Scorpio

Self horoscope

The demon of Seduction is what I am called

A symbol of sex, and passion

I possess penetrating eyes that make any soul feel naked and defenseless before me

I’m easily aroused to my ferocious anger by my immoral and wicked behavior

Given but one task, to place anyone in a state of excitement and temptation

Behave as though attracted with natural superficial interest, with no serious intention

That is how I get my way

 

I am Venom

The poisons toxins that run through my veins are shown with extreme malice and bitterness in my speeches, and actions  

Your every weakness is my own strength

Drawing you in intensely to my hypnotic personality

I inject into my victims, attack the nerves that run their warm bodies, they hit a state of paralyses in which in me they are now tied

Rather simple

 

Why so vigorous?

I too am at fault for my nature

My urge to love, all to penetrate those beyond themselves and loose control

Fear of rejection, and self-defeat

Demanding, too unforgiving of faults of others is what I am

I depend on my quickness to detect self insult or injury

Knowing I can sink into depravity if I took the wrong path

My mystical taste of ecstasy turns what I truly desire into tragedy and violence

The intensity of my nature is my vice.

 

 

Still I restrain

Self-discipline, I recognize the qualities in other compared to my very own

I respect those who want to be respected

I make a difference in lives of all those who cross mine, for good or bad with their consent

Great passion for life runs in and out of me, my will power can be used for good or great evil.

Can only be destroyed by sincere emotion

 

Seduction, venom, obstinate, determined and Magnetic

This is who I am, this is where I stand  

 

I am a SCORPIO

 

Author's Note

Sometimes i feel like i have great power, manipulative. Never for harm. Comment please :)

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Hmm...your poem tells it explicitly. I was tangled with a Scorpio, and it is one dangerous encounter that I will never forget. It quite possible changed me. As a writer, I am inspired to duplicate your poetic idea for myself the fish. Thanks for sharing.

[DBrown]

Nice poem....Do you speak for all Scorpio's or is this one just for how you are?

[Arutha]

Okay, so first off this is a pretty awesome poem. It flowed fantastically, and the themes were intriguing. I wish I was something cool... but alas I am the fish ;-/

I confess, I forgot having seen the name while I was reading the poem, and I was completely convinced that it was about a succubus until I got to the end. Don't hate me! That's just what I thought, lol. This was the line where I decided on that as the underlying theme: "I possess penetrating eyes that make any soul feel naked and defenseless before me." At any rate, here are a couple of things I noticed:

"are shown with extreme malice..." I wonder how this would sound if you replaced "with" with "through the."

"My mystical taste of ecstasy turns what I truly desire into tragedy and violence." This was one of my favorite lines. I think even us fishes have a little of this in us, which makes it all the more profound for it's relate-ability. ;-P

"and loose control..." should be "lose."

"I recognize the qualities in other compared to my very own..." should be "others."

"...for good or bad with their consent..." This is interesting to me; I wonder if you could work in something like "...with their [oft-unwitting] consent..." It seems like (at least speaking from a male's perspective) that a lot of times we get taken in by sexual desire without really realizing it, subconsciously I guess.

Oh, and a topic you can write about... hm, that's a tough one. I've always found the topic of what's real and what's just in our heads really interesting. It can lead into some pretty gnarly abstraction. ;-D Good luck!

[EvErEyEs]

Loved the review! Thank you ;)

[Aristede Craig Jr]

Its the life of a scorpio hun we do feel see all these things. .... Beauty just don't sting yourself to much you might get worse than a lil dizzy

[Horizon K.]

Very Scorpio! Well done:)

[Jagged memory]

Really deep cool write, love the imagery and deepness. Very creative story.

[Ohhhwillow]

This is dark and seductive right from the opening line! I love the line "the intensity of my nature is my vice", just great

[Siren]

I really like the use of color. From dark and unholy to loud and ecstatic, the colors show off your writing, the way a set shows off a play. You've done great! Do another, yes?

[Lover Of Words]

like this

[de_maruf]

fine