Rise

Concrete slathered the earth,

purging soil into darkness.

All living plants

suffocated from

the lack of light.

Roots embedded in

the ground withered.

Petals and grasses

lost their color.

Everything died.

 

Before the concrete was laid,

a seed was planted

in the fertile and moist soil.

Fed by the sun’s warmth

and the earth’s damp cradle;

the seedling consumed its fill.

It poked its head from

the seed’s shell.

Then, the concrete was laid.

The seedling was drowned

by darkness.

 

Everything died but the seedling.

Its roots remained strong.

it grew taller,

its head slithering up

from between the concrete.

The stone was strong,

but the seedling was stronger.

The concrete cracked

and split open

upon the seedling’s exit.

Stone clattered noisily

over the cement and the grass.

The seedling kept growing.

Its stalk rose to meet the sun.

Its leaves parted way

for the slightest hint

of a yellow flower.

 

It grew.

Past death. Past darkness.

Past concrete.

It bloomed.

A flower’s head,

wide and opening,

to the sun.

Even threatened by destruction,

it stayed steadfast.

The sunflower continued

to rise towards the sun.

Author's Note

Rise towards the sun and bloom as you were meant to.

Reviews

[Rahul]

It's a long but very deep and realistic write. I must say you've a great talent of writing than i've.

[E.V. Black]

Don't say that! I have faith that your writing is great. Remember that everybody has different experiences. These experiences shape our take on the world. It's only natural that, because of this, people will write in different ways. Your writing is beautiful in its own way. Don't lose faith in yourself for one second! Your writing is special to the world.

About this poem: it's funny, because I don't think it's one of my best. I feel that it could have been more developed and elongated (with detail). It seemed to be good at this length. However, I view that I wrote it rather impatiently.

I thank you for your review. Soon I will review your writing. Right now I have some business to attend to.

[Rahul]

you're awesome :)
thanks a lot. you're really a great one and i must say you've a great soul :)
not to worry, whenever you get your time, feel free to read mine one's ...i appreciated your kind words :)
have a great time with your business :). by the waym if you don;t mind may i know what kinda business you do...?

[E.V. Black]

No. YOU are the great soul.
As to my business, I'd rather not say.