I'm Done

It’s not any different

It’s the same as before

You’re still not sorry

And I can’t take it anymore

You say it was a bad day

And how you just blew

Well, it was right in my face

And guess what, I’ve had enough too

So you can take mean words and issues

And go walk out that door

I don’t have to take this and you know what

I’m done, I won’t take this anymore

Reviews

[θεά]

Absolutely therapeutic Evelyn. Going through a tough time is never easy and when a person is being difficult it can really wreak havoc on your mind and health. So important that we shut doors to those who don't deserve to be inside anymore. Well said and firmly written. Love it.

[Evelynn]

Thank you so much

[Inanna]

I feel the pain and see the courage it takes to say you had enough and to walk away. Great one. Keep up the good work

[BlackPrince]

This is definitely a mind made up that will no longer put up with trash!

well done!

[Einstein Noodle]

spot on Evelynn! fiesty declaration .. not meant to be no one's whipping post ... no .. not ever! very cathartic write for me ... peace on ya!
E.

[Evelynn]

Thank you :)

[Chris Shaw]

Feisty and spot on. Enough is enough. Plenty more fish in the sea. Power in your words and no doubt therapeutic too. Nicely expressed.

Chris

[Evelynn]

Thank you very much!

[Meyanwieh Diana Queency]

Wow that's nice Evelyn. You need to move on no matter how the day seems to be.
Enough as you say. This is so uplifting and inspirational

[Evelynn]

Thank you so much

[Vicky]

Not sure if this is welcome, but I would want to know. So I'll insert my opinion where it was not asked and hope I don't offend.
That last bit--"I don't have to take this, and you know what, I'm done, I won't take this anymore"--breaks up the flow of the poem--which could be on purpose; I have done that, and if so, then excuse me while I go brush the taste of foot out of my mouth.
I am by no means an expert on poetry. In fact, it is VERY likely you've got years of experience on me in both reading and writing it. But I have been making songs since I was little, and I think of poetry in the same way. Measuring if a poem flows by whether it stays on a beat. This bit broke up the beat in my head, (too many syllables in the sentence,) and the poem ended before it could be remedied.
And since I appreciate when people offer solutions with their criticism, get ready for more unsolicited, possibly bad, advice:
Working off my songwriting equivalation (looked it up. Not a word. But I really think it should be) to poetry, another way to write this, that would stay on beat: "I don't have to take this, and you know what, I won't anymore. I'm done." Out of the ways to rearrange it, I think this one is the best.
Nitpicks? (Cause I'm a nag,) you've used 'this' and 'anymore' more than once, seemingly without form, which, in such a short amount of time, can feel repetitive.
And now for the good stuff:
I really liked the poem. My critic doesn't change that, just the way I experienced it. While I've recently found an appreciation for the ambiguity I used to loathe in poetry, I like how straightforward it is. I can understand what you're saying right of the bat, so I can relate without having to think about it too much. And trust me, I can relate.
Just read some of the other comments. Clearly this is just my opinion, so feel free to ignore it. (Hey, I overuse commas, who am I to talk?)
A bit more nervous about posting this, but I'll do it anyway. Hope this is helpful!
(Posted this and realised it's 3x longer than the poem itself!)

[Evelynn]

I did break up the flow of the poem on purpose because I thought that it was kind of like the situation. You've been in this cycle of abuse over and over again, and this poem is about breaking out of that. So, I thought it was appropriate and a bit symbolic. And you probably have way more experience than me, I have been seriously writing poetry for around four years. But, I too have been writing songs since I was little. They weren't good songs because they were in English and at the time I couldn't speak English well. Nor could I write in Chinese (still can't lol). Weirdly enough, when I write most of my poems, I am singing them and writing down the lyrics. So, most of my poems are actually songs that don't have music. And you're advice wasn't bad, if I had wanted to keep the flow, I would completely agree. And by the way, equivalation should definitely be a word, but I guess we will just have to stick to using the equivalent o. Thank you so much for letting me know you're opinion.

[Vicky]

1. I'd had an inkling that it was purposeful, but was unsure, so I commented. And I'm glad I did, because now I just like the poem even more. (Being able to interact with the creators of what I read is half the reason I'm here.)
I didn't use to understand symbolism. Probably why I was so clueless at poetry for so long. But I've developed an appreciation for it's subtlety, and anyone who can pull it off without being too obvious.
2. Joining the cafe, about a year ago, is really what jumpstarted my...participation in poetry. Before then I'd written no more than four terrible poems, either trying (and failing) to be profound, or get something too complex for my understanding out.
Weirdly enough, I sing most of my poems, too. And thanks for the support. I'm having a hard time coping with insanity that is the english language. Someone needs ti have words with the board. Also, you're very welcome.

[Vicky]

i just realized I keep saying 'I've recently found an appreciation for...'
i guess that only goes to show my lack of experience. lol

[Evelynn]

Thank you so much for reading! And I volunteer to talk to the board, but only if they have donuts.

[Vicky]

Those wackos probably opted for bagels!

[Evelynn]

I knew there was something wrong with them, but I just never imagined that they would do something so WRONG!

[Vicky]

Clearly they're unfit to make decisions. I think a coup is in order.

[Evelynn]

I am 100% behind you in this! No longer shall we be restricted by their incompetency to, to do anything! I DEMAND A REVOLUTION!

[Vicky]

Viva la revolucion!

[T.K.F]

When you try everything, and your efforts are not valued, it's better to walk away.

[Evelynn]

I completely agree with that seniment

[Phill Oz O'fee]

When enough is enough - poetically summarised in a short, shape conformational style - poignant and precise - well written! :-)

[Evelynn]

Thank you!

[AriesGirl]

First of all, so sorry for the late response to your read request.

This is completely lovely. I can relate to the frustration and anger in your words very personally, and I think that is a powerful effect for a writer to have. What a beautiful and entertaining read!

[Evelynn]

It's completely fine and thank you!

[Elizabeth]

I love the flow of the poem. It expresses the emotions of the writer beautifully, and truly is an amazing read.

[Evelynn]

Thank you!

[Elizabeth]

You're welcome :)