"A'Rising Reeling"  Collaboration with Frieda

"A'Rising Reeling" Collaboration with Frieda

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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i am re-posting this oldie because i was asked to ... to keep dear friend Frieda in remembrance here at the Cafe' ..in the hope that she will one day come back to us .. peace and joy to all! <3

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A'Rising Reeling



Have you looked square into the eye of death's dragon
whilst the sky was falling down in ember's shadow
fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity

spelled Wyverns hording antiquity's gifts
even in sleep red eyes mesmerize
striking deaf and dumb all who so 
foolishly dare fly into the lair on shivery aileron 

skeletons in smoky closeted dust
prey upon the mind's placidity 
graying the essence of coma's stake
suspended in lethargic dormancy 

osteoporitic clickety clack
thighs calves and tendons rendered
under the leech bloat belly of Smaug
Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional


Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby
murky bodies of water sync in disconnect
discontent of an allusion's regimented menagerie
Requiem's Mass hysteria hijacked greener pastures



© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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'A Rising Reeling'
Einstein Noodle,
I was intrigued and inspired by this poem at the same time.
This one touches the reality of confusion and discouragement
-when hope is gone- when evil and or or chaos then fills hopes place.
The metaphors of dragons and the surrounding powers of darkness
swirl throughout this writing.
"Fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity"
The thing that is so interesting and even lovely is to see
that it was a collaboration between two people which really played
well off each other and that is just plain cool. The whole peice was
stunning and I had to read it through several times. I also like the ending.
Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby. The theme continues all through
of what is desired and comforting looked for but not found.
Impressive for sure!
Blessings,
Kathy

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

oh i'm sure you can Kathy! try a classic form of one kind or another .. or use the "voice" of a man .. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

6 Years Ago

When you put it that way it sounds doable.
Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

YES! doable my friend!!



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I still miss her and cannot bare to remove her from my friends list!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

same here John! she needs to come out of hiding .. i do hope she is well .. :(
E.
Since I haven't seen too much new stuff being posted on your spot (too busy buzzing amazing wood sculptures, I'm sure!) . . . I went digging back. I didn't know Frida, but she's fondly referred to by many at the cafe, so this one caught my eye. The blend of your styles seems seamless to me, I can't tell where one starts & the other ends. I love that this could apply to spooky Halloween sentiments, which seem more & more like real-life, the way our world goes topsy-turvy here & there. I believe more people are reeling more often than they admit. Life can be dizzying! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Years Ago


Cassie

4 Years Ago

I miss Frieda too a lot, I hope she can come back someday. She used to light the cafe and I remember.. read more
barleygirl

4 Years Ago

Sunshine is apropos! Thanks for sharing more, both of you! *smile*
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

A bracing and intriguing piece that guides the reader, emotion plays a role underneath he wording, well done, good read.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

oh my ... what a treat you found and read this one Thomas! its an oldie i recently re-posted by requ.. read more
Thomas Fitzgerald

4 Years Ago

I did, one of my favourites on here, I miss her
Reading through this, knowing Frieda from way back and you for quite a while, just can't find the joins.. Or the variation of thoughts complex, contemplative, daemon-ish and - mesmerising in a very odd way! There are emotions dark and searching here; can't see a stronger voice, and even if could, wouldn't opt that this line is better than another..

Frieda was such a dear friend. We laughed and giggled together, she taught me to laugh openly at myself, and - we hugged across the water when one or other needed that little extra girlie comfort! I reckon she might peep now and again, purely to grin at our misdemeanours!

Meantime, Gene, having found that i'd reviewed so many of your recent poems, look what i found here: Treasure from treasure itself! Thank you!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

4 Years Ago

Many thank yous and lots more. If we all stood or sat, holding hands and hummed, do you think Fried.. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

maybe Em! lets try it .. hummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm :)
emmajoy

4 Years Ago

YES, YES and YES: . SPREAD THE HUM

hummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.. read more
You wrote this with Frieda Pickle? The most amazing poetess who ever rode the internet poetry dragon?
There are so many amazingly sublime and brilliant lines in this flowing evocative poem that I do not doubt it. You are a wonderful collaboration. And I miss her too!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks John! she is a Sweet Pickle for sure :) so glad you visited and reviewed .. her presence is s.. read more
This is a pandora’s Box of goodies here, such lovely imagery of doom, maybe hope and dark themes. Who would have thought two heads wrote this as the blend makes the write seem written from one! Yes, on a second look such a delight to read, great lines, vivid imagery, what a pleasure!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks Andrew ... so happy you enjoyed ... yes...lots of dark in this one my friend ;} perhaps hope .. read more
Frieda of all poeple had her own personal demons which she chanelled so well into her poetry.
Frightening, nightmare images penned with such clarity, and death of anything beautiful is found in a requiem mass...

Brilliant... the both of you.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

try this one: https://hellopoetry.com/frieda-p/
you may have to create a page for yourself to.. read more
Stella Armour

5 Years Ago

i have a page there , i just dont post lol
Stella Armour

5 Years Ago

found Frieda's page , but everything is 5 years old and no sign of Noodle , who has probably gone th.. read more
It dont matter how many times I read this incredible collab me dear E.. I keep coming back to it, like a lost puppy... I am back here again now because I think it is most apt given my recent resurrection of an oldie.. I know you know which one I mean... maybe you will re-post so others may be able to cast their eyes on a joint worked masterpiece ... Stay good Gene and stay true, your mate, Me :)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

of course i know of which you speak ... this one has so much of that Frieda we all love and miss .. .. read more
Neville

5 Years Ago

I do so hope you will re-post my friend & for those very same reasons... unfortunately, although I s.. read more
This is a journey of suspense, of escaping dragon's eyes, of challenging life's difficulties and coming out victorious. A hidden message to fight on, never give us and leave the critics in the dust bin of history. What a collaboration. She shall be missed.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

how grateful you found this one and reviewed it Sami! Frieda is truly missed even after such a long .. read more
Sami Khalil

5 Years Ago

You are both welcome.
Great stuff, Crispy Noodle! I particularly liked these two lines:
'under the leech bloat belly of Smaug
Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional'
Hope you are enjoying this amazing summer, my friend.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 6 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

how happy i am you found this one Mr. Iron! and oh how we miss Frieda ..oh my! :(
we had gre.. read more
The Iron Horseman

6 Years Ago

Thanks, buddy. Glad you are having a good one, but don't wish Fall on us just yet, please! :D
.. read more

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Added on September 6, 2014
Last Updated on February 8, 2019
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