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robotic.... choppy techno feel... pretend artificial intelligent created poem. Enjoy.

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extend life, a soul
go the never-see walls
friends on the wend
little place believe hastily
across around behind SIT
solemn forgetfulness sweet
summer simmering cool
wait end much talk
sunlight gold, sorrow old
hidden lines together shared
wayward journey's end



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Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I have to say that computers will never be able to write poetry:) They may be able to string words together but the emotion will always be lacking. This was fun Fred’s although I have to say there is nothing fun in my opinion about artificial intelligence. That is plain scary. Have a great day.

Chris

[Red Brick Keshner]

I too share that sentiment dear Chris! Thanks for dropping by and sharing your most welcome comments.
Freds

[Relic]

AI has no root in past years and therefor hasn't got the emotions that form a personality that comes with those experiences. It's sort of like an elephant painting pictures with its trunk. :)

[Red Brick Keshner]

That is so comforting to hear! Thanks so much Relic.

[keith]

i am lesdislic (my mind sees words not on print as well backwards at times) HA!
no kidding it SUKS!
some things i have no problem ... others? this mouse trap mind of mine is challenging

this piece fits! the continual flow unmetered unrhymed is as you say 'solemn forgetfulness sweet'
i see i know i comprende amigo!

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thanks for validating that mind set. There are people enough that language use is uncommon!

[Ciara]

If AI learned to write poetry I have a feeling it might be something like this.
Cool concept.

[Red Brick Keshner]

AI does write poetry in some apps! And at times sounds much like Yoda.

[Ciara]

Lol! No way! I need to find these apps.
:)

[Soren]

Red you've got me with a type of poem that I was not familiar with. I am struck by the internal rhyming and how the last word ties up the first in the rhyme. The last word of the first line rhymes with the first word of the second. A near rhyme with the first on the third line and its last word. I love the rhyme of the first word with the last word which to me ties the beginning to the end. "extend life" to the "journey's end" To me this is a beautiful thought.

[Red Brick Keshner]

That was the most gratifying observation Soren, how you picked those elements out like a sniper, that's just a wow of infinite proportions. It's not a thing that is taken note of anymore but the pleasure it brings and the tying of the beginning and end is a device that gives a nice bow of a finish as you have stated. Thank you most kindly!

[lightsong]

"extend life, a soul
go the never-see walls"

enough for me to appreciate your poem. challenge yourself, break the limits, go beyond the eyes, no fear, defeat your demons, overcome yourself... and win... win yourself before anything else. Wonderful poem my friend, it fills the heart with enthusiasm. 12 years ago and still shines as genuine as it is.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thanks kindly, that means so much to hear.

[lightsong]

You are welcome :>

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. when the journey is shared ... we're cared for ... this is a pretty amazing piece of writing ... it has managed to ensnare quite a few moments within its unassuming universe ...

[Red Brick Keshner]

Too bad after having left the café there has been no sign of a return or even that of a quick drop by.