Moods

sit there, arms folded about your knees

sit there and sulk

and still you are beautiful even when your mood

settles on your face like bad makeup

your glances dance with the fire of your anger

and your tongue spews threats and accusations

but your beauty shields me from all harm

and i find wonder even in your wrath

 

cry. . . . blackmail me with tears knowing my heart

is your ransom already paid

advertise your disappointment with a trembling lip

and sniff your sadness with jerky breaths

you will soon want refuge in my arms

and rest your head on my shoulder asking for promises

then there will be crumpled sheets and anguished gasps

as you lock me within your legs and lift your eyes to god

 

pout . . . .  no offense is greater than one against you

you know you seduce with a look over your shoulder

you use your beauty as a weapon and you invade at will

if i refuse, countless hearts are waiting for you to happen in

come, let us pretend again that all is well

and you can move upon me with clenched teeth

and whimper before you collapse upon my chest and lie about love

and i can believe it again and cherish a hope about someday

Reviews

[Tex]

I loved this.

Having dyslexia and having given up on learning in school I can not speak to construct, but I can speak to honesty, truth, the emotion the piece brings to the fore for me. It is all there.

The layers of dysfunction in this are fascinating. In my mind I see a man older than his lover, somewhat chauvinistic, dealing with his lover in a somewhat condescending way. But before we get a chance to feel sorry for her we learn that she is manipulative and uses her charms to get what she needs from the relationship. The two dance their dysfunctional dance in perfect step, it is a dance they have created and they know the steps well. All the same the lingering doubt remains, the truth can not be avoided. They are pretending. He is hoping, we get a sense of longing for honesty and something more authentic. We are left to wonder, is she playing him or does she feel the same? And, would he change the steps to this dance if given the opportunity?

Wonderful. Just pulls you right in.

If this is who you are... then how painful it must have been for you to review my poem. Thank you for being so nice about it.

[DrD]

Nicholas, I have become calloused to difficult things because yes, this is who I am. I am also very grateful for your marvelous review and insights.

[Tina Kline]

A very strong and emotional poem. Relationships are never perfect because people are not perfect but we can dream.....I really enjoyed this.

[DrD]

Thanks for your visit, Tina. I appreciate your kind words.

[Tina Kline]

You're very welcome.

[Im His Daughter]

this was awesome, I loved the imagry of her sitting there pouting.. trying to get her way through her little hissy.. I think this is what true love is from his side, I see it at least..

[DrD]

You see it correctly and I'm so glad you visited. Taank you for the kind words.

[Jane Dougherty]

I like the emotion in this one. That image of pretending everything is not what it is, comes over very strongly.

[DrD]

Ay, what a delightful cailín óg ye are. I love having you visit just as I will be soon viewing more of your work.

[Jane Dougherty]

Not so much óg anymore :) If you want to read my poems though you'll have to go to my blog as I took them down here.
http://janedougherty.wordpress.com/

[DrD]

That I will

[Jane Dougherty]

I look forward to your visit. Must try to tidy up that blog...

[Patricia]

I just love the piece! It draws you in and keeps you in after you are finished reading it. I love the analogies and metaphors but they were more than that, they had a realness, an understandable realness. The ending was perfect! You are such an excellent poet!

[DrD]

You're too kind, Patricia. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this one.

[Patricia]

:))))))))))

[John]

Only love can justify and explain the attention to detail as most of us would be tempted to chuck a handkerchief at the beauty exquisitely modelling her moods and tell her to sort herself out. I think what makes this poem stand out is the note of irony which suggest a game being played out - the poet has his muse and the muse has his attention. It is an exquisitely crafted piece of writing.

[DrD]

You're most kind and I truly appreciate your visit. Thank you.

[John Anderson]

This is so well done with vivid imagery and a very powerful delivery. A praiseworthy poem

[DrD]

Thanks, John. I haven't seen you here before and I hope you'll return just as I will be reviewing your work.

[Blue]

The best poem I've read in months! Absolutely stunning and deliriously sexy. Wow. And this reflects your character, DrD. Thanks for letting us glimpse into your private world of beautiful insights.

[DrD]

You're most kind and I deeply appreciate you taking the time to visit.

[Ladysue]

I was drawn into their story..This was truly moving, honest and written with an discerning voice..an excellent write.

[DrD]

Thanks for coming by and leaving your most generous words.

[s y e]

This is extremely honest DrD -- It's quite an emotional read too, if you read that far into it.

"and still you are beautiful even when your mood
settles on your face like bad makeup."

-- this are extremely amazing lines. I don't think that we always need to wear make-up, some girls think that they need to wear make up no matter what, but it's good when we have someone who loves us for us. To know that we are able to be ourselves and not someone else hiding underneath all that makeup and stuff.

I loved this DrD -- you've done a beautiful job.

[DrD]

thank you for taking the time to read this and I hope you'lll return soon.

[Rida Sarwar]

wow! beautiful :)

[DrD]

Thanks for being here and your kind words. I hope you return soon.