Song of the Stars

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Sing, through the flowing tears,
And laugh though it aches,
ask again for love in rejection's face
into the sun's first brilliant rays

Peer into that song and hear its heart
take along these raindrops' prisms
let them glow in the dark of night
its tune your comfort and companion

Hold your friend deep within your soul,
journey into the promise tomorrow holds,
fear fades with the passing of the storms,
the clouds disperse in the breath of hope.

Sleep softly, gently sing your lullaby
Wipe those tears that no one spies.
For sure your smile glows bright gold
in the sun's fading glory at twilight's dawn.

Into the distant shimmering sea
let dreams sail into the misty dusk
fond thoughts and dewdrop wishes
cared for by the twinkle of starry night.





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Reviews

[Ken e Bujold]

Nice work Fred. See from the stats it was first birthed in 2011. Curious if you took a serious surgeon's scalpel to that version or just a few nips and tucks as it were.

Like the image, of "Sing, through the flowing tears/and laugh though it aches" good advice for everyone. As is the ending verse with the "let dreams sail into the misty dusk", which to me reads not as abandoning your dreams but rather setting them free.

Really enjoyed the read. Thanks for the day's opening poem

[redd Brick Keshner]

Thank you Ken. So glad that the read was enjoyable.

[Soren]

Fred this one hit me hard. Beyond opposing words like twilights dawn, that I loved not only in the opposition but the ending of hope, it rang so true. I have always loved the night and its serenity, peace and calm. The last stanza was mystical and dream like. Loved it

[redd Brick Keshner]

Hey Soren, thanks. I tend to think of it as a furthering along of Wynken, Blynken and Nod is a couple of ways and possibly more on other wavelengths.

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful imagery and wisdom combined in this write Freds. Final stanza a calming way took at rejection. Nice job here in an emotional write.

Chris

[redd Brick Keshner]

Thanks Chris. Much appreciated visit and exchange of thoughts. /Freds.

[Chris Shaw]

Oops sorry about the typos. Small phone screen and tired eyes. Well that's my excuse.

A calming way to look at rejection is what I meant :)

[J. C. Koch]

Well, I really liked the imagery and the message of this poem, but there were a few points where the flow of the words felt a little bit rough. Still enjoyed the read.

[Kerry O'Connor]

ask again for love in rejection's face...

These are the words which leap out at me from the poem. It takes a mighty dose of the unconditional kind of love to get this right...

Grand ideas expressed in a beautiful piece of writing.