The Doll's Curse

He sold his soul for a doll.

 Doomed to live, doomed to die
doomed to turn his life awry
for the doll's beauty he does cry
and his descendants' fate he will buy.

Turning and yearning,
their fate will be burning
in glass eyes that are churning
inside with their life stirring.

Past passes
and descendants come in masses,
only one whose love amasses
for the doll, returned, not lasts.

Descendant's soul sucked
into the doll, she is shucked,
and her body will be chucked
and doll, to life, will buck.

Only way to save
is the body so crav'd
until unto another a slave
and descendant's life waiv'd.

Author's Note

Actually written for a continuous story I created. This was hard to write.
It was about a man who cursed his family by selling his soul to the devil for the most perfect doll. In turn, the first girl in his family will be cursed to fall in love with an animated doll, who will take her soul for the Devil.

Reviews

[Inyourshadow]

Dark ink used for this piece I feel, the depth of his sin penned within the lines ~

for the doll's beauty he does cry
and his descendants' fate he will buy.

remove ' he ' not required spoils the flow, the story sounds very interesting have a poem about a china doll but not about a china doll I will have to port it over from my other site. Love this, post the story sounds interesting. keep em' coming

[ScaryTrees]

i love the story
but also feel the rhyme is a tad overbearing
don't let it take over
lot's of potential and a great concept

[w2de35657u687y4324rf]

Hmmm very interesting concept. You shouldn't try to force your rhyme but inverting sentence structure, though. It's still a fine piece, of course! The last stanza really shows us how screwed up the 'devil' is with the infinite life of the curse. Also, you were able to tell the whole story, very fine indeed!