i am re-posting this oldie because i was asked to ... to keep dear friend Frieda in remembrance here at the Cafe' ..in the hope that she will one day come back to us .. peace and joy to all! <3
A'Rising Reeling
Have you looked square into the eye of death's dragon
whilst the sky was falling down in ember's shadow
fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity
spelled Wyverns hording antiquity's gifts even in sleep red eyes mesmerize striking deaf and dumb all who so
foolishly dare fly into the lair on shivery aileron
skeletons in smoky closeted dust
prey upon the mind's placidity
graying the essence of coma's stake
suspended in lethargic dormancy
osteoporitic clickety clack thighs calves and tendons rendered under the leech bloat belly of Smaug Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional
'A Rising Reeling'
Einstein Noodle,
I was intrigued and inspired by this poem at the same time.
This one touches the reality of confusion and discouragement
-when hope is gone- when evil and or or chaos then fills hopes place.
The metaphors of dragons and the surrounding powers of darkness
swirl throughout this writing.
"Fire burning blood mountain tops where god should be
butterfly wings clipped in the namesake of austerity"
The thing that is so interesting and even lovely is to see
that it was a collaboration between two people which really played
well off each other and that is just plain cool. The whole peice was
stunning and I had to read it through several times. I also like the ending.
Loch Ness roars a Scottish highland's lullaby. The theme continues all through
of what is desired and comforting looked for but not found.
Impressive for sure!
Blessings,
Kathy
thank you so much for taking time to read several times...Frieda was always an inspiration and so mu.. read morethank you so much for taking time to read several times...Frieda was always an inspiration and so much fun to work with ... when people find the poems we collaborated on i am doubly thankful because, of course, my thoughts turn to her :( i think you nailed us Kathy .. spot on review for sure! thank you so much!
E.
6 Years Ago
I have wondered if I could write something different then seems to come forth in my simple prose. Yo.. read moreI have wondered if I could write something different then seems to come forth in my simple prose. You both are just amazing.thanks again for posting this goody.
Kathy
oh i'm sure you can Kathy! try a classic form of one kind or another .. or use the "voice" of a man .. read moreoh i'm sure you can Kathy! try a classic form of one kind or another .. or use the "voice" of a man ... or an animal ... or another culture you are not too familiar with ... ;)
Since I haven't seen too much new stuff being posted on your spot (too busy buzzing amazing wood sculptures, I'm sure!) . . . I went digging back. I didn't know Frida, but she's fondly referred to by many at the cafe, so this one caught my eye. The blend of your styles seems seamless to me, I can't tell where one starts & the other ends. I love that this could apply to spooky Halloween sentiments, which seem more & more like real-life, the way our world goes topsy-turvy here & there. I believe more people are reeling more often than they admit. Life can be dizzying! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
yes .. i have been lacking motivation as far as writing goes ... just taking a break i guess .. must.. read moreyes .. i have been lacking motivation as far as writing goes ... just taking a break i guess .. must need it eh!? You would have loved Freida! and she you! .. She is a spitfire Italian Catholic girl who picked bones with the mighty without a blink nor stutter ;) i too miss her a lot .. she use to return my e-mails but its been years now .. i just hope she is well. we did more than several poems together .. yes . halloween .. we do have a skeleton in there don't we ;) and the times of covid reek with reeling for some .. i am sorry it is like that for those most affected by it :( i truly appreciate you taking time to dig and for finding this .. it brings Freida to mind of course .. which is a good thing ... big hugs back Margie! ..
E.
I miss Frieda too a lot, I hope she can come back someday. She used to light the cafe and I remember.. read moreI miss Frieda too a lot, I hope she can come back someday. She used to light the cafe and I remember she nicknamed me sunshine
4 Years Ago
Sunshine is apropos! Thanks for sharing more, both of you! *smile*
A bracing and intriguing piece that guides the reader, emotion plays a role underneath he wording, well done, good read.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
oh my ... what a treat you found and read this one Thomas! its an oldie i recently re-posted by requ.. read moreoh my ... what a treat you found and read this one Thomas! its an oldie i recently re-posted by request as it is a collab with beautiful and dearly missed Ms. Frieda Pickle ... it has a lot of darker undertones ... Frieda was such an inspirational writer for me ... and many others i am sure ... so glad you brought me back to it .. so happy you found something worthwhile ... lots of emotions for sure .. lots of hidden angst and disappointments ... did you know Frieda?
E.
Reading through this, knowing Frieda from way back and you for quite a while, just can't find the joins.. Or the variation of thoughts complex, contemplative, daemon-ish and - mesmerising in a very odd way! There are emotions dark and searching here; can't see a stronger voice, and even if could, wouldn't opt that this line is better than another..
Frieda was such a dear friend. We laughed and giggled together, she taught me to laugh openly at myself, and - we hugged across the water when one or other needed that little extra girlie comfort! I reckon she might peep now and again, purely to grin at our misdemeanours!
Meantime, Gene, having found that i'd reviewed so many of your recent poems, look what i found here: Treasure from treasure itself! Thank you!
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
and i sure appreciate you searching for one you had not read .. means a lot :) i had to re-read this.. read moreand i sure appreciate you searching for one you had not read .. means a lot :) i had to re-read this myself .. it was a while back .. and your reviewing re-awakens Frieda here at the Cafe' .. for those many who do miss her .. such a spicy Italian .. Catholic rebel :)))))))))))))) i think you hit on it .. dark emotions searching ... yes! spot on me thinks... love ya emmajoy ... best of the day to ya!
E.
