"A'Rising Reeling" Collaboration with Frieda

i am re-posting this oldie because i was asked to ... to keep dear friend Frieda in remembrance here at the Cafe' ..in the hope that she will one day come back to us .. peace and joy to all! <3

A'Rising Reeling



Have you looked square into the eye of death's dragon

whilst the sky was falling down in ember's shadow

fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be

butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity

spelled Wyverns hording antiquity's gifts
even in sleep red eyes mesmerize
striking deaf and dumb all who so 

foolishly dare fly into the lair on shivery aileron 

skeletons in smoky closeted dust

prey upon the mind's placidity 

graying the essence of coma's stake

suspended in lethargic dormancy 

osteoporitic clickety clack
thighs calves and tendons rendered
under the leech bloat belly of Smaug
Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional

Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby

murky bodies of water sync in disconnect

discontent of an allusion's regimented menagerie

Requiem's Mass hysteria hijacked greener pastures

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'A Rising Reeling'
Einstein Noodle,
I was intrigued and inspired by this poem at the same time.
This one touches the reality of confusion and discouragement
-when hope is gone- when evil and or or chaos then fills hopes place.
The metaphors of dragons and the surrounding powers of darkness
swirl throughout this writing.
"Fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity"
The thing that is so interesting and even lovely is to see
that it was a collaboration between two people which really played
well off each other and that is just plain cool. The whole peice was
stunning and I had to read it through several times. I also like the ending.
Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby. The theme continues all through
of what is desired and comforting looked for but not found.
Impressive for sure!
Blessings,
Kathy

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much for taking time to read several times...Frieda was always an inspiration and so much fun to work with ... when people find the poems we collaborated on i am doubly thankful because, of course, my thoughts turn to her :( i think you nailed us Kathy .. spot on review for sure! thank you so much!
E.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

I have wondered if I could write something different then seems to come forth in my simple prose. You both are just amazing.thanks again for posting this goody.
Kathy

[Einstein Noodle]

oh i'm sure you can Kathy! try a classic form of one kind or another .. or use the "voice" of a man ... or an animal ... or another culture you are not too familiar with ... ;)

[Kathy Van Kurin]

When you put it that way it sounds doable.

[Einstein Noodle]

YES! doable my friend!!

[Neville]

Amazing words a true marriage of co-joint minds and pens perfect...... A great write Gene without question... and oh' if you should ever hear from the lovely Ms P...say hi and send her me luv.....Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Neville...i'm afraid Frieda is hard to reach these days .. we use to e-mail now and then but i have not heard back from her now fro quite some time .. we sure miss her don't we ...some people are simply very special without ever knowing or trying eh!? thanks again for your review ... love and peace bro
E.

[Neville]

shame that but yes, I understand and back at you my very good friend..... N.

[Neville]

I had again been thinking on absent friends and found my way back here for a moments reflection .. still muchly missed I am so glad that I got to know her before she felt it necessary to leave us .. x

[Einstein Noodle]

me too Neville! she was such a fiery Italian .. hope she's ok ... and thank you so much for going back to this oldie .. it can be a good thing to revisit our pasts sometimes .. not always .. but sometimes .. Big Happy New Year to ya sir! you came to mind yesterday afternoon and I lifted me pint to ya! and yours! :)

[Neville]

muchly appreciated Gene & back at ya :)

[stars are far]

That was a very amazing work, and a very harmonic collabration..well done

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Stars! Frieda makes things easy! :)
E.

[Briana O'Connor]

I just adore the fantasy themed mystery lying within this. Very exquisite! The pure elegance of each line swirling with each of your styles is pure magic. Well done guys.

[Einstein Noodle]

Hi Peeping! appreciate your visit to our dragon land .. thank you for your kind and encouraging words
E.

[Ashira Macy]

Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional

I cannot get over this line. I love that song so much, and now I have to listen to it a million times. I really liked this collaboration between you two. It is different than what I have seen of Frieda's other collabs, which is cool because it is fun to see the different dimensions that writers bring out of one another. Anyway, the imagery in this was really fantastic. It gave off such an urgent, almost frantic feeling. The sky is falling and mountains are bleeding, the time to take cover is nigh.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for finding this one Ashira! its always a treat when poets go back a poem or two to read and leave comments .. really glad you enjoyed reading .. and yes! pull the covers over your head ;)
E.

[Nusquam Esse]

obviously I am biased, but I enjoyed many of the lines in here. As 'the dragon' of WC, I cannot help but growl in contentment for lines such as "spelled Wyverns hording antiquity's gifts"; and the side of me that doesn't want to stay home, and instead terrorize and collect me some maidens can certainly relate with that last stanza... One suggestion however, instead of mountain top, try mountain's zenith, summit, apex... whichever, the point is, top is dull.

[Einstein Noodle]

i see your point ... perhaps simply leave it out ?? but fire breathing Frieda will have to concur ;) God bless her beautiful beautiful :)
love your reviews always and coming from the Dragons mouth i am tempted (just a little) to feel pretty good about our creation .. thanks again Esse
E.

[Frieda P]

Ha 'dull'....geez, and I was having such a good morning too. Will work on that one dear dragon, how silly of moi to pick such a boring word, but I do concur. ;)

[Rita L. Sev]

What a mystical, mythical trip this is! Great imagery; I particularly loved that last stanza. You two harmonize perfectly.

[Einstein Noodle]

that is the magnificent Frieda's ;) thank you for reading and commenting Rita! you know i value your impressions
E.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rita, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Tom]

A mystical, foreboding dark underworld where Hades himself rules and calls the shots, time to summon the legendary King Arthur and Excalibur to slay his woefully gruesome monsters !

A fine collaboration of foreboding fantasy, creatively conferred and conveyed !

[Einstein Noodle]

yes!! all hail the King! .. and definitely bring a shining sword :) .. thank you for your encouraging review Tom ..
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[Frieda P]

Ah two knights to the rescue! Thanks Tom.

[Scott Metro]

Very thought provoking ....
An excellent voyage into ancient thoughts..at least for me.

Well done you two....enjoyed it..!!!
Scotty

[Einstein Noodle]

not surprised that mysticism and roots spoke to you in this Scot .. thank you for taking time to read and comment.. very much appreciate it!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

okay, I liked it all, but I am definitely partial to the last two stanzas. Fine little work here.

[Einstein Noodle]

so cool you were drawn to the last two verses .. dragon lore and doom ;) thanks for commenting KL .. you know i appreciate!
E.