Moving In

David and Hallie move in together, Hallie finds the paper Christian gave her for the cooking contest. It's funny I'm writing this cause I'm about to move in with my bf too lol. :)

 

Moving In

 

 

“It’s crooked,” David said tilting his head at the Eve of St. John painting, which he insisted looked like Hallie as a little girl. Not that he knew her as a little girl.

 

“It is not!” Hallie giggled sitting on top of David’s shoulders. She reached up to try and adjust it again. Moving into the newly built luxury condominium had been more fun than she thought. David originally wanted to hire movers but Hallie pleaded that they just do it themselves, and of course Hallie always got what she wanted.

 

It was only a few miles away from Stanford, David’s law school, with a view of the Golden Gate Bridge, plus tons of daunting San Francisco city buildings. Hallie preferred the beach personally, but as her parents said, it was time to grow up. She had nothing to complain about, the place looked more like a vacation resort than just a place to live. There were three enormous swimming pools, a well equipped gym, and that fake rustic European feel to it with random statues and fountains scattered across the property. Inside it had high ceilings, marble floors, and best of all a fantastic kitchen to invent new recipes, or at least experiment in.

 

Besides Hallie’s eight suitcases of clothing, David’s enormous salt water fish tank, and a few other personal things here and there, all of the furniture was moved in. Now they just trying to make it more like their home as much as possible, and not a huge empty space.

 

David hoisted Hallie off of his shoulders back onto the floor. Hallie shivered as her bare feet landed on the marbled floor. She realized she was going to miss her cozy, carpeted, three story beach house, and being five minutes away from school, but they had looked at several places, and this one was the best, she just wasn’t sure for who. At the moment she couldn’t care less where she lived, as long as it wasn’t with Abby anymore.

Abby was the sweetest friend a girl could hope for, and had practically saved her life the other week when Hallie had a total melt down, but maybe she wouldn’t have had the meltdown at all if it hadn’t been for Abby pushing her to be with Christian. Alright so it wasn’t Abby’s fault that Hallie cheated, but even after everything she was still pushing her to be with Christian. After Abby and her friends couldn’t keep her mouth shut during the pedicure at Paint Job, it became the breaking point for Hallie to move in with David. She said her brief goodbyes, and here she was a week later with a brand new roommate, a brand new life really.

Scary as it was, it was like her and David were practically married. It was somewhat exciting, although seeing that she hadn’t exactly been girlfriend of the year, it also scared the s**t out of her, but hey it was only January.

“I found this when we were clearing out your house,” David said pulling a crumbled piece of paper out of his pocket. Once he smoothed it out and the writing became legible, Hallie nearly had a heart attack when she saw what it was.

 

“2009” Los Angeles Annual Cooking Competition” was printed across the wrinkled piece of paper given to her none other than Christian that rainy day in the graveyard.

 

 

 

 

“It’s still not too late to enter, but I’m not so sure how you’d do, I bet there would be some major competition.”

Of course there would be some major competition, that’s what competing was all about, it was funny how Christian fully believed in her, and David thought she shouldn’t even waste her time. She ignored David’s negativity, and remembered how sure Christian was about her.

“When is it?” Hallie demanded.

“Next week.”

Hallie leaned over reading the details, which said that the contest was based on who could make the best dessert. It could be anything from cookies, to cakes, to pies, and the judging would be based on presentation, aesthetics, and whichever one tasted best of course.

“I have to think of something,” Hallie said snatching a notepad and pen and going into their partially furnished office to rack her brain.

“It says the first prize is two thousand dollars worth of cooking supplies. This is stupid, I can just buy you that!” David called after her.

“I want to win it myself, I want to do something with my talent.”

“Whatever makes you happy,” David mumbled. Hallie could hear his eyes rolling without looking at him.

The thing that would make her happy was for him to realize that she wanted to do something meaningful, something she was passionate about. Why was that so difficult for him to understand? She didn’t know what on earth could make her happy, here David was offering to buy first prize for her, and she was still unsatisfied with him. Was it possible that she could never be fully happy with him? That no matter how many gifts he bestowed upon her there was still a small irritating feeling of uncertainty underneath it all? She wasn’t sure, but scrutinizing it so much brought forth a fascinating idea what she would create for the competition next week.

 

Author's Note

I've been so freakin tired...so it might be badly written.

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

Oh dude! That was a change up! Comming from last chapter into this one! High Adrenaline rush to the calm and almost maddening environment of Halie and David's new digs.
Christian is going to go off the deepend, I just know it! But I think that deep end has Halie at the bottom of it. David is just a dumbass, who doesn't see life for what it really is. Snobby sort of prep.

As always, You are a master entertainer!

Keep it up!
Aaron

[MorganLyn]

No not badly written at all.. I can't believe hallie moved in with that idiot, but I can still see her second thoughts.. always good to keep the reader guessing.. great job with this one!

[Nazarea]

ok...this is great. I really like the story, but I feel like I'm missing something. Like, the first chapter (yeah, I read all of them, and yeah, I'm just now commenting...I'm kinda a bad person that way) was good, excellent, actually, but I felt like I was walking into the middle of something.
The story also seems just a bit disjointed, and I'm thinking that's your goal? I'm sure your gonna bring it back around and together.
I'm gonna be honest...I like Christian. He's a great character, tortured, past and all. I like Abby. And at times, I like Hallie. I think you need to work on her, make her a little less snobby and a bit more human. If she's in love with someone like Christian, she can't be a snobby rich girl all the time. Let us see that.
Ooh..and David sucks. I hate characters like him. Overall, its great, though

[thecoolone52]

yeah im waiting for the next chapter to see how christain's gona strike back against the bad guys.... im sure itll be exiciting....... i liked this chapter though........ and you got me wanting the next one....... so nice job.......... still workin on a title for you

[Mysteral - Night Prowle..]

Good chapter... not at all badly written. I didn't notice anything I felt necessary to comment on with the writing. It seems to be a quieter chapter, like a lull before the nest explosion with Christian. A little more character development to turn the reader even more against David. I was beginning to wonder if Hallie had forgotten the cookery competition.

btw, thanks for sending me the link to Paint Shop. Very interesting. Did you realise you just mentioned the place above (paragraph 6) calling it "Paint Job"

[ShadowWolf]

No, it is very well written! How perfectly you show David's shallowness, the belief that money can buy anything. And, too, distaining something that is personally important to her.