Look at these tears

a Lacrimal etude.

`

 

 

Crystalline transparence,
clear droplets forming -

welling, rippling, sparkling
in the faint glow
on the dance-floor

cheek to cheek
in Newton's get-up

shoulder to shoulder
on a marbled trail

across the aisle of union
where vows exchange
soaking parched earth

windows releasing
my soul to walk
upon the footpath
of Tomorrow.

 

 

 

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Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Stunning visuals here as the bride and groom took to the dance floor. All eyes on them. And yes, I saw the welling of the tears as they embraced on their first day as man and wife. We all like a good wedding. Pleased I could take a peep in at the reception. Thanks for sharing this older piece Frederick.

Chris

[Red Brick Keshner]

Wow, Chris! Continually amazed by your perceptive reading. Brings me back both to memories as well as the writing process of this particular piece. Many thanks, Frederick.

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome. Good to give older poems a breath of fresh air. They like to breathe you know :))

[Red Brick Keshner]

So true! Thanks again.

[Relic]

I like the way you've encapsulated single moments together like separate tears that fall. This is great writing. :)

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thank you, kindly.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Chris I has to back and read again wow to write a life time with simple words that came be more as you read love the imagery you convey I think I must go back and read again.
Thank you for sharing.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thank you, Mauricio. Please do go back and read again and enjoy. Thank you.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I love writes you have to read again because you might have missed something

[lightsong]

Wow! such power in your words faith, release, then surrendering, and when surrender comes, though new doors, new revelations, new awareness. re-birth what I see through your lines. taking back your power and rising like the phoenix~ strong and stirring poem.

Hello there my friend :>

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thank you, lightsong. Your kind words lift up the writer's spirits. Cheers.

[Geon Quuin]

Give me a feel of a wedding. Language was simple, yet sophisticated. Or cryptic. or confusing. sophisticated sounds a little better. let's go with that.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Spot on! Clear as day, ain't it. Hehe, thanks for your vote of sophistication. When something significant is happening in our lives, we take it a bit theatrically - and that is where we can push it up a notch in sophistication. You are much appreciated. Cheers.

[Chaos_Collector]

The flow of this poem is like water coming down a river and you've got nice diction going on here. Write on

Chaos_Collector

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thank you for your kind words, C-C. You are much appreciated. Cheers :-)

[Chaos_Collector]

You're welcome my fell poet :)

Chaos_Collector

[Robby DeLuca]

I usually don't like blank verse, but I think this is great!

[Red Brick Keshner]

Tell you the truth, Rob, I don't either. But some poems thrive better in them. And when a situation like that arises, I yield, just to keep peace with the Muse & to show some consideration for each poem's individuality & unique needs.

Thanks for reading & responding. See you 'round the site, and better yet on another of our poems & discussions. Cheers!

[Admiral Kirk]

Wow, that's beautiful... I love it... :P

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thank you kindly. You are much appreciated, Hugo.

[Admiral Kirk]

:D You're very welcome. :)

[Tasha]

Truly beautiful and worded well. Well done.
~Tasha

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thanks Tasha! Your kind words are much appreciated, as always. Cheers.

[Tasha]

You are very welcome. It is always a pleasure. Cheers.

[ObscurityNone]

Worded well.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Many thanks :-)