Many thank yous and lots more. If we all stood or sat, holding hands and hummed, do you think Fried.. read moreMany thank yous and lots more. If we all stood or sat, holding hands and hummed, do you think Frieda would pop back and laugh with us?! We'll have to waiting to find out how many peeps can hum a while or few!?!
4 Years Ago
maybe Em! lets try it .. hummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm :)
4 Years Ago
YES, YES and YES: . SPREAD THE HUM
hummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.. read moreYES, YES and YES: . SPREAD THE HUM
You wrote this with Frieda Pickle? The most amazing poetess who ever rode the internet poetry dragon?
There are so many amazingly sublime and brilliant lines in this flowing evocative poem that I do not doubt it. You are a wonderful collaboration. And I miss her too!
thanks John! she is a Sweet Pickle for sure :) so glad you visited and reviewed .. her presence is s.. read morethanks John! she is a Sweet Pickle for sure :) so glad you visited and reviewed .. her presence is strong in this one me thinks! i am trying to re-post it but i don't think i took the right track ... oh well... i will figure it out sooner or later ;) She is such a missed friend to so many
This is a pandora’s Box of goodies here, such lovely imagery of doom, maybe hope and dark themes. Who would have thought two heads wrote this as the blend makes the write seem written from one! Yes, on a second look such a delight to read, great lines, vivid imagery, what a pleasure!
thanks Andrew ... so happy you enjoyed ... yes...lots of dark in this one my friend ;} perhaps hope .. read morethanks Andrew ... so happy you enjoyed ... yes...lots of dark in this one my friend ;} perhaps hope too ... if one wants treasure ... a stout heart is required :)))
E.
Frieda of all poeple had her own personal demons which she chanelled so well into her poetry.
Frightening, nightmare images penned with such clarity, and death of anything beautiful is found in a requiem mass...
yes! we do have our demons ... and Frieda new hers with clarity no doubt about it ... such a rebelli.. read moreyes! we do have our demons ... and Frieda new hers with clarity no doubt about it ... such a rebellious soul ;))))))) thanks for reviewing Stella .. i just know that Frieda feels the love
E.
5 Years Ago
i have a feeling thatc Sye (Noodles) knows where she is but i have lost touch with Sye.
5 Years Ago
she has a page on Hello Poetry but does not communicate nor respond to comments .. i think she just .. read moreshe has a page on Hello Poetry but does not communicate nor respond to comments .. i think she just wants to post and let people read .. i don't visit it often and do not know how active she has been but this link may take you there:
https://hellopoetry.com/u698461/favorites/
5 Years Ago
thank you ... i will let you know if she responds to me :)
5 Years Ago
i am at HP your link took me to your page but i cant find the search button to look for Noodle
try this one: https://hellopoetry.com/frieda-p/
you may have to create a page for yourself to.. read moretry this one: https://hellopoetry.com/frieda-p/
you may have to create a page for yourself to use the service
5 Years Ago
i have a page there , i just dont post lol
5 Years Ago
found Frieda's page , but everything is 5 years old and no sign of Noodle , who has probably gone th.. read morefound Frieda's page , but everything is 5 years old and no sign of Noodle , who has probably gone through college now and doing other things . Sye was on my site Justforyoupoetry i might look up her email address
It dont matter how many times I read this incredible collab me dear E.. I keep coming back to it, like a lost puppy... I am back here again now because I think it is most apt given my recent resurrection of an oldie.. I know you know which one I mean... maybe you will re-post so others may be able to cast their eyes on a joint worked masterpiece ... Stay good Gene and stay true, your mate, Me :)
of course i know of which you speak ... this one has so much of that Frieda we all love and miss .. .. read moreof course i know of which you speak ... this one has so much of that Frieda we all love and miss .. in my opinion ... the title alone sets me nog to spinning ;) i think i will repost soon ... maybe our collective thought will lure her back ... one never knows eh!? thanks again Neville ... you are such a wonderful part of this Cafe' says i!
E.
5 Years Ago
I do so hope you will re-post my friend & for those very same reasons... unfortunately, although I s.. read moreI do so hope you will re-post my friend & for those very same reasons... unfortunately, although I suspect she visits now and again, I doubt she will return as herself until a certain Mr. Nasty decides to quit the site.... Bless ya Gene and bloomin true says I ... N.
This is a journey of suspense, of escaping dragon's eyes, of challenging life's difficulties and coming out victorious. A hidden message to fight on, never give us and leave the critics in the dust bin of history. What a collaboration. She shall be missed.
how grateful you found this one and reviewed it Sami! Frieda is truly missed even after such a long .. read morehow grateful you found this one and reviewed it Sami! Frieda is truly missed even after such a long time it seems .. and being brought back to poems we worked on keeps her here in a way ... thanks for your sensitive reading of this .. and so glad you enjoyed our dragon's play ;)
E.
Great stuff, Crispy Noodle! I particularly liked these two lines:
'under the leech bloat belly of Smaug
Puff never was real; Jackie Paper remains delusional'
Hope you are enjoying this amazing summer, my friend.
how happy i am you found this one Mr. Iron! and oh how we miss Frieda ..oh my! :(
we had gre.. read morehow happy i am you found this one Mr. Iron! and oh how we miss Frieda ..oh my! :(
we had great fun working this one out .. glad you enjoyed ... my summer is blessed for sure .. starting to glimpse the scent of fall already in the air ... its all good eh!? i wish you the best of the day as well my friend
E.
6 Years Ago
Thanks, buddy. Glad you are having a good one, but don't wish Fall on us just yet, please! :D
.. read moreThanks, buddy. Glad you are having a good one, but don't wish Fall on us just yet, please! :D
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