Moods

sit there, arms folded about your knees

sit there and sulk

and still you are beautiful even when your mood

settles on your face like bad makeup

your glances dance with the fire of your anger

and your tongue spews threats and accusations

but your beauty shields me from all harm

and i find wonder even in your wrath

 

cry. . . . blackmail me with tears knowing my heart

is your ransom already paid

advertise your disappointment with a trembling lip

and sniff your sadness with jerky breaths

you will soon want refuge in my arms

and rest your head on my shoulder asking for promises

then there will be crumpled sheets and anguished gasps

as you lock me within your legs and lift your eyes to god

 

pout . . . .  no offense is greater than one against you

you know you seduce with a look over your shoulder

you use your beauty as a weapon and you invade at will

if i refuse, countless hearts are waiting for you to happen in

come, let us pretend again that all is well

and you can move upon me with clenched teeth

and whimper before you collapse upon my chest and lie about love

and i can believe it again and cherish a hope about someday

Reviews

[Tex]

I loved this.

Having dyslexia and having given up on learning in school I can not speak to construct, but I can speak to honesty, truth, the emotion the piece brings to the fore for me. It is all there.

The layers of dysfunction in this are fascinating. In my mind I see a man older than his lover, somewhat chauvinistic, dealing with his lover in a somewhat condescending way. But before we get a chance to feel sorry for her we learn that she is manipulative and uses her charms to get what she needs from the relationship. The two dance their dysfunctional dance in perfect step, it is a dance they have created and they know the steps well. All the same the lingering doubt remains, the truth can not be avoided. They are pretending. He is hoping, we get a sense of longing for honesty and something more authentic. We are left to wonder, is she playing him or does she feel the same? And, would he change the steps to this dance if given the opportunity?

Wonderful. Just pulls you right in.

If this is who you are... then how painful it must have been for you to review my poem. Thank you for being so nice about it.

[DrD]

Nicholas, I have become calloused to difficult things because yes, this is who I am. I am also very grateful for your marvelous review and insights.

[Corset]

"cry. . . . blackmail me with tears knowing my heart
is your ransom already paid
advertise your disappointment with a trembling lip
and sniff your sadness with jerky breaths
you will soon want refuge in my arms"

Lord help the woman who is married to the man with this kind of knowledge of love and a woman's heart,
she will be blessed and cursed by her own need of him.

[DrD]

Thank you, Corset. We're not supposed to understand women, just love them.

[Corset]

sounds like a perfect plan :) don't even try lol, just do...

[B.J]

I like your wording and creative way of looking at life in moods of reality

[TL Boehm]

blackmail me with tears knowing my heart
is your ransom already paid
A beautiful and sad write.

[DrD]

Sorry I'm not around much these days, TL. I miss everyone but I like to eat, you know? Thanks for being here and leaving such kind words behind.

[audrie]

True love is when times like these can still be romantic. Patience, trust and communication are the three most important components in a healthy relationship. This sounds like you have one with this relation. This tells that you truly love her- even with all of her flaws. enjoyed reading this

[DrD]

Thank you. You're most kind.

[Cristina]

In a way I feel like this is written about me, I am so similar to that woman and hmm... I feel sorry for being this woman, that causes so much pain, unnecessary drama. This poem is really beautiful!

[DrD]

Thank you, Cristina. Your confession only proves you are a woman, unpredictable and moody. It's our job as men to understand and love you for it.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Oh this is so good! The love is there first and foremost and you have the gift of knowing just what this person needs - space and time and maybe just to prettily stew! Haha. I can only hope that someone will look at me with this incite. I put it in my favorites! Awesome capture.

[DrD]

Thank you. You'r most kind.

[WritersRankings]

I can relate falling for women with mood disorders, though this was a very clever piece. You seized the drama of real moods and it made for a nice read.

[DrD]

Thanks for visiting and such a kind review.

[Ally Monique]

Lovely poem. I agree with Tex, the dysfunction in this poem IS fascinating! No matter the mood of this character, the narrator never leaves their side. If we love someone enough, we fall in love with all their moods and quirks, and our mind finds a way to romanticize their faults- shaping them to our liking. In a sense, we create our own part of that other person that doesn't exist.
I loved this, keep writing :)

[DrD]

Thank you, Ally. I'm pleased that you stopped by.

[J.P. Bristow]

This was very reminiscent of Nabokov. Beautifully uncomfortable....like blowing the peroxide on a scraped knee. Well done.

[DrD]

I'm glad you liked it. I'm still exploring your work.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The poem can be about a girl that always gets her way while she keeps her lover on the side lines ready for her will that she knows how to maneuver.

Your writing style brings it all together very nicely.

Thanks for inviting me to read your very well written master piece.

[DrD]

I appreciate your visit and wonderful review.