Through the murkiness of days

Shadows ahead,

the path vague,

the only sounds

are wheels

of uncertainty.

With first steps

fear grips,

limbs tremble,

then a blackbird

on a low limb,

deliberates,

deduces,

declares

out loud

life my friend,

welcome to life.

Reviews

[B. Boileau]

I found this somewhat inspirational. Through the shadows and the sound of life's wheels spinning. We walk not knowing what the future brings. Yet this is life... so we keep going. A beautiful write and a pleasant read.
thank you Cherry
bill

[Cherry]

Thank you for reading and the review.

[R Smith]

welcome to life and a warm welcome from me to your lovely poetry :)

[Cherry]

Thank you.

[Chris]

I like the "view" you share... welcome. welcome to life.

[Cherry]

Thank you.

[alifeacoustic]

The blackbird is wise. It knows that life is uncertain, a challenge at every turn and full of vagueness and shadows, but we all would get nowhere without those first steps in the right direction, which are always full of trepidation, until we see we have chosen well and the path is safe for now.
Beautifully written, with a soft flowing feel that plays well against the trepidation felt. Lovely :)

[Cherry]

Thank you.

[andrew mitchell]

How the positivity of a Blackbird singing can bring you out of a negative trance, I often stop what I'm doing just to hear their sounds as they for generations have bred in our garden. Quite tame too. Anyway back to the poem A lovely write!

[Cherry]

Thank you for your review.

[WillGrant]

I like this piece. I don't normally read poems but the more I read on this site from good writers like yourself I have to admit I'm starting to enjoy them. This was very powerful. Thanks for sharing

[Cherry]

Thanks, I'm grateful for the review.

[Ted Kniffen]

I like this poem. The vagueness appeals to me. I like atmospheric poems (this qualifies). The only thing I would recommend is removing the line 'of his own'. I believe it will read better without it. Lovely piece though, keep writing

Ted

[Cherry]

I must agree with you. Thank you for the review and for pointing that out.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

A "Fog ahead" your lines reveals the truth. The combination of the words is perfect & flow is really very good. Nice One!

[Cherry]

Thank you.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

after deliberation, the vagueness finds some clarity, and the fear subsides. then it is time to hit life head on...and just feel our way through the fog.

j.

[Cherry]

I'm so happy you got this. Thanks.

[M P Ramesh]

Cherry,
Life .... It abducts me to the Kailash peaks of Himalayas

Thanks,,
M P Ramesh

[Cherry]

Thanks for checking it out.