Buttered

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blunt-edged butter knives
scrape across brittle landscapes
on freshly overtoasted slices of multigrain loaves

each lumpy mound of spreadable dairy
refuses to swathe evenly, amicably

momentary paralysis plagues
this expedition many times over
without consolation or apology

 

 

 

 

 

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Reviews

[Dennis Shanaberg]

For some reason, this makes me want to laugh a little, just the almost scientific way you've examined the spreading of butter on bread. It really is an amazing piece. I think it'd be amazing even for like a commercial for something for butter. Like this poem read as a close up of a butter knife spreading butter in soft light, and then zoom out to maybe Fabio spreading it as "I can't believe it's not butter" flashes on the screen.
Brilliantly done though, you've made my attempts at making toast into an art. Congrats.

[MuSe Ampoule]

cute playful work with tangible images. well done!

[Ian Faraway]

I like how poetic you make a simple task. How metaphoric and almost gentle, passionate (almost) with its words.

[xLeonardx]

Very nice! I love how you can get fascinated by the small things. Your choice of words always amazes me and so do you. Bravo!

[Crowley]

I just wrote my own butter poem last week...thats why I am particularly in love with this one. For some reason butter comes up in my poems alot...maybe its the smooth oily goodness, maybe its the lubricative quality....maybe its all the things oh so sinful I can cook with it. Whatever it is, butter makes for good poetry...I think. Hail butter!!!!...and hail to your marvelous buttery write!

[T. J. Blackburn]

Bravo. Nicely done.

[Christopher.Holmberg]

intellectually concise, brilliant piece. 10/10

[Jordan]

That's why you let your butter sit out at room temperature, Beezy! The poem itself was nice, though.

[Charles]

Many poets overlook commonplace topics when they write. This is a good example of how much pleasure can be found in something as every day as buttering a piece of toast. Good analogies and a nice pace. Good work.

[OT]

very visual, I actually felt a shiver with the knife being dragged along brittle sand, almost like nails on a blackboard. You extend descriptions very well, for example the extension of simply butter to "each lumpy mound of spreadable dairy". very nice!!!