RIVER

Life goes on with or without you

 

 

You are chained to the past

On what could have been.

Want to trace back the path

Things you might have seen.

 

Stop thinking about yesterdays

Learn to let them go now.

Avoid the very same mistakes

Wrong turns you made somehow.

 

You are the river flowing by

Old pebbles just tell your story.

You are the wind blowing high

Carrying clouds of your memory.

 

The secret to life is in knowing

all the fun is in the trying.

Sitting around won’t do no good

Not failure but low aim is a crime.

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

A sound message knitted to a gentle flow.

[WILDERNESS]

Thanks for the kind words......
Keep visiting

[barleygirl]

Interesting job of writing this somewhat condescending-sounding lecture to another person, one who the narrator deems to be wasting away life by thinking of yesterday. It's always easier to write critical commentaries on other people's lives, than to be transparent and discerning about living our own lives and presenting our own experiences as an inspiration in our writings instead. Your statements are well-crafted and I agree with every word, but it never feels good to be lectured about how to live.

[WILDERNESS]

Splendid and v candid comments. Just don't take it as a lecture, maybe it's the writers catharsis. Would love to hear more from you..................... thanks

[TL Boehm]

You are the river flowing by
Old pebbles just tell your story.
You are the wind blowing high
Carrying clouds of your memory.

this part here is exquisite.

[WILDERNESS]

Thanks dear, nice of you to stop by .................... keep visiting.

[Phantom Heart]

I really like the "carrying clouds of your memory" and "all the fun is in the trying" Very well done, my dear. :) Have a good afternoon.

[WILDERNESS]

Good to hear from you after a long time dear,.............thanks

[Phantom Heart]

You are most welcome. I loved reading this. It's been too long, but now I am back to writing! :)

[Ruth]

Empowering...important to realise it is not the destination but the journey sometimes, tis how we learn, lovely piece...

[WILDERNESS]

Thanks a lot for caring to read n comment.......................

[Blue]

This is encouraging, and the metaphors used just made the message more powerful.

[WILDERNESS]

Glad you liked it Blue............. thanks a bunch

[J. J. Nightingale]

Yes, do not waste your time..going over the past..but rise above. as a cloud..and carry on...

Words to live by.......

Nice..............Jazz

[WILDERNESS]

Yes, easier said than done............. thanks dear friend...

[J. J. Nightingale]

YOU ARE WELCOME....

[Tom McRoberts]

Wonderful! Ofcourse the metaphor is that the person being addressed is the river, but the way it's written could also lend to the idea that the poem itself is a river, not allowing the addressed to stand still in their life and pushing them onwards.

[WILDERNESS]

Let their be life.......... thanks for the nice review