This Time

Another friend

walked into my life

last month.

She brightened my day

every time we talked.

It was a joy

to make her laugh

and to see her smile.

It was not to last.

 

Her voice faded into

uncomfortable silence.

We couldn’t wear it right

because it felt too tight.

This time I took action

and confronted her.

To my face,

she told me honest truth.

The others have never

been straightforward.

They sneaked about

in the cover of night,

hoping not to be caught.

 

Surprisingly,

the truth didn’t hurt.

It only confirmed

what I had suspected:

we were no longer friends.

It wasn’t painful,

only a deep relief

had been lifted

from my shoulders.

This time

the parting of friends

was happy for me.

It may have been

a relief for you too,

but in a different way.

In the end,

we conflicted too much.

You did not respect me;

yet, I respect you.

If that’s that, so be it.

 

This time it was different,

and I’m better off

without you.

Author's Note

It hurt, but it doesn't hurt that much now that we're apart.

Reviews

[Rahul]

This poem seemed based on you a bit not sure...lol :) that;s a great too because here i can see some realness's of life, the depth of your words. nicely penned once again...100/100

[E.V. Black]

Every poem I pen contains at least some part of me. This is wholly 100% me.
Thank you so much for your review!

[Kyle J. Lawson]

This seems like a way you're dealing with a broken friendship. I will say I've had my share of broken friendships and this is the perfect way to vent it.

[E.V. Black]

It was a broken friendship. Unfortunately, my friend couldn't gauge the depth of my love for her. She turned a blind eye to me and left me alone in the dust. At least, we have parted ways, and I'm none the worse for wear.

Thank you for your review!

[Kyle J. Lawson]

You're welcome. :)

[I Cast a Shadow]

Hmm. I liked the story of friendship in this. I think it could be stronger if you used more descriptive language because it seems very vague overall. I am also unsure of your overall purpose here but if I were to tell you what I think your purpose is, I would say that it is to tell the story of a friendship that went awry. If I am correct in this analysis, to make it stronger you might strengthen the sections individually that tell a particular story about a time in the relationship. Maybe start the poem with the ending and then work backwards. There is a lot you can do with this poem before you can be done with it haha. I love the idea though. I should write more poetry about friendships gone wrong. I have several.

[E.V. Black]

Thank you for your review! It is greatly appreciated.
Actually, this poem was meant to be vague. I only wanted to skim the surface of the relationship and the feelings in which I felt. However, I think your suggestions are simply grand! I would love to begin at the end and work backwards. It would certainly prove to be a very effective way in drawing readers in, especially in the regard of telling a story. I do think that I will try it one day in the future...