfully crafted without losing the playfulness or meaning, fantastic! I don't know your collaborator but still feel their loss, I hate bullies!!
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
thank you for your empathy regarding Freida .. miss her a lot around here. so glad you chose to read.. read morethank you for your empathy regarding Freida .. miss her a lot around here. so glad you chose to read this one .. when people do it brings Freida back for a moment .. yes .. in the 60s peyote was one of the drugs of choice .. sounds like quite the story behind your ceremony ... thanks again for taking time .. good to have met says i!
E.
i feel you, jessy .. but don't recognize you .. will have to check your profile ... right now ;) be .. read morei feel you, jessy .. but don't recognize you .. will have to check your profile ... right now ;) be of good cheer ... all things in this world pass away but there is something that is eternal for those who seek it .. love on ya! see ya 'round .. right here at the Cafe' .. thank you for reading and reviewing this poem .. it always reminds me of Freida, whom we all still miss ... peace and joy!
E.
Hi. I know who you are, I am sorry I have hurted few people with my harsh comments, but you are the only one who is reprounouncing my name from the beginning and end, I can’t believe, now I see lively I can’t miss you anymore, what is that heart, that looks so lovely and strong that had taken hazaar churiyaan(wounds of pain/torture kind of) now I can’t make you bleed any more hope my rest of life heals it and cuddles it as much you wanted. I am missing you.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
not sure i understand what you are talking about jessy ???
E.
2 Years Ago
Its fine, leave it if you dont understand. Sorry if I am the wrong person.
oh that was a trip! what a wonderful duo you made! this is filled with adventure and so sorry Frieda is gone, what a shame. Yes there are trolls here, they're everywhere, it's the internet. Maybe she will come back, I hope for all of us she will. You can't let them get to you, remember there IQ is severely lacking so all they have are growls, you can always growl back or block them, it's easier. :)
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
yes .. report and block takes care of the issue .. Frieda is gone now for quite a few years and i ha.. read moreyes .. report and block takes care of the issue .. Frieda is gone now for quite a few years and i have lost contact with her .. may have been other things going on as well as trolls .. i appreciate you taking time to read this one, Pat! ..
E.
Form and content merge and everything that is, is not. Well done E. We could all use some magic mushrooms about now.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
ahahahaha ..well my good sir ..i can think of 3 or 5 right off the bat that could use a trip ... som.. read moreahahahaha ..well my good sir ..i can think of 3 or 5 right off the bat that could use a trip ... somewhere not here :))))))))))))))))))))))) thanks for reading and your lovely review ... much appreciated sir!
E.
A magical mystery ride not knowing where I would end. Well written with vivid description and balance. I was as good as the real thing.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
well now, Soren .. whatever do you mean by the "real thing" ?? :)))))))))) i so appreciate your revi.. read morewell now, Soren .. whatever do you mean by the "real thing" ?? :)))))))))) i so appreciate your reviewing this old collaboration with Frieda Pickle .. she is sorely missed here at the Cafe' .. peace, love and health my friend!
E.
You can imagine my reaction when I came to your page and saw this. I'm still laughing!! Wow!! And on top of that, the poem was good! Damn good! Unique structure and nice balance of free verse and rhyme. I love it! Not to mention the subject. I've been wondering what writes that interesting name I see pop up here and there. Meant to read you but the volume of it all here is a little overwhelming. I might spend the rest of the day reading you.....I'll be back
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
ahahaha William!! I was wondering if you would find this one .. so happy you did! you probably never.. read moreahahaha William!! I was wondering if you would find this one .. so happy you did! you probably never ran into Freida Pickle .. she left years ago (sad story) we just had a lot of fun with this going back and forth ... love that you found it sir!!
thank you again for your support and encouragement! Means a lot.
E.
Are you the white rabbit? It feels like I'm running through a maze and that ending is such a bittersweet exit.
re-pronounce her name
beginning and
end... ;)
Just a beautiful collaboration between the two and how you both end up in the same place.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
you have made my day in finding this one and taking time to read, enjoy and share your thoughts. I l.. read moreyou have made my day in finding this one and taking time to read, enjoy and share your thoughts. I loved working with Freida and am overly blessed when a review brings me back to this. .. we had a ball in writing for sure! thanks so much Amanda .. see you 'round the Cafe` eh!?
E.
This morning as I began to log in to WC, it occurred to me what an inspiring and comfortable place this has become for me.
There are so many talented people sharing, encouraging, teaching and learni.. more..